Most recent public comments by Cole Donnelly https://writingpartners.net/users/154 https://writingpartners.net/documents/304?scroll_to=1105 https://writingpartners.net/documents/304?scroll_to=1105 Tue, 30 Apr 2024 12:00:45 -0400 https://writingpartners.net/documents/304?scroll_to=1095 https://writingpartners.net/documents/304?scroll_to=1095 In your writing, you have effectively used subordinate clauses to provide additional information and create complex sentences. For example, you wrote, "Vertical farms are quite expensive to build and confine upkeep on." This sentence contains a subordinate clause ("to build and confine upkeep on") that adds detail to the main clause. To further enhance your writing with subordinate clauses, consider incorporating them to show relationships between ideas, such as cause and effect, time or place transitions, and concessions in arguments. For instance, you could write, "Although vertical farms are costly to establish, the benefits they offer outweigh the initial investment." In this revised sentence, the subordinate clause "Although vertical farms are costly to establish" provides a contrasting viewpoint to the main clause. By varying your sentence structures with the use of subordinate clauses, you can add depth and sophistication to your writing. This will help you convey complex ideas more effectively and engage your readers. Remember, practice makes perfect, so keep experimenting with different sentence structures to find what works best for your writing style. As your awareness of the use of complex sentences and the subordinate clause grows, you will start to recognize why some writing sounds better than others. When we look at an accomplished author’s writing, we begin to understand why using the subordinate clause is so effective. As you begin to notice these things when you read, you can replicate what great authors do when you write. I encourage you to edit lines, sentences, and paragraphs in your text. If you are the owner of the document, you can double-click on any sentence or paragraph, edit, and update. Keep practicing and incorporating subordinate clauses to enhance the quality of your writing further. Tue, 30 Apr 2024 12:00:45 -0400