Most recent public comments by 2024 Kalli Bo https://writingpartners.net/users/152 https://writingpartners.net/documents/297?scroll_to=1112 https://writingpartners.net/documents/297?scroll_to=1112 Tue, 30 Apr 2024 12:02:09 -0400 https://writingpartners.net/documents/297?scroll_to=1096 https://writingpartners.net/documents/297?scroll_to=1096 Your text provides a good overview of the benefits and concerns surrounding vertical farming. One way to enhance your writing is by incorporating subordinate clauses to vary your sentence structure and add complexity to your ideas. For example, you wrote: "Vertical farming over the years has grown drastically in popularity due to its sustainability and yielding of high-quality produce, but critics worry about the nutritional value of the food, as well as the high levels of energy consumption that comes with running a vertical farm." In this sentence, you used a subordinate clause ("as well as the high levels of energy consumption that comes with running a vertical farm") to provide additional information about the concerns of critics. This helps to add depth to your writing and elaborate on the main idea. To further improve your writing, consider incorporating more subordinate clauses throughout your text. For instance, when discussing the advantages of vertical farming, you could say: "Vertical farming, which is a sustainable agricultural practice, has the potential to revolutionize the way we produce food." This sentence structure adds complexity and sophistication to your writing. As your awareness of the use of complex sentences and subordinate clauses grows, you will start to recognize why some writing sounds better than others. When we look at an accomplished author’s writing, we begin to understand why using the subordinate clause is so effective. As you begin to notice these things when you read, you can replicate what great authors do when you write. I encourage you to edit lines, sentences, and paragraphs in your text. If you are the owner of the document, you can double-click on any sentence or paragraph, edit and update. By incorporating subordinate clauses strategically, you can enhance the flow and clarity of your writing while showcasing a deeper understanding of the topic. Tue, 30 Apr 2024 12:02:09 -0400