Comments by Jayden Vaughns Most recent public comments by Jayden Vaughns https://writingpartners.net/users/318 counter https://writingpartners.net/documents/6390?scroll_to=41039 https://writingpartners.net/documents/6390?scroll_to=41039 Although people want a NFL team, it's very likely that others would be against it, as there's many problems in their own states that the money could be used for. Wed, 19 Mar 2025 13:27:01 -0400 The owner matters https://writingpartners.net/documents/6390?scroll_to=41034 https://writingpartners.net/documents/6390?scroll_to=41034 The issues with many teams and why they are so prone to losing is that their owners are terrible people and terrible at the NFL Business. If states want a NFL at their city, they need someone with the right morals and wit to buy it Wed, 19 Mar 2025 13:23:02 -0400 It could possibly work https://writingpartners.net/documents/4996?scroll_to=40944 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4996?scroll_to=40944 Although the Charger's former stadium is very small, it was there stadium for a long time. And San Diego State's Football team has been lacking to say the least in wins. Tue, 18 Mar 2025 13:00:30 -0400 A counter argument to adding a team to Utah https://writingpartners.net/documents/5816?scroll_to=40943 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5816?scroll_to=40943 Although Utah seems like a good place, one could argue it would be really since we just added the Utah Hockey Club, and thoughts of adding a baseball team Tue, 18 Mar 2025 12:51:48 -0400 Orwell prediction https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=36018 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=36018 I think Orwell was using this to hint at his prediction of religion being left behind in the past. Obviously this is not true in todays life since we go to a Catholic school, and there's lots of world religions. Here is proof: https://religionnews.com/2025/02/03/what-could-be-worse-than-the-muslim-ban-plenty/ Tue, 04 Feb 2025 12:43:35 -0500 It's really insane that on just any normal day, a rocket can be launched toward the city and nobody suspects a thing. 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