Comments by You Diego Garrido

Probably delete the last sentence on draft. It sounds a little passive agressive.

Fri, 13 Mar 2026 11:13:11 -0400

Using this feedback what should I apply to my essay?

Fri, 13 Mar 2026 11:04:02 -0400

Your draft already has a clear claim, which fits the rubric line about a thesis that “analyzes the writer’s rhetorical choices” in Rhetorical Analysis.
What to apply next is stronger commentary, because the rubric’s higher rows ask you to “consistently explain how the evidence supports a line of reasoning,” not just point out examples from the passage in Rhetorical Analysis.
In your left pane, check each body paragraph and ask whether each example is followed by your thinking about how that choice shapes Jen’s purpose, message, or effect on readers.
Your language patterns already carry energy, so if there are places where your natural phrasing feels more alive and direct, you can keep that strength while making the explanation more exact.

Apply this test right now in the left pane: under one sentence with evidence, add your reason for why that choice matters to Jen’s argument, then click Continue with AI and tell me what changed when you did that?

"I wrote an AP English Language rhetorical analysis essay. I'd like to know the score my essay would receive on a 6-point scale with advice on how I could write a better defensible thesis ...

Fri, 13 Mar 2026 11:02:33 -0400

Your draft already has a clear claim, so for Row A I’d likely give the thesis 1/1 because it “responds to the prompt with a defensible thesis that analyzes the writer’s rhetorical choices” in the Rhetorical Analysis rubric.
For Row B, I’d place it at 2/4 right now because you use some specific evidence, but the commentary mostly tells what the examples show instead of fully explaining how those choices build a line of reasoning, which fits “explains how some of the evidence relates to the student’s argument, but no line of reasoning is established, or the line of reasoning is faulty” in the Rhetorical Analysis rubric.
For Row C, I’d give 0/1 because the draft does not yet show the kind of full complexity the rubric describes as “explaining the significance or relevance of the writer’s rhetorical choices” across the whole passage in the Rhetorical Analysis rubric.
So your likely score is 3/6, and the fastest way up is to make your thesis name a sharper relationship between the choices and Jen’s purpose, not just the message.

What exact part of your first sentence could you change in the left pane so it makes a stronger claim about how evidence and tone work together on readers, and then click Continue with AI and write the new idea that pops into your head right now?

What I changed: Added more commentary and went more into depth when I mentioned a quote. My feedback said I did it well but could go a little more into depth.

Fri, 13 Mar 2026 10:59:24 -0400

Ethos

Fri, 06 Mar 2026 13:52:02 -0500

In the first sentence of paragraph one. I introduce who I am and very brief information about myself but it could definitely be a lot better because I don't give myself too much credibility. I talk about how I am a senior which shows that I have more experience than most other high schoolers but I should've talked more about my "qualifications" to talk about the issue.

Pathos

Fri, 06 Mar 2026 13:49:00 -0500

In last sentence of the third paragraph and the last sentence. I talk about the different areas that will be affected (all of which the audience cares about) which appeals to their emotions because they don't want other people/things to suffer because of the audience's lack of action.

Logos

Fri, 06 Mar 2026 13:45:44 -0500

I use logos primarily in the second sentence of my second paragraph to show the results of not caring for the lake. This helps my letter because it appeals to the Representatives emotions as the drying lake will cause issues directly affecting them, their families, and all the people they represent.

Appeal to Authority

Fri, 27 Feb 2026 13:22:40 -0500

Squealer uses Napoleon's authority and the idea that the higher ups must be right to change Boxer's mind. Some examples are when politicians say things that are not true and the public believes them because of the idea that "they must be right".

Any specific websites or articles?

Wed, 18 Feb 2026 15:41:32 -0500

For the bill itself, the official Utah Legislature page for HB410 is the best starting point; it has the full text, status, and any amendments or fiscal notes, and it’s updated in real time by the state ((Utah State Legislature, n.d.)).
For farmer-friendly info on leasing water to help the Great Salt Lake (including split-season leases, who to contact, and example deals), Grow the Flow’s “Water Leasing” page is very practical and written in plain language ((Grow the Flow Utah, Water Leasing, n.d.)).
For background on Utah’s broader “water marketing” tools (including temporary leasing and water banking that HB410 is building on), the Utah Division of Water Resources’ Water Banking Act page explains how voluntary leases work and how environmental or instream uses can be protected ((Utah Division of Water Resources, Water Banking Act, n.d.)).
For a sense of how ag water optimization and savings programs fit into water-sharing with places like the Great Salt Lake, check out Utah’s Agricultural Water Optimization pages at the Department of Agriculture and Food or the Division of Water Resources, which show how on-farm projects can free up water without hurting production ((Utah Department of Agriculture and Food, Agricultural Water Optimization, 2025); (Utah Division of Water Resources, Agricultural Water Optimization, 2025)).

If you skim one of these and want help turning it into notes or a short explanation in your own words, you can either click Continue with AI so we talk through what you’re seeing, or go to Create Document to paste in an article about HB410/water leasing (or start your own notes) and respond right now—what’s the first thing you’d like to capture or understand from these resources?

Can you point me to some resources about this bill and water leasing in Utah?

Wed, 18 Feb 2026 15:41:32 -0500

You already found one key resource: the official Utah Legislature page for HB410, which will show the bill text, status, sponsor, and any fiscal notes or amendments.
If you’re looking for context on Utah water leasing more broadly (especially for environmental flows like the Great Salt Lake), Utah’s Division of Water Resources and Division of Water Rights both have plain-language pages that walk through how leases, instream flows, and temporary transfers work.
Local news outlets in Utah (especially those that cover water issues and the Great Salt Lake) often publish explainers that translate the legal language of bills like HB410 into concrete examples for farmers, cities, and conservation groups.
University-based water centers in Utah (for example, those tied to law schools or environmental programs) sometimes host webinars or write policy briefs about new tools such as water leases for lake and river protection.

If you tell me whether you mostly want farmer-focused “how would this work for me?” information, or more legal/policy background, I can help you decide which type of resource to read first—and then you can either click Continue with AI to keep digging into this together, or go to Create Document to upload an article about HB410/water leasing (or start your own notes on it) and work from there; what kind of resource do you want first?

Who is Brad R. Wilson and why did he sponsor this bill?

Wed, 18 Feb 2026 15:33:00 -0500

Here’s what I can tell from public info (and a small snag I ran into):

Brad R. Wilson is a Republican politician and real-estate developer who served in the Utah House of Representatives (District 15) from 2011–2023 and was Speaker of the House from 2019–2023 ((“Brad Wilson (politician),” Wikipedia, 2024)).
As Speaker, Wilson was a key political champion for the Great Salt Lake and organized a major “Save the Great Salt Lake” summit in 2022, pushing for lake‑focused legislation and funding ((Utah Rivers Council, “URC Unveils Proposed Bill to Save the Great Salt Lake,” 2022)).
He also sponsored earlier Great Salt Lake–related laws, like a 2022 bill creating a Great Salt Lake Watershed Enhancement program that invests in preserving and restoring the lake ((“Brad Wilson (politician),” Wikipedia, 2024)).
When I followed the HB410 link you pasted, it currently goes to a different bill (an “Insurance Amendments” bill sponsored by Rep. James Dunnigan), so I couldn’t confirm that HB410 on that page is Brad Wilson’s bill or see an official statement of his reasons for sponsoring it ((Utah Legislature, H.B. 410 Insurance Amendments, 2023)).

If you’re writing about this, what’s one guess you have—based on Wilson’s past Great Salt Lake work and Hannah Freeze’s story—about his motivations for sponsoring “your” HB410 that you could put into your own words right now (and then either click *Continue with AI* to keep thinking it through here OR head to Create Document to start drafting or upload the full article)?

Who is Carter Williams from KSL and why is he writing about this bill.

Wed, 18 Feb 2026 15:27:42 -0500

Carter Williams is a reporter for KSL.com who covers Salt Lake City, Utah transportation, outdoors, the environment, weather, and often Great Salt Lake policy issues ((Williams, These 3 Great Salt Lake-related bills…, 2026)).
He’s written a whole series of stories about the Great Salt Lake and Utah water legislation, so HB410 fits squarely into his regular environment-and-water beat ((Williams, There’s a new ‘driver’ in Great Salt Lake water…, 2026); (Williams, How the Utah Legislature handled the Great Salt Lake…, 2024)).
Because HB410 is about making it easier to lease agricultural water to the Great Salt Lake, it lies at the intersection of environment, water policy, and agriculture—exactly the policy space he regularly reports on ((Williams, These 3 Great Salt Lake-related bills…, 2026)).
He also reports as part of the Great Salt Lake Collaborative, a multi‑newsroom project focused on solutions journalism around the lake’s decline, which is why he keeps returning to bills like HB410 ((Great Salt Lake Collaborative, Home, 2026)).

If you keep reading this article about HB410, what’s one question or reaction you’d want to jot down right now—then either click Continue with AI to talk it out here, or head to Create Document to start your own notes or draft about it?

Basic explanation of bill

Wed, 18 Feb 2026 15:25:28 -0500

We think there is more violence going on because it is constantly on the news. Positive things aren't talked about as much even though they probably happen more often than killings/murders.

Tue, 02 Dec 2025 10:53:15 -0500

This is probably the main reason violence between countries has dropped. Instead of taking out the other, countries have started realizng that they need each other to thrive.

Tue, 02 Dec 2025 10:47:35 -0500

I agree, I feel that most of the violence is concentrated in certain parts of the world and they make the whole world seem more violent.

Tue, 02 Dec 2025 10:34:10 -0500

Thats very interesting because we still hear about shootings in malls or schools very often, meaning that they used to happen a lot more often.

Tue, 02 Dec 2025 10:32:32 -0500

For pros it is starting to become increasingly difficult because of the tight tournament schedule they are faced with. As a result, we are seeing an increase in players withdrawing mid-match.