Most recent public comments by Mrs. Cindy Minnich https://writingpartners.net/users/254 https://writingpartners.net/documents/199?scroll_to=1748 https://writingpartners.net/documents/199?scroll_to=1748 Great! Here are three ways you might add sensory details to your writing, focusing on two senses: hearing and smelling. For hearing: 1. Imagine the sounds during your high school career counseling sessions. You might describe the ambient noise, such as the murmur of students talking in the hallway or the rustle of papers as the career counselor hands out brochures. These sounds can help set the scene and make the reader feel like they are in the room with you. 2. Think about the specific sounds you hear when you counsel your friends. Perhaps you could mention the soft, reassuring tone of your voice or the sound of your friends' appreciative laughter after your advice. These auditory clues can add depth to the emotional connections you describe. 3. Reflect on the noises when you read your books. The quiet turning of pages, the occasional creak of your chair, or even the background music you might play while reading can all contribute to a richer sensory experience for the reader. For smelling: 1. Describe the scent of the books you read. Is there a distinct smell of old paper or fresh ink that you notice when you open a new book? These olfactory details can evoke a strong sense of place and nostalgia. 2. Think about the smells associated with your high school environment. Perhaps the career counseling office has a specific scent, like the faint aroma of coffee or the clean, sterile smell of the room. Mentioning these can bring your reader closer to the setting. 3. Consider the smells during moments of realization or discussion with your parents. Maybe you recall the scent of dinner cooking in the background or the fragrance of a candle burning in the room. These sensory details can add layers to the emotional atmosphere of your narrative. Would you like to see more examples of the kinds of things you might add using the senses as your guide? Fri, 05 Jul 2024 11:00:03 -0400 https://writingpartners.net/documents/199?scroll_to=1747 https://writingpartners.net/documents/199?scroll_to=1747 Your description already effectively uses the sense of seeing, such as when you mention "I read many books on philosophy, new age perspectives, and psychology," which allows the reader to visualize you engaging with these texts. Additionally, you touch on the sense of touching when you talk about "helping people," which implies a hands-on approach to your interest. To strengthen your description further, you could add more details about the other senses. For example, you could describe the sounds you hear in your high school career counseling sessions, the smell of the books you read, the taste of a celebratory meal when you discover your interest, or the texture of the paper as you flip through your books. Would you like to see more examples of the kinds of things you might add using the senses as your guide? Fri, 05 Jul 2024 11:00:03 -0400