Comments by Noah Crossman Most recent public comments by Noah Crossman https://writingpartners.net/users/342 What do you make of this? https://writingpartners.net/documents/6438?scroll_to=41197 https://writingpartners.net/documents/6438?scroll_to=41197 Let's start by breaking down the first part of this text into smaller, more understandable chunks. The initial sentence introduces the article's focus on electric vehicles and their environmental impact. It mentions that the harm primarily comes from production, especially the batteries. This is a key point, so let's pause and think about it. The phrase "sources of harm to the environment" suggests that the author is discussing various ways electric vehicles might negatively affect the environment. The specific mention of batteries indicates that this is a significant area of concern. As we move forward, we should pay attention to the details about how batteries contribute to environmental harm. Would you like to see more? Thu, 20 Mar 2025 16:34:48 -0400 What do you make of this? https://writingpartners.net/documents/6438?scroll_to=41195 https://writingpartners.net/documents/6438?scroll_to=41195 Let's break this text down using a Think Aloud strategy to help us understand it better. First, we'll look at the initial part: "In the article, 'Are electric cars better for the environment than fuel-powered cars?,' the author argues that the environmental impact of cars is broken into four separate phases; manufacturing, production, lifetime, and disposal." Here, the author is introducing the main topic of the article, which is comparing the environmental impact of electric and fuel-powered cars. The text mentions four phases where cars impact the environment: manufacturing, production, lifetime, and disposal. This is important because it sets up how the article will analyze the differences between the two types of cars. Now, let's look at the next part: "These phases each produce different environmental impacts with lifetime taking the cake for the largest environmental impact." In this sentence, it's explained that each phase contributes differently to environmental harm, but the "lifetime" phase is the most significant. This suggests that how a car is used over its life has the most considerable effect on the environment compared to other phases. This understanding helps us see where the focus of the comparison might lie—on the emissions and impact during the car's use. Would you like to see more? Thu, 20 Mar 2025 16:34:33 -0400 What do you make of this? https://writingpartners.net/documents/6438?scroll_to=41194 https://writingpartners.net/documents/6438?scroll_to=41194 It looks like we're diving into the environmental impact of electric vehicles (EVs). Let's break this down into smaller chunks to understand it better. First, let's focus on the sentence: "The term 'zero emission' sounds nice, but emissions are still created for these 'zero emissions' cars in the manufacturing and charging processes." Here, the text suggests that while EVs are marketed as "zero emission," this term might be a bit misleading because emissions are still produced during the making and charging of these vehicles. This chunk helps us grasp the beginning of an argument that challenges the notion of EVs being completely emission-free. Would you like to see more? Thu, 20 Mar 2025 16:34:11 -0400 What do you make of this? https://writingpartners.net/documents/6438?scroll_to=41193 https://writingpartners.net/documents/6438?scroll_to=41193 Let's break down the first part of this text to better understand it. We'll use a Think Aloud strategy to chunk the text into smaller parts and explain each one. First, we have: "Tesla, one of the most popular electric vehicle manufacturers, has an environmental impact that is much larger than previously reported." Here, we see that Tesla, known for its electric vehicles, is being discussed in terms of its environmental impact. The phrase "much larger than previously reported" suggests that new information has come to light, showing that Tesla's impact on the environment is greater than people thought before. Would you like to see more? Thu, 20 Mar 2025 16:33:23 -0400 What do you make of this? https://writingpartners.net/documents/6438?scroll_to=41191 https://writingpartners.net/documents/6438?scroll_to=41191 It looks like you're interested in exploring the topic of electric vehicles, specifically their long-term viability and environmental impact. Let's dive into your questions and interests one step at a time. **Inquiry Questions:** 1. What are the key environmental challenges in the manufacturing of electric vehicles? - This is an interesting topic because it delves into the hidden costs of producing electric vehicles, which are often perceived as environmentally friendly. Understanding these challenges can help evaluate the true sustainability of electric vehicles. - Quotes: "Electric cars have become more common... concerns about their manufacturing environmental impact." "I want to understand... what environmental challenges they face in manufacturing." 2. How do the current electric vehicle models differ in terms of technology and environmental impact? - This question is important because it allows for a comparison of different models, shedding light on which ones might be more sustainable or efficient. - Quotes: "I want to understand the differences between the electric vehicle models..." "I want to research the technology behind making these cars..." 3. What technological advancements are necessary for electric vehicles to replace gas-powered vehicles realistically? - Exploring this question could reveal the gaps that need to be filled for electric vehicles to become a mainstream mode of transportation. - Quotes: "...explore how quickly they could realistically replace gas-powered vehicles..." "given an adequate electric grid and a manufacturing process that is not polluting..." 4. How does the current electric grid support the adoption of electric vehicles, and what improvements are needed? - This topic is crucial because the infrastructure required to support a large number of electric vehicles is a significant factor in their viability. - Quotes: "replace gas-powered vehicles, given an adequate electric grid..." "explore how quickly they could realistically replace gas-powered vehicles..." 5. What role do electric vehicles play in reducing overall carbon emissions in comparison to gas-powered vehicles? - Understanding the impact on carbon emissions is key to evaluating the overall benefit of switching to electric vehicles. - Quotes: "long-term viability of electric vehicles..." "concerns about their manufacturing environmental impact." Let's pretend to start writing about one of these topics, such as the environmental challenges in the manufacturing of electric vehicles. ### Think-Aloud Process: As a writer, I'm asking myself: What specific environmental challenges are associated with the manufacturing of electric vehicles? I'm wondering about the materials used, such as lithium for batteries, and how their extraction and processing impact the environment. I also want to know how these challenges compare to those of traditional vehicle manufacturing. Do you want to see more? Thu, 20 Mar 2025 16:32:23 -0400 I didn't know that this came in a fully electric version. https://writingpartners.net/documents/6343?scroll_to=40919 https://writingpartners.net/documents/6343?scroll_to=40919 Tue, 18 Mar 2025 11:06:34 -0400 I think these are pretty popular. https://writingpartners.net/documents/6343?scroll_to=40918 https://writingpartners.net/documents/6343?scroll_to=40918 Tue, 18 Mar 2025 11:05:57 -0400 It seems to me that the Nissan Leaf has fallen out of favor with consumers as I have seen very few new ones. https://writingpartners.net/documents/6343?scroll_to=40917 https://writingpartners.net/documents/6343?scroll_to=40917 Tue, 18 Mar 2025 11:05:34 -0400 Progress is progress. https://writingpartners.net/documents/6343?scroll_to=40916 https://writingpartners.net/documents/6343?scroll_to=40916 Tue, 18 Mar 2025 11:03:30 -0400 This is great, but I don't think comparing an electric Mini Cooper to a diesel-powered Ram truck is fair. https://writingpartners.net/documents/6343?scroll_to=40915 https://writingpartners.net/documents/6343?scroll_to=40915 Tue, 18 Mar 2025 11:03:10 -0400 I wonder what EVs are considered "inefficient and heavy." https://writingpartners.net/documents/6343?scroll_to=40914 https://writingpartners.net/documents/6343?scroll_to=40914 Tue, 18 Mar 2025 11:01:16 -0400 Hybrids are a good way to get into the EV market if you're not sure about going fully electric. https://writingpartners.net/documents/6343?scroll_to=40911 https://writingpartners.net/documents/6343?scroll_to=40911 Tue, 18 Mar 2025 11:00:44 -0400 This is a good point. Are we looking for problems that don't exist? https://writingpartners.net/documents/6226?scroll_to=40720 https://writingpartners.net/documents/6226?scroll_to=40720 Fri, 14 Mar 2025 18:20:25 -0400 So not exactly carbon neutral, but still better for the planet. https://writingpartners.net/documents/6226?scroll_to=40719 https://writingpartners.net/documents/6226?scroll_to=40719 Fri, 14 Mar 2025 18:19:22 -0400 That's interesting, I would think that it would be from battery manufacturing. https://writingpartners.net/documents/6226?scroll_to=40690 https://writingpartners.net/documents/6226?scroll_to=40690 Thu, 13 Mar 2025 15:14:28 -0400 How many emissions does a gas-powered car give off in its lifetime? https://writingpartners.net/documents/6226?scroll_to=40689 https://writingpartners.net/documents/6226?scroll_to=40689 Thu, 13 Mar 2025 15:08:49 -0400 Great quote to use in the paper. https://writingpartners.net/documents/6226?scroll_to=40688 https://writingpartners.net/documents/6226?scroll_to=40688 Thu, 13 Mar 2025 15:07:13 -0400 Rivian is climbing the ranks in EV sales; it will be interesting to see how the market treats them long-term. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5909?scroll_to=39402 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5909?scroll_to=39402 Thu, 06 Mar 2025 17:00:48 -0500 I think I've only seen two of these, I wonder where they are most popular. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5909?scroll_to=39401 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5909?scroll_to=39401 Thu, 06 Mar 2025 17:00:10 -0500 The Equinox was a good seller as a gas-powered car, so I'm not shocked that they decided to adapt it into an EV. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5909?scroll_to=39400 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5909?scroll_to=39400 Thu, 06 Mar 2025 16:59:45 -0500 I think these are really cool. I will be interested to see how well the market takes this model. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5909?scroll_to=39399 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5909?scroll_to=39399 Thu, 06 Mar 2025 16:59:11 -0500 A good-looking truck; you can hardly tell by looking at it that it is electric. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5909?scroll_to=39398 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5909?scroll_to=39398 Thu, 06 Mar 2025 16:58:40 -0500 I think this will be a trend that will fall off of this list in the next few years. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5909?scroll_to=39397 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5909?scroll_to=39397 Thu, 06 Mar 2025 16:58:07 -0500 Hyundai has really stepped up their styling game across their models, as has Kia. I'm not surprised that this has made the list. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5909?scroll_to=39396 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5909?scroll_to=39396 Thu, 06 Mar 2025 16:57:43 -0500 Sleek designs sell. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5909?scroll_to=39395 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5909?scroll_to=39395 Thu, 06 Mar 2025 16:57:01 -0500 These are becoming more common, and I like them more than any other electric SUV on the market right now. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5909?scroll_to=39394 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5909?scroll_to=39394 Thu, 06 Mar 2025 16:56:33 -0500 These are also everywhere. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5909?scroll_to=39393 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5909?scroll_to=39393 Thu, 06 Mar 2025 16:55:56 -0500 I wonder if most people are buying or leasing these. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5909?scroll_to=39392 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5909?scroll_to=39392 Thu, 06 Mar 2025 16:55:43 -0500 These are everywhere. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5909?scroll_to=39391 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5909?scroll_to=39391 Thu, 06 Mar 2025 16:55:13 -0500 EVs are becoming more widely used every day. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5909?scroll_to=39390 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5909?scroll_to=39390 Thu, 06 Mar 2025 16:54:48 -0500 That is a massive jump. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5909?scroll_to=39389 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5909?scroll_to=39389 Thu, 06 Mar 2025 16:54:08 -0500 How long can some of the best-selling electric vehicles last? As long as their gas-powered alternatives? https://writingpartners.net/documents/5869?scroll_to=39129 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5869?scroll_to=39129 Wed, 05 Mar 2025 15:44:03 -0500 This is great, we need this for electric vehicles to be widely adopted. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5869?scroll_to=39128 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5869?scroll_to=39128 Wed, 05 Mar 2025 15:42:35 -0500 The batteries should be designed to be recycled. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5869?scroll_to=39127 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5869?scroll_to=39127 Wed, 05 Mar 2025 15:41:11 -0500 I haven't heard of this before, how widespread is the knowledge? https://writingpartners.net/documents/5869?scroll_to=39126 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5869?scroll_to=39126 Wed, 05 Mar 2025 15:40:32 -0500 The OEMs absolutely should be helping auto recyclers to figure out how to replace these batteries. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5869?scroll_to=39125 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5869?scroll_to=39125 Wed, 05 Mar 2025 15:39:55 -0500 That would advance the technology to be more environmentally friendly though, right? https://writingpartners.net/documents/5869?scroll_to=39124 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5869?scroll_to=39124 Wed, 05 Mar 2025 15:39:05 -0500 Is there a safe/environmentally friendly way to mine lithium? https://writingpartners.net/documents/5869?scroll_to=39123 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5869?scroll_to=39123 Wed, 05 Mar 2025 15:38:21 -0500 Why doesn't the US have these types of resources in abundance? https://writingpartners.net/documents/5869?scroll_to=39122 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5869?scroll_to=39122 Wed, 05 Mar 2025 15:35:42 -0500 That's progress! https://writingpartners.net/documents/5869?scroll_to=39121 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5869?scroll_to=39121 Wed, 05 Mar 2025 15:35:15 -0500 What is "US mix?" Using that would be a great improvement. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5869?scroll_to=39113 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5869?scroll_to=39113 Wed, 05 Mar 2025 14:55:53 -0500 Marginally better is still an improvement. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5869?scroll_to=39112 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5869?scroll_to=39112 Wed, 05 Mar 2025 14:55:13 -0500 Where does energy really come from for American households? What about houses with solar? https://writingpartners.net/documents/5869?scroll_to=39111 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5869?scroll_to=39111 Wed, 05 Mar 2025 14:54:46 -0500 This also saves emissions. If we can make electric vehicles more efficient to charge and manufacture, they would be a great substitute for people who drive a lot. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5869?scroll_to=39109 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5869?scroll_to=39109 Wed, 05 Mar 2025 14:52:31 -0500 Sure, but I bet they're making and selling more cars too. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5638?scroll_to=38122 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5638?scroll_to=38122 Thu, 27 Feb 2025 16:26:21 -0500 Are they? I thought Ford was making some pretty good fuel-efficient cars. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5638?scroll_to=38121 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5638?scroll_to=38121 Thu, 27 Feb 2025 16:25:58 -0500 I mean of course it is, it's not exactly fair to compare the two. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5638?scroll_to=38120 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5638?scroll_to=38120 Thu, 27 Feb 2025 16:24:52 -0500 Not ideal for the company seemingly leading the EV revolution. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5638?scroll_to=38119 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5638?scroll_to=38119 Thu, 27 Feb 2025 16:24:30 -0500 Why did they do this, was there a reason? https://writingpartners.net/documents/5638?scroll_to=38118 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5638?scroll_to=38118 Thu, 27 Feb 2025 16:23:55 -0500 I feel like this is obvious? The point is that they are zero-emission cars, but that's when they're being driven. Naturally it takes emissions to produce them. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5638?scroll_to=38115 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5638?scroll_to=38115 Thu, 27 Feb 2025 16:22:59 -0500 How does this compare to gas-powered vehicles? https://writingpartners.net/documents/5638?scroll_to=38113 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5638?scroll_to=38113 Thu, 27 Feb 2025 16:21:52 -0500 What is the real cost difference between base model gas and electric vehicles? https://writingpartners.net/documents/5137?scroll_to=37177 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5137?scroll_to=37177 Thu, 20 Feb 2025 16:24:04 -0500 Yes, all factors are important. But lifelong emissions are the real difference-maker. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5137?scroll_to=37119 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5137?scroll_to=37119 Wed, 19 Feb 2025 11:23:12 -0500 We need to continue to develop battery technology, but where are we right now? https://writingpartners.net/documents/5137?scroll_to=37118 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5137?scroll_to=37118 Wed, 19 Feb 2025 11:22:44 -0500 This is something that requires more research. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5137?scroll_to=37117 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5137?scroll_to=37117 Wed, 19 Feb 2025 11:22:13 -0500 Ok, but what about lifetime running emissions? How much do those add? https://writingpartners.net/documents/5137?scroll_to=37116 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5137?scroll_to=37116 Wed, 19 Feb 2025 11:21:49 -0500 This is the obvious thing, but how bad are they? https://writingpartners.net/documents/5137?scroll_to=37115 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5137?scroll_to=37115 Wed, 19 Feb 2025 11:21:06 -0500 Maybe I could focus on the top three best-selling electric vehicles for simplicity's sake? https://writingpartners.net/documents/5110?scroll_to=37109 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5110?scroll_to=37109 Wed, 19 Feb 2025 11:10:27 -0500 But is it the same for EVs? I think manufacturing is probably more. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5110?scroll_to=37105 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5110?scroll_to=37105 Wed, 19 Feb 2025 11:06:34 -0500 New Question: What electric vehicles are currently on the market, and how environmentally friendly are they in terms of lifelong emissions, including manufacturing? https://writingpartners.net/documents/5110?scroll_to=37104 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5110?scroll_to=37104 Wed, 19 Feb 2025 11:05:27 -0500 But is that re-use practice widely in use? https://writingpartners.net/documents/5110?scroll_to=37098 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5110?scroll_to=37098 Wed, 19 Feb 2025 10:52:58 -0500 I'm wondering if I could somehow tie in the expected lifetime of an EV and how long people typically keep them. If they opt to trade in, are they buying another EV, or do they go back to gas or a hybrid? https://writingpartners.net/documents/5110?scroll_to=37096 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5110?scroll_to=37096 Wed, 19 Feb 2025 10:51:49 -0500 I need to find another source here that is more mainstream, and preferably from a source within the United States as this article was written in Australia. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5110?scroll_to=37093 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5110?scroll_to=37093 Wed, 19 Feb 2025 10:49:26 -0500 I want to especially look into the production and lifelong emissions; electric vehicles have an environmental impact during production, but do their lack of emissions make up for it? https://writingpartners.net/documents/5110?scroll_to=37092 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5110?scroll_to=37092 Wed, 19 Feb 2025 10:48:45 -0500 Hybrids are pretty popular in American markets. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5044?scroll_to=36804 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5044?scroll_to=36804 Wed, 12 Feb 2025 16:32:54 -0500 Lower emissions definitely. But what about the manufacturing process? Does it cause environmental damage? https://writingpartners.net/documents/5044?scroll_to=36803 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5044?scroll_to=36803 Wed, 12 Feb 2025 16:32:05 -0500 This is very interesting. The batteries may have limited lifetimes in cars, but afterword they can still be used. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5044?scroll_to=36802 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5044?scroll_to=36802 Wed, 12 Feb 2025 16:31:29 -0500 I wonder if this is similar in America. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5044?scroll_to=36801 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5044?scroll_to=36801 Wed, 12 Feb 2025 16:30:40 -0500 I want to look into this. Electric cars might be worse for the environment to manufacture, but do their long-term benefits make up for that? https://writingpartners.net/documents/5044?scroll_to=36800 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5044?scroll_to=36800 Wed, 12 Feb 2025 16:30:11 -0500 I would bet that some parts of America, especially in states like Texas drive heavier cars too. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5044?scroll_to=36799 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5044?scroll_to=36799 Wed, 12 Feb 2025 16:29:06 -0500 So this article is focused more on the second part of my question, "How quickly can we make their production more carbon neutral?" https://writingpartners.net/documents/5044?scroll_to=36798 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5044?scroll_to=36798 Wed, 12 Feb 2025 16:27:39 -0500 SUVs are the car of the future in my opinion, so we need to make sure electric SUVs are sustainable. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5044?scroll_to=36792 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5044?scroll_to=36792 Wed, 12 Feb 2025 16:25:50 -0500 This is what I want to look into. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5044?scroll_to=36789 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5044?scroll_to=36789 Wed, 12 Feb 2025 16:24:40 -0500 This is a prediction from Orwell of a future without privacy. This prediction was correct in that we fill our lives with devices that are always listening to us. It was wrong in that we have a choice, and we choose to sacrifice our privacy for convenience https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=35907 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=35907 (https://apnews.com/article/amazon-alexa-ring-doorbell-privacy-violations-ftc-971419109d7af10203d7ccfd28fcd0ad) This article talks about an order by the FTC for Amazon to pay $31 million for privacy concerns for their Amazon Alexa and Ring Doorbell Camera. Amazon stored the voices of children, which represents a loss of privacy. Tue, 04 Feb 2025 11:05:15 -0500 In this nightmare of a reality, I suppose when you find someone you think you can trust, you cling to them no matter how great the risk. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=33184 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=33184 Tue, 21 Jan 2025 22:21:22 -0500 This society is awful. Everyone hates everyone else, but they don't seem to have a real reason. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=33181 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=33181 Tue, 21 Jan 2025 22:19:48 -0500 She seems to be very good at planning and taking charge of situations. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=33180 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=33180 Tue, 21 Jan 2025 22:18:35 -0500 Did she know that this disturbance was going to happen? https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=33178 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=33178 Tue, 21 Jan 2025 22:17:14 -0500 Suspicious. Perhaps he was tripped by the girl or maybe a friend of hers? https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=33175 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=33175 Tue, 21 Jan 2025 22:13:19 -0500 Winston hasn't felt loved for a very long time. Now that it could be an option for him, he's obsessed. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=33173 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=33173 Tue, 21 Jan 2025 22:10:31 -0500 Winston's opinions don't seem to stay constant for long, they often change. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=33170 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=33170 Tue, 21 Jan 2025 22:08:15 -0500 So, the spies are essentially a sinister and twisted version of Girl Scouts. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=33168 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=33168 Tue, 21 Jan 2025 22:05:50 -0500 Either this is a trap or love somehow persists in this world despite everything. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=33167 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=33167 Tue, 21 Jan 2025 22:04:41 -0500 Everyone is used to hiding how they are really feeling in order to avoid potential suspicion. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=33166 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=33166 Tue, 21 Jan 2025 22:01:35 -0500 How could I improve this paper and bring it up to a score of 6? https://writingpartners.net/documents/4049?scroll_to=32668 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4049?scroll_to=32668 You've got a solid foundation here, but to bump up your score, let's zero in on a few vital areas. First, dive deeper into how Sonia Sotomayor uses pathos and logos. You've mentioned these appeals, but beefing up your analysis with more specific examples from the text could really make your argument pop. For instance, explore how her food imagery not only evokes emotion but highlights cultural diversity. Also, don't just mention ethos—show how her credibility as a Latina judge enriches her message about identity. Interested in exploring how to refine your thesis, integrate more textual evidence, or enhance your discussion on the rhetorical situation? Pick one or more, or suggest another aspect you'd like to dig into! Let's take this essay to the next level! Revise or edit your writing right now. If this is your document, click on a sentence or a paragraph number in the left panel, then hit *Edit*, make your changes and hit *Update*. You can also hit *Suggest Revision* on a document that you have been invited to. Another option is to hit *Add to Document*, and then you can add *New Content* for deeper, multi-paragraph rewrites. Please Note: Everything in this comment is AI-generated. It is made up to sound like your helpful AP English Language teacher in room 126. Thu, 16 Jan 2025 16:23:54 -0500 Very similar to pretty much every war. Those working against the people in power are almost always hiding in plain sight, not even knowing who else is on their side. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=31791 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=31791 Thu, 09 Jan 2025 19:22:54 -0500 I think this is an interesting viewpoint because even where we read diaries of long-passed times, we still pay attention to their meanings. I think we develop a kind of mindset that says, "We won't go back to that." https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=31790 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=31790 Thu, 09 Jan 2025 19:12:26 -0500 Dealing on the "free market" isn't allowed for ministry employees. Perhaps this is why Winston has so many things called "Victory ________"? The Victory products may have some kind of influence over the users? https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=31789 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=31789 Thu, 09 Jan 2025 19:09:37 -0500 The repeated use of "Victory" before multiple products is interesting. It makes me wonder if the government manufactures/sells them? https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=31788 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=31788 Thu, 09 Jan 2025 19:07:04 -0500 This description gives a hint at what may have happened here. Something went very wrong, and the very landscape shows it. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=31787 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=31787 Thu, 09 Jan 2025 19:02:21 -0500 Definitely strong WWII reminders here, particularly in Nazi-invaded countries. The people were constantly being watched, and they had to be very careful not to look suspicious. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=31786 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=31786 Thu, 09 Jan 2025 19:01:04 -0500 The city itself seems to serve as a metaphor for the reality of life for its citizens. It's worn down, dark, and plastered with reminders of Big Brother. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=31785 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=31785 Thu, 09 Jan 2025 18:59:17 -0500 I think the idea of self-improvement on this topic is really interesting. We don't always need to change, but sometimes we want to be someone different. https://writingpartners.net/documents/3348?scroll_to=25518 https://writingpartners.net/documents/3348?scroll_to=25518 Tue, 03 Dec 2024 11:15:31 -0500 According to Myers-Briggs, the answer is no. https://writingpartners.net/documents/3348?scroll_to=25515 https://writingpartners.net/documents/3348?scroll_to=25515 Tue, 03 Dec 2024 11:14:28 -0500 This correlates with my topic. People change throughout their lives, but that doesn't mean that they are completely different people when they change. https://writingpartners.net/documents/3348?scroll_to=25512 https://writingpartners.net/documents/3348?scroll_to=25512 Tue, 03 Dec 2024 11:12:49 -0500 Abortion is a huge issue in this election. I think the candidate's views on it could swing the whole thing. https://writingpartners.net/documents/2862?scroll_to=18846 https://writingpartners.net/documents/2862?scroll_to=18846 Tue, 05 Nov 2024 21:06:11 -0500 It's interesting how suburban areas are voting more for Harris. https://writingpartners.net/documents/2862?scroll_to=18838 https://writingpartners.net/documents/2862?scroll_to=18838 Tue, 05 Nov 2024 21:03:37 -0500 It's very interesting how something more modern like a podcast can affect people choosing who to vote for. https://writingpartners.net/documents/2862?scroll_to=18817 https://writingpartners.net/documents/2862?scroll_to=18817 Tue, 05 Nov 2024 20:57:34 -0500 This report is definitely leaning heaving left with the data being narrated in terms of what Harris will need to win. https://writingpartners.net/documents/2862?scroll_to=18791 https://writingpartners.net/documents/2862?scroll_to=18791 Tue, 05 Nov 2024 20:50:13 -0500 Repeating "we are not going back" as many times as she did makes it memorable. It also makes it sounds definitive. https://writingpartners.net/documents/746?scroll_to=3362 https://writingpartners.net/documents/746?scroll_to=3362 Tue, 10 Sep 2024 11:26:55 -0400