Comments by Student Delaney Dolan

It's not just about providing food, it's about providing food with nutritional value.

Fri, 07 Mar 2025 20:57:54 -0500

Building bit by bit

Fri, 07 Mar 2025 20:57:02 -0500

Food is a basic necessity.

Fri, 07 Mar 2025 20:54:26 -0500

Food banks are so essential!

Fri, 07 Mar 2025 20:53:27 -0500

Temporary changes are not effective, they help for a certain amount of time, but we need to focus on long-term, local efforts.

Fri, 07 Mar 2025 20:52:13 -0500

Inflation has had huge affects on the purchasing power of food.

Fri, 07 Mar 2025 20:42:02 -0500

While the Constitution states that we have rights when detained, law enforcement may take advantage of those who do not know the law to get them to admit they are undocumented.

Sat, 01 Mar 2025 00:16:59 -0500

Looking for anyway to spend less money on human capital.

Sat, 01 Mar 2025 00:15:36 -0500

Mass deportation is a branch of racism.

Sat, 01 Mar 2025 00:14:36 -0500

At least in Utah, many white, rural, extreme conservative, farmers who voted for Trump are starting to have regrets because their farms are going to suffer which will result in them having a larger corporation buy them out to stay afloat.

Sat, 01 Mar 2025 00:13:26 -0500

Human Capital Exploitation

Sat, 01 Mar 2025 00:11:44 -0500

Immigrants build the economy! They support small-scale projects which are the engine of the American economy, and it allows for more job opportunities.

Sat, 01 Mar 2025 00:09:55 -0500

Corporate is the new Mom & Pop shops.

Sat, 01 Mar 2025 00:08:10 -0500

Politics are not always considerate of those building our economy.

Sat, 01 Mar 2025 00:05:44 -0500

Deportation is a major safety concern today for many families facing food insecurity.

Sat, 22 Feb 2025 01:42:18 -0500

Federal assistance programs are great, but more localized community efforts tend to have larger impacts because they can tend to individual issues, rather than just the majority of people struggling.

Sat, 22 Feb 2025 01:41:28 -0500

Should not have to make a choice between dinner or diapers and baby formula. This is a basic need not a luxury good.

Sat, 22 Feb 2025 01:40:36 -0500

Gerrymandering takes a part in community structures.

Sat, 22 Feb 2025 01:38:48 -0500

Removing the stigma is so important because while it is a vulnerable subject, no one should be afraid to ask for help.

Sat, 22 Feb 2025 01:37:04 -0500

Food insecurity is an issue regardless of where people are born.

Sat, 22 Feb 2025 00:48:02 -0500

Agreed!

Sat, 22 Feb 2025 00:47:25 -0500

Free healthcare should be a non-negotiable.

Thu, 13 Feb 2025 22:49:24 -0500

Need a better system than just money, oftentimes the money is not used for groceries, but towards other items that may not be a necessity.

Thu, 13 Feb 2025 22:48:22 -0500

A need!

Thu, 13 Feb 2025 22:47:28 -0500

Small-scale is better than large-scale in some communities, and with such a vulnerable situation, more private organizations often attract more attention then large ones.

Thu, 13 Feb 2025 22:43:02 -0500

MyPlate is very outdated. We need more research done on nutrition for students of all backgrounds: student-athletes, boys, girls.

Thu, 13 Feb 2025 22:41:28 -0500

Farmers care! Agriculture is affected by climate change, inflation, and supply chain issues. We should be supporting our farmers because they influence what we eat and how much we can obtain.

Thu, 13 Feb 2025 22:38:05 -0500

Experts should be consulting individuals living through food insecurity rather than starting initiatives based off assumption.

Thu, 13 Feb 2025 22:32:23 -0500

A national plan would be helpful, but guidelines must be clear for each community because food insecurity is present on a very large spectrum; what might work for one community is ineffective in another.

Thu, 13 Feb 2025 22:31:35 -0500

Many policies are based on assumption, not actual data is presented nor real conversations are had. Organizations that try to help individuals often do not make much of an impact because they do not have accurate data.

Thu, 13 Feb 2025 22:27:04 -0500

Racial and ethnic discrimination plays a large role in food insecurity as it is often minorities that experience the affects of socioeconomic disparity.

Thu, 13 Feb 2025 22:25:44 -0500

Access to food is important, but access to food with higher nutritional value is vital.

Thu, 13 Feb 2025 22:21:50 -0500

Orwell Predictions https://www.brennancenter.org/our-work/research-reports/social-media-surveillance-us-government

Tue, 04 Feb 2025 11:10:13 -0500

In Chapter 3, Orwell predicts that there will be stricter surveillance of people in their day to day lives to ensure that people are not doing anything that is not for the government. I think this prediction is true because with advanced technology, everyone has access to recording devices that could catch anyone in an act. As a result, the government has the ability to monitor everyone's phone and digital footprint according to an article by Brennan Center for Justice. While we do not have to sneak around as must as Winston and Julia, there are certain things that if said, our algorithm presents it on our screens which the government can use to collect data and track everyone's movement.

Winston is unhappy with his marriage and feels trapped. He has not yet ridden her of him because he has a new secret freedom with his intimate affair with Julia.

Tue, 28 Jan 2025 00:23:56 -0500

Julia thinks it is possible to live this double life because she has not been caught yet. But the more confortable she gets, the riskier the situation becomes.

Tue, 28 Jan 2025 00:21:52 -0500

Sometimes the world does not feel real and we have to remind ourselves that it is and to face the consequences of our daily actions, but to also live life to the fullest.

Tue, 28 Jan 2025 00:19:34 -0500

This paragraph reminds me of the vague sex ed talks from middle that never fully addressed what is was and everyone was expected to wait until marriage before trying anything that would be deemed scandalous.

Tue, 28 Jan 2025 00:16:34 -0500

Julia is a rebel. She reminds me of Malala Yousafzai who spoke out against the Taliban regardless of the risk.

Tue, 28 Jan 2025 00:09:40 -0500

Interesting how the Anti-sex league is producing pornography, seems counterproductive.

Tue, 28 Jan 2025 00:06:56 -0500

Julia seemed to be very successful before the Revolution. She was a normal school girl. This reminded me of the difference in culture in the Middle East before the Islamic Revolution where girls had more rights before the Taliban.

Tue, 28 Jan 2025 00:05:06 -0500

I related the telescreens watching everyone to our cell phones today. Our phones are constantly tracking us, our interests, and our fears. And with the Tik Tok controversies it seems as though this is not a coincidence.

Tue, 28 Jan 2025 00:00:39 -0500

Additionally, with the expansion of AI, tracking human activity online is even easier than ever and the idea of privacy is starting to diminish.

This part of the text reminded me of this scenario in "The Giver" where the mother of the protagonist explains that love is not an appropriate concept and expressing such emotion was uncivilized.

Mon, 27 Jan 2025 23:43:52 -0500

This paragraph shows the normal-ness of their routine that they have created. Their meeting is almost mundane and as part of their lives as the ministries.

Mon, 27 Jan 2025 23:41:56 -0500

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Thu, 16 Jan 2025 23:37:20 -0500

Furthermore, Sotomayor was a court appeals Judge when she delivered the speech in 2001 and she was on her way to becoming a Supreme Court Judge in 2009. Sonia was in a public position at an accredited institution (UC Berkeley). She used this to her advantage to project the message that you can be successful without conforming to society's outdated cultural norms like the "melting pot" metaphor. In the final paragraph, she shares how she embraced her identity because her parents demonstrated their love for it and the beauty of being able to call herself a Latina. She explains how it can be hard being yourself, especially as a minority, but if people do not protect their peace, their culture will be lost. America will not have the diversity that it should accumulate from those seeking the American Dream. She ends by stating that great things can be achieved through hard work, not one's ethnic background, or where they were born, but through grit, and a zest for life, anyone can sit at the "American Dream" table.

How well does my essay demonstrate an understanding of the rhetorical situation?

Thu, 16 Jan 2025 23:24:44 -0500

Your essay does a great job of addressing the rhetorical situation in Sonia Sotomayor's speech. You clearly identify Sotomayor's optimistic tone and her use of personal anecdotes to establish her Latina identity. This shows a strong understanding of how she connects with her audience by sharing relatable childhood memories, which you describe as "nourishing her Latina soul." By mentioning the repetition of cultural elements like food and family, you highlight how Sotomayor uses these to reinforce her message about identity. Your analysis captures how she presents herself as an embodiment of the American Dream, a crucial aspect of the rhetorical situation. Would you like to delve deeper into how Sotomayor's use of contrast between the "melting pot" and "salad bowl" enhances her argument? Or perhaps explore how her professional status as a judge adds weight to her message? Alternatively, we could examine more closely how her diction contributes to her argument about cultural diversity. Feel free to choose one, or suggest another area you're curious about! Revise or edit your writing right now. If this is your document, click on a sentence or a paragraph number in the left panel, then hit *Edit*, make your changes, and hit *Update*. You can also hit *Suggest Revision* on a document that you have been invited to. Another option is to hit *Add to Document*, and then you can add *New Content* for deeper, multi-paragraph rewrites. Please Note: Everything in this comment is AI-generated. It is made up to sound like your helpful AP English Language teacher in room 126.

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Thu, 16 Jan 2025 23:21:59 -0500

Sonia Sotomayor was already climbing the legal ladder when she delivered her speech in 2001, as she was in a public position to share that the American Dream is very achievable for people of all backgrounds. Throughout her speech, she has an optimistic tone and shares her beloved childhood memories that helped shape her Latina Identity and nourish her "Latina soul," (Sotomayor, line 32, paragraph 3). While she loves her Latina identity, she explains the struggles of being so ecstatic about her culture in a society where she is expected to conform to a melted-down version of her Latina identity. She used repetition to say that being Latina means growing up eating your family's food that represents your culture and playing with your cousins to shape relationships.

How well did I respond to the prompt with a thesis that analyzes the writer’s rhetorical choices?

Thu, 16 Jan 2025 23:08:55 -0500

Your thesis does a commendable job of highlighting the rhetorical choices Sotomayor makes to convey her message about identity. You effectively identify how her optimistic tone and childhood memories contribute to shaping her Latina identity. You also recognize the use of repetition in exploring cultural elements like food and family ties, which is a strong observation. However, consider refining your thesis to more explicitly state how these rhetorical choices impact her message about identity. Perhaps, emphasize how her strategic use of repetition and tone not only highlights her pride in her culture but also serves to challenge broader societal norms. You might want to clarify how these elements work together to support her argument and her stance on cultural diversity. What else would you like to explore? We could discuss how you can strengthen the connection between your thesis and the evidence provided, delve deeper into the significance of Sotomayor's rhetorical strategies, or perhaps explore how you can enhance the clarity of your analysis. Let me know which path you'd like to take or suggest another area you'd like to improve! Revise or edit your writing right now. If this is your document, click on a sentence or a paragraph number in the left panel, then hit *Edit*, make your changes and hit *Update*. You can also hit *Suggest Revision* on a document that you have been invited to. Another option is to hit *Add to Document*, and then you can add *New Content* for deeper, multi-paragraph rewrites. Please Note: Everything in this comment is AI-generated. It is made up to sound like your helpful AP English Language teacher in room 126.

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Thu, 16 Jan 2025 23:06:24 -0500

However, while Sonia does focus on the things she loves about being Latina in paragraphs 1 and 3, she chooses to share that there is not an objective reason why "individuals born into a different American culture sill identify with communities in which their parents were raised in, (Sotomayor, lines 63-66, paragraph 5). She identifies the tension between America's "melting pot" versus the "salad bowl". America's "melting pot" refers to an accumulation of diverse cultures coming together to form a common culture. This does not allow individuals to feel confident enough to retain their individual identities in addition to finding commonalities within our communities. However, America's "salad bowl" reference allows individuals to keep their identities while residing together with other cultures. She calls out America for saying it takes pride in ethnic diversity and the importance of including uniqueness, yet still consistently white-washes ethnic communities, and encourages assimilation. This shows Sotomayor's emotional diction of America's mediocre attempts to embrace cultural diversity.

How well did I explain the evidence I used to support my line of reasoning?

Thu, 16 Jan 2025 23:00:19 -0500

You did a commendable job of selecting and utilizing evidence from Sonia Sotomayor's speech to support your thesis. Your analysis highlighted her use of repetition in emphasizing cultural traditions, like family meals and childhood interactions, which shape her Latina identity. This effectively supports your argument by showing how these elements contribute to her personal narrative and appeal to ethos. However, you could delve deeper into how this repetition enhances her message about the complexity of identity. Consider explaining how these shared experiences foster a sense of belonging and pride, reinforcing the broader theme of identity in a multicultural society. Would you like to explore how to strengthen your analysis of the "melting pot" versus "salad bowl" analogy, discuss the significance of Sotomayor's professional context in delivering this speech, or examine the impact of her concluding message on her audience? Let me know which path you'd like to take—or suggest another area to dive into. Revise or edit your writing right now. If this is your document, click on a sentence or a paragraph number in the left panel, then hit *Edit*, make your changes and hit *Update*. You can also hit *Suggest Revision* on a document that you have been invited to. Another option is to hit *Add to Document*, and then you can add *New Content* for deeper, multi-paragraph rewrites. Please Note: Everything in this comment is AI-generated. It is made up to sound like your helpful AP English Language teacher in room 126.

Propaganda

Thu, 09 Jan 2025 22:45:26 -0500

I agree with it reminding me of Uncle Sam, and I related the lack of freedom to "The Giver" and how it is a mistake to try and find liberty in that dystopian society.

Against Society

Thu, 09 Jan 2025 22:44:08 -0500

This society is about some superior control even though there are no laws, what you can and cannot do is up to vague interpretation.

Apocalyptic

Thu, 09 Jan 2025 22:36:37 -0500

The world seems post-apocalyptic and the ministries reminded me of our branches of government, just with more supreme control.

WWII

Fri, 10 Jan 2025 13:43:29 -0500

This part reminded me of WWII novels I had previously read and the concept of "no privacy, because what are you hiding?" is prevalent here.

Show not tell

Fri, 05 Sep 2025 15:37:56 -0400

Good use of detailed descriptions to help the reader understand what the world looks like during this time and what a mundane day looks like for this character.

Why the Great Salt Lake is drying up comment #2

Thu, 12 Dec 2024 21:42:29 -0500

While agricultural practices benefit us, the result of the lake shrinking can lead to air pollution, which is unhealthy for our lungs and causes asthma, while also impacting bird populations from brine shrimp dying out from the shrinking lake.

Why the Great Salt Lake is drying up comment #2

Thu, 12 Dec 2024 21:46:52 -0500

Why the Great Salt Lake is drying up comment #1

Thu, 12 Dec 2024 21:46:52 -0500

Part of the reason why the Great Salt Lake is drying up is climate change from agricultural practices. (line 11)

Why the Great Salt Lake is drying up comment #1

Thu, 12 Dec 2024 21:26:11 -0500

Part of the reason why the Great Salt Lake is drying up is climate change from agricultural practices. (line 11)

I liked how this video discussed economics and how it's an issue for everyone regardless of party. This was once of my issues I thought was important in the survey and I think we need a better system than just tax cuts/boosts.

Wed, 06 Nov 2024 01:06:15 -0500

I found that for a Fox News report, it wasn't as far-right leaning as other reports I had witnessed during the pandemic. It definitely favors the Republican party, but I was surprised that they were also reporting on a democrat winning the senatorial election in New York. I wish that there were more conversations on the importance of gun policy and abortion rights because these hold people's lives at risk and is a much larger issue than the economy. I think there is a healthy balance in politics, but I don't think it comes from a candidate like Donald Trump because I don't think he is for the people, nor do I agree with everything that Fox News reports on.

This video primarily discusses what would happen to Harris' agenda if she won the presidency, but lost to the House and Senate. This new source leans a bit more left and focuses on her platform and how she could pass her intiatives if she wins.

Wed, 06 Nov 2024 00:55:05 -0500

I am also a bit confused on how much pull Pennsylvania has. Will it come down to just this state in the election race?

Overall, I think Orwell is right that while some political speech is positively defensive, it is also insincere and corrupt because of the way the policies are made to protect political individuals who make wrongs.

Tue, 10 Sep 2024 23:42:08 -0400

I think Orwell is right about the great enemy of clear language is insincerity. Trump says that the Dems won by using Covid to cheat (neither accurate nor relevant). His language is unclear and insincere.

Tue, 10 Sep 2024 22:59:34 -0400

I think Orwell is right in that political speech and writing are largely the defense of the indefensible. I think Kamala is a great presidential candidate and she cares about defending those who are unable to share their voices (the defenseless)

Tue, 10 Sep 2024 22:54:04 -0400

the present political chaos is connected with the decay of language... I would say that Orwell is correct because Harris gives an example of how Trump has caused chaos in the past because of his poor choice of language, causing discord to simmer.

Tue, 10 Sep 2024 22:48:34 -0400