Comments by Zach Farr Most recent public comments by Zach Farr https://writingpartners.net/users/329 Diversity isn't an agenda, its a reality https://writingpartners.net/documents/5955?scroll_to=40012 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5955?scroll_to=40012 Mon, 10 Mar 2025 02:27:20 -0400 DEI is manipulation https://writingpartners.net/documents/5955?scroll_to=40011 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5955?scroll_to=40011 Mon, 10 Mar 2025 02:24:41 -0400 https://www.delewislaw.com/blog/when-words-cross-the-line-understanding-free-speech-laws-and-potential-crimes/#:~:text=Words%20can%20become%20crimes%20when,the%20line%20into%20criminal%20behavior. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5955?scroll_to=40010 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5955?scroll_to=40010 Mon, 10 Mar 2025 02:22:47 -0400 Free speech- Words can become crimes when they infringe on the rights of others, incite violence, or pose threats to public safety https://writingpartners.net/documents/5955?scroll_to=40009 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5955?scroll_to=40009 Mon, 10 Mar 2025 02:22:47 -0400 Unfair because a segment of the university voted for it (the majority) https://writingpartners.net/documents/5955?scroll_to=40008 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5955?scroll_to=40008 Mon, 10 Mar 2025 02:21:16 -0400 What? https://writingpartners.net/documents/5955?scroll_to=40007 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5955?scroll_to=40007 Mon, 10 Mar 2025 02:20:42 -0400 "Some say" https://writingpartners.net/documents/5955?scroll_to=40006 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5955?scroll_to=40006 Mon, 10 Mar 2025 02:18:50 -0400 Reversing all progress https://writingpartners.net/documents/5648?scroll_to=38591 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5648?scroll_to=38591 Mon, 03 Mar 2025 12:56:25 -0500 Does Trump want people to discriminate on the basis of race and gender? https://writingpartners.net/documents/5648?scroll_to=38590 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5648?scroll_to=38590 Mon, 03 Mar 2025 12:55:22 -0500 Completely wiping it from existence https://writingpartners.net/documents/5648?scroll_to=38589 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5648?scroll_to=38589 Mon, 03 Mar 2025 12:54:05 -0500 Some schools don't include race in the application https://writingpartners.net/documents/5648?scroll_to=38588 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5648?scroll_to=38588 Mon, 03 Mar 2025 12:53:20 -0500 Walmart, Target, etc. removing efforts https://writingpartners.net/documents/5648?scroll_to=38587 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5648?scroll_to=38587 Mon, 03 Mar 2025 12:52:56 -0500 STAKEHOLDERS https://writingpartners.net/documents/5648?scroll_to=38586 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5648?scroll_to=38586 Mon, 03 Mar 2025 12:51:38 -0500 Say DEI doesn't level the playing field, it just makes it easier for other races to succeed https://writingpartners.net/documents/5648?scroll_to=38585 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5648?scroll_to=38585 Mon, 03 Mar 2025 12:50:44 -0500 So, it isn't discriminatory, it just gives opportunities to people who haven't been prioritized in the past https://writingpartners.net/documents/5648?scroll_to=38584 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5648?scroll_to=38584 Mon, 03 Mar 2025 12:49:29 -0500 The reason they want to ban DEI: Discrimination against white people https://writingpartners.net/documents/5648?scroll_to=38583 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5648?scroll_to=38583 discrimination: the unjust or prejudicial treatment of different categories of people, especially on the grounds of ethnicity, age, sex, or disability. Mon, 03 Mar 2025 12:48:20 -0500 Why? https://writingpartners.net/documents/5648?scroll_to=38582 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5648?scroll_to=38582 Mon, 03 Mar 2025 12:47:26 -0500 Lack of inclusivity pushed people away from college and then leads to lower GDP because there are less highly educated https://writingpartners.net/documents/5225?scroll_to=37318 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5225?scroll_to=37318 Fri, 21 Feb 2025 11:03:39 -0500 A "colorblind" nature leads to misrepresentation of culture https://writingpartners.net/documents/5225?scroll_to=37317 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5225?scroll_to=37317 Fri, 21 Feb 2025 11:02:36 -0500 For the purpose of... https://writingpartners.net/documents/5225?scroll_to=37316 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5225?scroll_to=37316 Fri, 21 Feb 2025 10:57:53 -0500 Prepares people for the world they are about to live in- representation of our nation https://writingpartners.net/documents/5225?scroll_to=37315 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5225?scroll_to=37315 Fri, 21 Feb 2025 10:56:32 -0500 Interesting! https://writingpartners.net/documents/5225?scroll_to=37314 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5225?scroll_to=37314 Fri, 21 Feb 2025 10:55:40 -0500 Create a safe haven for those who have similar experiences- creating relationships https://writingpartners.net/documents/5225?scroll_to=37313 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5225?scroll_to=37313 Fri, 21 Feb 2025 10:53:48 -0500 In other words, leveling the playing field https://writingpartners.net/documents/5225?scroll_to=37312 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5225?scroll_to=37312 Fri, 21 Feb 2025 10:51:50 -0500 Going back in time https://writingpartners.net/documents/5225?scroll_to=37311 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5225?scroll_to=37311 Fri, 21 Feb 2025 10:50:45 -0500 Local https://writingpartners.net/documents/5225?scroll_to=37310 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5225?scroll_to=37310 Fri, 21 Feb 2025 10:47:30 -0500 They banned classes that teach about racism, it's effects, and how to work against it? https://writingpartners.net/documents/5225?scroll_to=37309 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5225?scroll_to=37309 Fri, 21 Feb 2025 10:47:09 -0500 This whole agenda is filled with seemingly good solutions that have many negative consequences https://writingpartners.net/documents/5225?scroll_to=37308 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5225?scroll_to=37308 Fri, 21 Feb 2025 10:46:03 -0500 Okay, but it is more common to face racism as a Latino than a White person. The Latino community or any other minority for that matter is treated differently from the next by peers. More support and safety is necessary for these people. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5225?scroll_to=37307 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5225?scroll_to=37307 Fri, 21 Feb 2025 10:39:50 -0500 Things like administrative support don't need to use race to decide whether or not to help someone, yes, but race often affects one's experience in the workplace. It is a good idea to offer more support based on their experiences. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5225?scroll_to=37306 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5225?scroll_to=37306 Fri, 21 Feb 2025 10:38:24 -0500 Maybe race isn't the only factor going into those decisions... maybe they were less qualified academically but outwardly as a person they achieved more. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5225?scroll_to=37305 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5225?scroll_to=37305 Fri, 21 Feb 2025 10:25:31 -0500 Called them "illegal" https://writingpartners.net/documents/5225?scroll_to=37304 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5225?scroll_to=37304 Fri, 21 Feb 2025 10:23:43 -0500 Ultimatum for DEI programs https://writingpartners.net/documents/5225?scroll_to=37303 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5225?scroll_to=37303 Fri, 21 Feb 2025 10:22:44 -0500 So-called oppressed are those who are standing up against murder and discrimination. People like George Floyd are oppressed https://writingpartners.net/documents/5054?scroll_to=36935 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5054?scroll_to=36935 Fri, 14 Feb 2025 02:18:04 -0500 Viewed as a tactic to villainize white people https://writingpartners.net/documents/5054?scroll_to=36934 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5054?scroll_to=36934 Fri, 14 Feb 2025 02:16:21 -0500 That "specific partisan orthodoxy" being equal opportunity... https://writingpartners.net/documents/5054?scroll_to=36933 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5054?scroll_to=36933 Fri, 14 Feb 2025 02:14:57 -0500 PREACH! It is not harmful, it is reflective https://writingpartners.net/documents/5054?scroll_to=36932 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5054?scroll_to=36932 Fri, 14 Feb 2025 02:13:50 -0500 "Doing it to look good" corporations were performative https://writingpartners.net/documents/5054?scroll_to=36931 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5054?scroll_to=36931 Fri, 14 Feb 2025 02:08:10 -0500 Took a murder to get DEI reenacted https://writingpartners.net/documents/5054?scroll_to=36930 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5054?scroll_to=36930 Fri, 14 Feb 2025 02:07:33 -0500 This is likely what caused backlash- when white men weren't getting into colleges they thought they would get into https://writingpartners.net/documents/5054?scroll_to=36929 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5054?scroll_to=36929 Fri, 14 Feb 2025 02:05:47 -0500 Since it began, civil rights for minorities have increased significantly. Until now https://writingpartners.net/documents/5054?scroll_to=36928 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5054?scroll_to=36928 Fri, 14 Feb 2025 01:58:44 -0500 The point of DEI is to give people equal opportunities https://writingpartners.net/documents/5054?scroll_to=36927 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5054?scroll_to=36927 Fri, 14 Feb 2025 01:52:08 -0500 What is the disadvantage? It is merely leveling the playing field by offering jobs and approachability https://writingpartners.net/documents/5054?scroll_to=36926 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5054?scroll_to=36926 Fri, 14 Feb 2025 01:51:23 -0500 DEI is bad because... https://writingpartners.net/documents/5054?scroll_to=36925 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5054?scroll_to=36925 Fri, 14 Feb 2025 01:49:27 -0500 It's not about the people receiving the care, its about having open access to the job itself not depending on race https://writingpartners.net/documents/5054?scroll_to=36924 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5054?scroll_to=36924 Fri, 14 Feb 2025 01:47:14 -0500 Racial equity trainings lead to a more diverse and welcoming environment. It doesn't promote racism https://writingpartners.net/documents/5054?scroll_to=36923 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5054?scroll_to=36923 Fri, 14 Feb 2025 01:45:51 -0500 Taking people's jobs that promote diversity, equity, and inclusion is supposed to unite Americans? https://writingpartners.net/documents/5054?scroll_to=36922 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5054?scroll_to=36922 Fri, 14 Feb 2025 01:44:35 -0500 The moments that contradict Big Brother have to be removed. Orwell predicted this happening and I believe that he is correct because it is happening. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=35911 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=35911 Trump's administration has removed any documents that mention DEI https://www.ed.gov/about/news/press-release/us-department-of-education-takes-action-eliminate-dei#:~:text=Following%20President%20Trump's%20recent%20Executive,its%20outward%20facing%20communication%20channels. Tiktok has banned videos about the immigration crisis all throughout the United States - Some words that have been banned don't allow you to look up things about hostages in the U.S. Tue, 04 Feb 2025 11:08:18 -0500 Can we explore how her professional identity shaped her speech? https://writingpartners.net/documents/4046?scroll_to=32702 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4046?scroll_to=32702 Your essay nicely captures Sotomayor's exploration of cultural identity, but let's dive into how her professional identity as a judge shapes her speech. Sotomayor's position lends her a unique perspective, allowing her to discuss identity with authority and personal insight. Her role requires balancing personal cultural pride with professional responsibilities, which is reflected in her speech. She navigates these dual identities by emphasizing the importance of embracing one's cultural roots while acknowledging the broader American identity. This duality enriches her message, making it more compelling for her audience. Would you like to discuss more on how her professional role influences her rhetorical choices, explore how her identity impacts her ethos, or delve into how she transitions from personal to broader societal issues in her speech? Let me know which direction you want to go, or if there's another angle you're interested in exploring! Revise or edit your writing right now. If this is your document, click on a sentence or a paragraph number in the left panel, then hit *Edit*, make your changes and hit *Update*. You can also hit *Suggest Revision* on a document that you have been invited to. Another option is to hit *Add to Document*, and then you can add *New Content* for deeper, multi-paragraph rewrites. Please Note: Everything in this comment is AI-generated. It is made up to sound like your helpful AP English Language teacher in room 126. Thu, 16 Jan 2025 16:33:28 -0500 How well does my essay demonstrate an understanding of the rhetorical situation? https://writingpartners.net/documents/4046?scroll_to=32697 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4046?scroll_to=32697 Your essay demonstrates a solid grasp of the rhetorical situation by identifying Sotomayor's use of personal anecdotes, credibility, and cause-and-effect structure to explore her identity. You articulate how she connects with her audience through relatable questions like "Who am I?" and discusses the complexities of cultural identity in a "color-blind" society. However, you could enhance your analysis by delving deeper into the audience's role and the broader context of Sotomayor's speech. Consider how her position as a Latina judge and her audience of law school graduates may influence her rhetorical choices. Would you like to explore how to incorporate more specific textual analysis, discuss how her professional identity impacts the speech, or examine how her speech's context shapes her message? Let me know which path you want to take, or if there's another aspect you're curious about! Revise or edit your writing right now. If this is your document, click on a sentence or a paragraph number in the left panel, then hit *Edit*, make your changes and hit *Update*. You can also hit *Suggest Revision* on a document that you have been invited to. Another option is to hit *Add to Document*, and then you can add *New Content* for deeper, multi-paragraph rewrites. Please Note: Everything in this comment is AI-generated. It is made up to sound like your helpful AP English Language teacher in room 126. Thu, 16 Jan 2025 16:33:28 -0500 Can we further discuss cultural assimilation and diversity? https://writingpartners.net/documents/4046?scroll_to=32689 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4046?scroll_to=32689 It sounds like you're eager to refine your explanation of the audience's reaction to Sotomayor's rhetorical choices! This is a great opportunity to consider how her speech's personal anecdotes and probing questions engage listeners, prompting them to reflect on their cultural identities. Think about how these elements might resonate with an audience that shares similar struggles or experiences. Consider the emotional impact of her stories and questions, and how they build a connection between Sotomayor and her listeners. By doing this, you can highlight how her rhetorical choices don't just inform but also inspire and challenge her audience to embrace their cultural uniqueness. Do you want to explore another topic, like delving deeper into cultural diversity and assimilation, or perhaps discussing how Sotomayor's identity as a judge influences her message? Let's keep elevating your essay! Revise or edit your writing right now. If this is your document, click on a sentence or a paragraph number in the left panel, then hit *Edit*, make your changes and hit *Update*. You can also hit *Suggest Revision* on a document that you have been invited to. Another option is to hit *Add to Document*, and then you can add *New Content* for deeper, multi-paragraph rewrites. Please Note: Everything in this comment is AI-generated. It is made up to sound like your helpful AP English Language teacher in room 126. Thu, 16 Jan 2025 16:28:51 -0500 Can you explain how to examine the use of cause-and-effect organization? https://writingpartners.net/documents/4046?scroll_to=32684 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4046?scroll_to=32684 I'm glad you're interested in examining the use of cause-and-effect organization! This technique is essential for showing how one event leads to another, creating a logical progression in Sotomayor's speech. In your analysis, you should focus on how Sotomayor identifies the "cause" — the American tendency to overlook cultural differences in favor of a homogeneous identity — and the subsequent "effect" — her questioning of her own identity. This approach not only helps in structuring her argument but also in engaging the audience to reflect on their identities within a diverse society. By demonstrating how this organization clarifies her message, you can deepen your analysis and show how it effectively challenges the audience to rethink cultural assimilation. Would you like to dive deeper into another aspect, such as refining your explanation of the audience's reaction to her rhetorical choices or further discussing cultural diversity and assimilation? Let's take this essay to the next level! Revise or edit your writing right now. If this is your document, click on a sentence or a paragraph number in the left panel, then hit *Edit*, make your changes and hit *Update*. You can also hit *Suggest Revision* on a document that you have been invited to. Another option is to hit *Add to Document*, and then you can add *New Content* for deeper, multi-paragraph rewrites. Please Note: Everything in this comment is AI-generated. It is made up to sound like your helpful AP English Language teacher in room 126. Thu, 16 Jan 2025 16:28:51 -0500 How well did I explain the evidence I used to support my line of reasoning? https://writingpartners.net/documents/4046?scroll_to=32680 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4046?scroll_to=32680 You've done a commendable job of selecting evidence to support your line of reasoning regarding Sotomayor's exploration of cultural identity. Your use of personal anecdotes effectively illustrates how she maintains her culture amidst a "color-blind" society. Highlighting her rhetorical questions, such as "Who am I?" and "Now, does any one of these things make me Latina?" captures the essence of her internal and external cultural conflicts. However, to strengthen your argument, consider delving deeper into why these specific anecdotes and questions resonate with the audience and how they contribute to the broader theme of identity. Additionally, explaining the impact of these rhetorical choices on the audience could further clarify your points. Would you like to explore how to enhance your explanation of evidence with more detailed analysis, examine the use of cause-and-effect organization, or discuss the role of cultural diversity and assimilation in more depth? Feel free to choose more than one or suggest another area to focus on! Revise or edit your writing right now. If this is your document, click on a sentence or a paragraph number in the left panel, then hit *Edit*, make your changes and hit *Update*. You can also hit *Suggest Revision* on a document that you have been invited to. Another option is to hit *Add to Document*, and then you can add *New Content* for deeper, multi-paragraph rewrites. Please Note: Everything in this comment is AI-generated. It is made up to sound like your helpful AP English Language teacher in room 126. Thu, 16 Jan 2025 16:28:51 -0500 Could you dive into the impact of her anecdotes? https://writingpartners.net/documents/4046?scroll_to=32674 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4046?scroll_to=32674 Great choice to focus on the impact of Sotomayor's anecdotes! Her anecdotes are powerful because they humanize her and make her message relatable. When she reminisces about family gatherings, specific foods, and games from her childhood, she invites the audience into her personal world. These stories create a vivid picture of her cultural background and help the audience understand the depth of her connection to her Latina identity. By sharing these intimate details, Sotomayor builds a bridge between her personal experiences and her broader message about identity and diversity. Do you want to delve further into how these anecdotes function within her speech, discuss how they enhance her credibility, or explore another aspect of her rhetorical strategy? Let me know your preference or suggest another direction! Revise or edit your writing right now. If this is your document, click on a sentence or a paragraph number in the left panel, then hit *Edit*, make your changes and hit *Update*. You can also hit *Suggest Revision* on a document that you have been invited to. Another option is to hit *Add to Document*, and then you can add *New Content* for deeper, multi-paragraph rewrites. Please Note: Everything in this comment is AI-generated. It is made up to sound like your helpful AP English Language teacher in room 126. Thu, 16 Jan 2025 16:25:21 -0500 Can you explore how to strengthen my analysis of specific rhetorical devices, delve deeper into how her use of anecdotes impacts the audience, and discuss the effectiveness of your concluding analysis? https://writingpartners.net/documents/4046?scroll_to=32667 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4046?scroll_to=32667 I'm glad to hear you're interested in enhancing your analysis of Sotomayor's rhetorical devices. To make your essay even more compelling, consider exploring how specific devices like imagery or repetition contribute to Sotomayor's ethos and pathos. For instance, when she describes her favorite dishes, this not only establishes her cultural authenticity but also evokes a sensory experience for the audience, deepening their connection to her narrative. Would you like to explore more about how specific rhetorical devices operate in her speech, or would you prefer to dive into the impact of her anecdotes? Let me know how you'd like to proceed! Revise or edit your writing right now. If this is your document, click on a sentence or a paragraph number in the left panel, then hit *Edit*, make your changes and hit *Update*. You can also hit *Suggest Revision* on a document that you have been invited to. Another option is to hit *Add to Document*, and then you can add *New Content* for deeper, multi-paragraph rewrites. Please Note: Everything in this comment is AI-generated. It is made up to sound like your helpful AP English Language teacher in room 126. Thu, 16 Jan 2025 16:25:21 -0500 How well did I respond to the prompt with a thesis that analyzes the writer’s rhetorical choices? https://writingpartners.net/documents/4046?scroll_to=32651 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4046?scroll_to=32651 You did well in responding to the prompt with a thesis that analyzes Sotomayor's rhetorical choices. Your thesis is clear and identifies the rhetorical strategies she uses: personal anecdotes, credibility, and cause-and-effect organization. You effectively set the stage for analyzing how these choices convey her message about maintaining cultural identity in a color-blind society. By highlighting specific rhetorical elements, you establish a focused direction for your essay, which is crucial for a strong rhetorical analysis. Would you like to explore how to strengthen your analysis of specific rhetorical devices, delve deeper into how her use of anecdotes impacts the audience, or discuss the effectiveness of your concluding analysis? You can choose more than one path or suggest another idea to explore! Revise or edit your writing right now. If this is your document, click on a sentence or a paragraph number in the left panel, then hit *Edit*, make your changes and hit *Update*. You can also hit *Suggest Revision* on a document that you have been invited to. 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Thu, 16 Jan 2025 16:33:01 -0500 Winston is always looking for people to relate to- speaks to the loneliness and helplessness of the situation https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32546 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32546 Thu, 16 Jan 2025 00:58:58 -0500 Created a human in order to take one out https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32545 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32545 Thu, 16 Jan 2025 00:56:17 -0500 People disappearing became a normal part of the mechanics of government https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32544 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32544 Thu, 16 Jan 2025 00:54:36 -0500 FFCC disappeared with no trace https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32543 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32543 Thu, 16 Jan 2025 00:52:25 -0500 Jobs require education and base knowledge of a subject.. how did they learn what was right and wrong according to Big Brother? https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32541 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32541 Thu, 16 Jan 2025 00:27:06 -0500 Having to work for the people who killed the one you love, and ultimately against the one you love https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32539 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32539 Thu, 16 Jan 2025 00:16:35 -0500 All have different jobs within the building... maintains secrecy https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32536 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32536 Wed, 15 Jan 2025 23:51:48 -0500 There is no way to find reliable information thats speaks to the truth https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32509 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32509 Wed, 15 Jan 2025 12:58:05 -0500 Statistics become unreliable and stories that Big Brother wants you to believe. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32507 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32507 Wed, 15 Jan 2025 12:58:05 -0500 If there are jobs that rewrite history, then wouldn't everyone know that Big Brother is changing it so they look like they're right? It is although Big Brother doesn't care if it seems corrupt, unless these jobs are undercover. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32506 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32506 Wed, 15 Jan 2025 12:55:52 -0500 Big Brother cannot be wrong https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32505 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32505 Wed, 15 Jan 2025 12:52:52 -0500 makes references to vaporized people, needs to be rewritten https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32504 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32504 Wed, 15 Jan 2025 12:51:25 -0500 The original quote for how much of a good needs to be rewritten https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32503 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32503 Wed, 15 Jan 2025 12:50:47 -0500 Correction of forecasted numbers pertaining to consumed goods https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32501 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32501 Wed, 15 Jan 2025 12:48:19 -0500 An error in a speech involving Big Brother and Africa is rectified https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32500 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32500 Wed, 15 Jan 2025 12:47:36 -0500 Implies that he is throwing away things from the past history, disposing of evidence https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32498 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32498 Wed, 15 Jan 2025 12:43:25 -0500 Memory https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=31776 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=31776 Cannot remember the past.. his age, the year...etc Thu, 09 Jan 2025 16:29:18 -0500 "Victory" https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=31774 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=31774 Victory seems to be a recurring word in dystopian novels- Handmaid's Tale Thu, 09 Jan 2025 16:26:30 -0500 Irony https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=31773 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=31773 Serves as irony to contrast the true mission of each sector Thu, 09 Jan 2025 16:25:00 -0500 Newspeak https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=31771 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=31771 Does Winston think in Newspeak or is the narrator just describing this way? Thu, 09 Jan 2025 16:23:18 -0500 painting picture of dystopian life, not floursihing society https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=31770 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=31770 Thu, 09 Jan 2025 16:22:09 -0500 telescreen https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=31766 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=31766 Thought police being the people behind the monitors Thu, 09 Jan 2025 16:19:19 -0500 Propaganda https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=31763 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=31763 Reminds me of the Uncle Sam Propaganda, bit it's just reminding people that freedom is slavery Tue, 23 Sep 2025 13:53:18 -0400 awakens your brain to older memories https://writingpartners.net/documents/3361?scroll_to=26141 https://writingpartners.net/documents/3361?scroll_to=26141 Thu, 05 Dec 2024 23:51:53 -0500 I am thankful my mom made me do piano! https://writingpartners.net/documents/3361?scroll_to=26140 https://writingpartners.net/documents/3361?scroll_to=26140 Thu, 05 Dec 2024 23:50:28 -0500 It took me a while to learn guitar https://writingpartners.net/documents/3361?scroll_to=26139 https://writingpartners.net/documents/3361?scroll_to=26139 Thu, 05 Dec 2024 23:49:10 -0500 connects left and right side, most people have strength in one side or the other https://writingpartners.net/documents/3361?scroll_to=26138 https://writingpartners.net/documents/3361?scroll_to=26138 Thu, 05 Dec 2024 23:47:37 -0500 Rehearsing is "jogging the memory" https://writingpartners.net/documents/3361?scroll_to=26137 https://writingpartners.net/documents/3361?scroll_to=26137 Thu, 05 Dec 2024 23:46:55 -0500 Interesting! https://writingpartners.net/documents/3361?scroll_to=26135 https://writingpartners.net/documents/3361?scroll_to=26135 Thu, 05 Dec 2024 23:46:06 -0500 How do you grow neurons... https://writingpartners.net/documents/3361?scroll_to=26134 https://writingpartners.net/documents/3361?scroll_to=26134 Thu, 05 Dec 2024 23:45:17 -0500 Translating a different language, basically. Uses every part of the brain https://writingpartners.net/documents/3361?scroll_to=26133 https://writingpartners.net/documents/3361?scroll_to=26133 Thu, 05 Dec 2024 23:44:18 -0500 Overall, brain preservation and strength https://writingpartners.net/documents/3361?scroll_to=26132 https://writingpartners.net/documents/3361?scroll_to=26132 Thu, 05 Dec 2024 23:43:22 -0500 Retaining information... all these benefits but how does it work? https://writingpartners.net/documents/3361?scroll_to=26109 https://writingpartners.net/documents/3361?scroll_to=26109 Thu, 05 Dec 2024 16:38:02 -0500 Improves mental health? Exactly how https://writingpartners.net/documents/3361?scroll_to=26108 https://writingpartners.net/documents/3361?scroll_to=26108 Thu, 05 Dec 2024 16:37:13 -0500 Piano playing serves as relief from this stressful job https://writingpartners.net/documents/3361?scroll_to=26107 https://writingpartners.net/documents/3361?scroll_to=26107 Thu, 05 Dec 2024 16:36:24 -0500 Talking about how ears bleed so much... https://writingpartners.net/documents/772?scroll_to=3361 https://writingpartners.net/documents/772?scroll_to=3361 Tue, 10 Sep 2024 11:26:49 -0400 "the numbers were absolutely amazing" - passive voice, also language corrupting thought in the sense that he says this story is so hard to tell and goes on to tell it with insincerity. https://writingpartners.net/documents/772?scroll_to=3346 https://writingpartners.net/documents/772?scroll_to=3346 Tue, 10 Sep 2024 12:59:31 -0400 Using words of emotion and not giving any examples- vagueness https://writingpartners.net/documents/772?scroll_to=3331 https://writingpartners.net/documents/772?scroll_to=3331 Tue, 10 Sep 2024 11:16:31 -0400 "launch a new era of prosperity and freedom," is cloudy vagueness https://writingpartners.net/documents/772?scroll_to=3329 https://writingpartners.net/documents/772?scroll_to=3329 Tue, 10 Sep 2024 11:15:44 -0400