Comments by Student Sophia Medina Most recent public comments by Student Sophia Medina https://writingpartners.net/users/338 Giving teachers resource like substiutes is so important to make sure teachers have the resources to allow them to be there best selfs https://writingpartners.net/documents/6186?scroll_to=41171 https://writingpartners.net/documents/6186?scroll_to=41171 Thu, 20 Mar 2025 16:30:07 -0400 I think that this section really summrises the importance of education https://writingpartners.net/documents/6186?scroll_to=41162 https://writingpartners.net/documents/6186?scroll_to=41162 Thu, 20 Mar 2025 16:26:28 -0400 Its crazy that public schools only resevie 10 perent of there budget a year. https://writingpartners.net/documents/6186?scroll_to=41156 https://writingpartners.net/documents/6186?scroll_to=41156 Thu, 20 Mar 2025 16:24:59 -0400 I think covid had a effect on a lot of students when it comes to learning. Schools without the resources to catch up are leaving students behind academyley. https://writingpartners.net/documents/6186?scroll_to=41143 https://writingpartners.net/documents/6186?scroll_to=41143 Thu, 20 Mar 2025 16:22:45 -0400 Its sad that money that should be going to other tools for teachers and students has to go to fixing all of these school building problems https://writingpartners.net/documents/5126?scroll_to=41138 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5126?scroll_to=41138 Thu, 20 Mar 2025 16:18:38 -0400 The effects of being in unhealthy envirments dose not jsut have an effect on physical health but the impact it can have in mental can be just as great. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5126?scroll_to=41137 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5126?scroll_to=41137 Thu, 20 Mar 2025 16:17:14 -0400 I think that this whole section was really suprising to read about how bad some of the school conditions really is for some students and teachers. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5126?scroll_to=41136 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5126?scroll_to=41136 Thu, 20 Mar 2025 16:15:31 -0400 I was suprised by how high the number of schools with D plus rating was. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5126?scroll_to=38106 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5126?scroll_to=38106 Thu, 27 Feb 2025 16:13:48 -0500 I this quote remind me of North Korea how they use fear as an incentive to control people for the goverments benfit. https://scholarworks.arcadia.edu/showcase/2021/is/1/ https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=35913 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=35913 Tue, 04 Feb 2025 11:09:34 -0500 The inevitability https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=34348 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=34348 The inevitability of death not just physically but also politically. Thu, 23 Jan 2025 13:19:26 -0500 Postive failure over negtive failure. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=34236 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=34236 Winston is aware that they will probably not be able to over throw the Party because of the amount of power the party has. However, even the idea that one day there could be change is more comforting then facing reality. Thu, 23 Jan 2025 11:54:20 -0500 How the rebilion effected Juila and Winston in different ways. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=34207 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=34207 Julia is optimistic, whereas Winston is more realistic. This shows how the party has an impact and how it has affected people differently. Winston has little hope that there will be change, whereas Juila has a much more optimistic view. Thu, 23 Jan 2025 11:40:58 -0500 How different Julia and Winston are from each other. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=33648 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=33648 This quote shows how different Julia and Winston are from each other Winston is more abstract and theoretical and Juila is more grounded on survival. This is important because it brings up the tension between wanting change and being realistic Wed, 22 Jan 2025 13:42:18 -0500 A society where everyone is equal in wealth would eventually stop having big differences between rich and poor. To keep power in the hands of a few, people need to stay poor and uneducated. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=32812 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=32812 Fri, 17 Jan 2025 11:40:33 -0500 This part shows how much control the Party had and the fleeting natue of hope that Winston had living day by day in the dystopian world. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=32719 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=32719 Thu, 16 Jan 2025 20:19:07 -0500 This section reminds me of Hiroshima, talking about a bombing killing large numbers on people https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=32717 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=32717 Thu, 16 Jan 2025 20:12:11 -0500 I think "BIG BROTHER WATCHING YOU" shows how much control they over everything that they do. I feel like it shows that they don't even have freedom in there actions. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32161 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32161 " Mon, 13 Jan 2025 14:23:46 -0500 Its intersting how much of impact where you chosse to get your information can have such a big impact on who you vote for and how you see the other side. https://writingpartners.net/documents/2862?scroll_to=19111 https://writingpartners.net/documents/2862?scroll_to=19111 Wed, 06 Nov 2024 11:02:38 -0500 Hey what do you think of my essay so far? https://writingpartners.net/documents/507?scroll_to=6985 https://writingpartners.net/documents/507?scroll_to=6985 I really appreciate the powerful and honest reflections in your essay. Your voice comes through strongly, and you’re tackling some significant and complex issues. Let’s dive into a few key aspects: 1. **Audience Engagement**: Your essay seems aimed at a broad audience, perhaps those who might not fully understand or appreciate the nuances of the Black Lives Matter movement. You are clear and articulate, making your point accessible. 2. **Personal Experience**: You are using personal anecdotes, like the experiences of your father and your observations of colorism, to illustrate broader societal issues. This makes your essay relatable and engaging. 3. **Call-Response & Field-Dependent**: You create a conversational tone, almost expecting a response from the reader, particularly in lines like “We all may seem equal on paper, but are we really as equal and united as we claim to be…?” This strategy invites the reader to engage with your perspective more deeply. 4. **Directness**: Your direct approach in statements like “I believe that black lives matter” and “No one should be given a privilege for something they can’t control” adds weight to your arguments, presenting them straightforwardly and confidently. 5. **Tonal Semantics**: You could potentially enhance your essay by playing with the sounds and rhythms of your sentences. This might involve repetition or alliteration to draw emphasis and create a more dynamic reading experience. 6. **Narrative Sequencing**: The way you weave in stories about your father and personal observations adds layers to your essay. You might consider expanding these narratives even more to provide deeper context and emotional resonance. 7. **Exaggerated Language**: While your tone is currently quite measured, introducing some exaggerated language or high talk could amplify the emotional weight and urgency of your message. 8. **Proverbial Statement & Aphoristic Phrasing**: Incorporating some familiar sayings or proverbs could also add a layer of cultural richness and connect more deeply with readers who share your background. 9. **Braggadocio**: A touch of braggadocio, where you boast about your resilience or the strength of your community, could inject a sense of pride and empowerment into your essay. Reflecting on these elements might help you further refine and enhance your writing. Keep trusting your voice and perspective—they are your most powerful tools. Wed, 25 Sep 2024 20:38:18 -0400 I noticed him talking religion and God protecting him and I think that ties in alot to the demographic of his poltical party. https://writingpartners.net/documents/772?scroll_to=3330 https://writingpartners.net/documents/772?scroll_to=3330 Tue, 10 Sep 2024 11:25:08 -0400