Comments by 2025 Grace Willmarth Most recent public comments by 2025 Grace Willmarth https://writingpartners.net/users/350 not related to the question but interesting https://writingpartners.net/documents/5266?scroll_to=37393 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5266?scroll_to=37393 This is actually really interesting, even though it's not directly related to my question. Because of sleep deprivation, the brain has an increased reward sensitivity, which in some cases can lead to relapse for drugs or alcohol. Fri, 21 Feb 2025 13:50:54 -0500 sleep deprivation leads to increased reactivity to positive emotions https://writingpartners.net/documents/5266?scroll_to=37390 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5266?scroll_to=37390 Sleep deprivation leads to increased reactivity to all stimuli, according to this article. The brain can be stimulated by both positive and negative things and have overactive reactions. This goes to show that sleep deprivation lessens the brain's ability to control emotions and reactions to emotions, which allows a person to be vulnerable during conversations. Fri, 21 Feb 2025 13:47:15 -0500 summary of article https://writingpartners.net/documents/5266?scroll_to=37389 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5266?scroll_to=37389 This article talks about the science of how sleep deprivation affects how we process emotions. Overall, sleep deprivation usually leads to negative emotional brain function and can result in many emotional disorders such as anxiety, depression, etc. However, I still believe this can provide evidence to the question because the article mentions how sleep deprivation overall lowers the ability to control emotions. Fri, 21 Feb 2025 13:42:14 -0500 links to comment above (background and evidence) https://writingpartners.net/documents/5268?scroll_to=37388 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5268?scroll_to=37388 Fri, 21 Feb 2025 13:38:21 -0500 . https://writingpartners.net/documents/5268?scroll_to=37387 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5268?scroll_to=37387 It's odd to think that the less sleep you get, the more energy you have. But it's true, I've experienced not getting any sleep and having more energy than days where I got a full night's rest. Fri, 21 Feb 2025 13:37:54 -0500 links to comment above https://writingpartners.net/documents/5268?scroll_to=37384 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5268?scroll_to=37384 This shows the science behind how our brain processes information differently late at night. The increased amount of dopamine released affects how creatively our brains work at night which explains why people can have deeper conversations. Fri, 21 Feb 2025 13:36:31 -0500 . https://writingpartners.net/documents/5268?scroll_to=37378 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5268?scroll_to=37378 It's true that late at night there is a difference in how vulnerable people are willing to be. It feels almost as if people don't have a wall built up and maybe it's due to be tired. Fri, 21 Feb 2025 13:34:25 -0500 summary or article https://writingpartners.net/documents/5268?scroll_to=37375 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5268?scroll_to=37375 This article talks about the science behind late night conversations and why they feel so profound compared to daytime conversations. It dives into how the brain processes information differently late at night and how being tired increases the amount of dopamine released in the brain’s social and decision making areas, which allows for more uninhibited reflection. At night, heightened emotional intimacy, greater honesty, and a sense of timelessness allows discussions to flow freely. Fri, 21 Feb 2025 13:32:38 -0500 . https://writingpartners.net/documents/4992?scroll_to=36869 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4992?scroll_to=36869 Well. Another way that Trump is not helping our economy Thu, 13 Feb 2025 15:37:48 -0500 . https://writingpartners.net/documents/4992?scroll_to=36868 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4992?scroll_to=36868 By lowering costs of college and making it more affordable would make it worth it. Paying for college is so ridiculously expensive that it makes it not worth it for a large population Thu, 13 Feb 2025 15:37:11 -0500 . https://writingpartners.net/documents/4992?scroll_to=36866 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4992?scroll_to=36866 And the deportation of a large percentage of our labor force is not helping Thu, 13 Feb 2025 15:35:36 -0500 Like I said earlier https://writingpartners.net/documents/4992?scroll_to=36865 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4992?scroll_to=36865 Like before, almost any decent job requires some type of degree beyond high school, and reports show that in future years, it'll almost be impossible to get a job without a college degree. Thu, 13 Feb 2025 15:34:08 -0500 . https://writingpartners.net/documents/4992?scroll_to=36863 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4992?scroll_to=36863 Right, which is why I would think there'd be a higher rate of college enrollment. Thu, 13 Feb 2025 15:33:08 -0500 Increase of enrollment https://writingpartners.net/documents/4992?scroll_to=36862 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4992?scroll_to=36862 Again, I would think that the boom of students would increase college enrollment. Also, nowadays, it's almost impossible to find jobs without at least an undergraduates degreee. Thu, 13 Feb 2025 15:31:59 -0500 Odd https://writingpartners.net/documents/4992?scroll_to=36860 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4992?scroll_to=36860 This is interesting because I would think that there'd be an increase of an increase in enrollment. Thu, 13 Feb 2025 15:28:54 -0500 Winston is constantly concerned with being watched by Big Brother. According to https://www.pbs.org/newshour/show/new-documentary-details-how-governments-use-spyware-to-monitor-citizens-phones, the government is using spyware to monitor it's own citizens. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=36011 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=36011 The telescreens are always watching him and it makes it so nowhere is safe to do anything. He is worried about always being watched through technology. I think in a certain way, he is correct. Maybe not necessarily in our society, but in other countries, citizens are closely watched through media or other ways of communication. Tue, 04 Feb 2025 12:28:13 -0500 Connection to "The Handmaid's Tale" https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=34463 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=34463 I would connect this book to "The Handmaid's Tale" because both are about rebellion through love. In both books, their relationships represent humanization in a dehumanizing world. Fri, 24 Jan 2025 12:18:48 -0500 He has a clear understanding for how people view the Party. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=34461 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=34461 He's very intuitive with people's emotions and actions and how they reflect their opinions about the Party. Already, he's not even considering anymore that she's part of the Thought Police, even though just about a week before, he was totally convinced she was spying on him. Fri, 24 Jan 2025 12:08:39 -0500 It's a dangerous note whether or not it's a trap. And really, it's a trap either way. Either, she's tricking him and going to report him to the Thought Police, or her feelings are true. If he pursues it, no matter what it truly means, it's still a trap. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=34459 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=34459 Fri, 24 Jan 2025 12:04:25 -0500 His instinctive move towards her to help her shows that he is unlike the Party because he still shows emotion and thought. The whole point of the Party is to dehumanize them and make them into robots essentially. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=34457 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=34457 Fri, 24 Jan 2025 12:00:29 -0500 How well does my essay demonstrate an understanding of the rhetorical situation? https://writingpartners.net/documents/4059?scroll_to=32849 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4059?scroll_to=32849 Your essay provides a solid grasp of Rita Dove's rhetorical situation, beginning with her interaction with the students. You adeptly highlight her strategic establishment of credibility through ethos, referencing her position and accomplishments. You also touch on how she relates to students’ values—hunger, hard work, and uncertainty—to create a compelling argument. To enhance your rhetorical analysis, consider deepening your exploration of how Dove intertwines her personal anecdotes with broader values to resonate emotionally (pathos). You smartly observe her motherly tone, but try linking this tone to specific language choices Dove makes. Curious about your essay’s next move? Here are paths we could trek: refining how rhetorics weave into messages, uncovering nuances linking logical connections, or exploring how language foils inspire emotional cushioning. Which road sounds enticing to you? Or maybe you’ve spotted a secret trail tantalizing your curiosity! Please Note: Everything in this comment is AI-generated. It is made up to sound like your helpful AP English Language teacher in room 126. Fri, 17 Jan 2025 13:47:26 -0500 How well did I explain the evidence I used to support my line of reasoning? https://writingpartners.net/documents/4059?scroll_to=32842 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4059?scroll_to=32842 You've done a commendable job illustrating Rita Dove's impact through ethos and pathos. Your focus on her credibility via personal connections and achievements was well-explained. For instance, you highlight her university experience, which roots her message in familiarity. It's essential, though, to connect explicitly how these elements deeply reinforce her message. When discussing "hunger," "hard work," and "uncertainty," you effectively align these with student values, yet delve further into how Dove’s subtle, caring tone—her “contrary fairy godmother” persona—elevates this impact. Consider refining your commentary on how ethos intertwines with pathos to sustain her audience’s trust and emotion. How might you demonstrate the effect of personal anecdotes or how they resonate emotionally? What are your thoughts on delving deeper into her contrasts between student anxieties and the comfort she offers? Or maybe explore more ways her tone may influence different student segments? Eager to hear your thoughts and take this analysis to the next level! Please Note: Everything in this comment is AI-generated. It is made up to sound like your helpful AP English Language teacher in room 126. Fri, 17 Jan 2025 13:46:56 -0500 How well did I respond to the prompt with a thesis that analyzes the writer’s rhetorical choices? https://writingpartners.net/documents/4059?scroll_to=32834 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4059?scroll_to=32834 You did a wonderful job indicating Rita Dove's main rhetorical choices, highlighting her use of ethos and pathos. However, to strengthen your thesis, aim for a clearer connection between these rhetorical strategies and her specific message or purpose. You touched on this when mentioning her "wishes for students" and how she "appeals to their values," which can be reinforced by specifying how her personal anecdotes and gentle tone guide the audience. Also, addressing the purpose behind her wishful tone and narrative style enhances analytical depth. Quotes like "I wish you Hunger" could anchor your analysis of her choice to imbue her pragmatic advice with sentimental wishes, adding richness to your argument. What more would you like to hear? We could discuss how her personal stories enhance her ethos, explore her wish strategy with graduates, or dive deeper into how she uses pathos to resonate with student fears. Where to next in this adventure? Please Note: Everything in this comment is AI-generated. It is made up to sound like your helpful AP English Language teacher in room 126. Fri, 17 Jan 2025 13:51:58 -0500 . https://writingpartners.net/documents/3387?scroll_to=25652 https://writingpartners.net/documents/3387?scroll_to=25652 I think overall this document just goes to show that we really are what we eat. The brain has different reactions to different foods and it explains how eating disorders can come about. People's brains will literally block the signal that says they have enough nutrients. Tue, 03 Dec 2024 13:01:02 -0500 the time frame of eating also affects our bodies, eating throughout the entire day causes people to gain more weight compared to eating 3 distinct meals, even though the number of calories is the same. i wonder if it's because of digestion? https://writingpartners.net/documents/3387?scroll_to=25637 https://writingpartners.net/documents/3387?scroll_to=25637 Tue, 03 Dec 2024 12:52:35 -0500 again supports my previous comment https://writingpartners.net/documents/3387?scroll_to=25627 https://writingpartners.net/documents/3387?scroll_to=25627 Tue, 03 Dec 2024 12:50:07 -0500 this addresses the question that eating habits literally change your brain. again it goes to explain how people can gain so much wait and could even explain eating disorders. https://writingpartners.net/documents/3387?scroll_to=25624 https://writingpartners.net/documents/3387?scroll_to=25624 Tue, 03 Dec 2024 12:49:42 -0500 I find this paragraph really interesting because it's basically saying that there's a scientific reason as to why people are obese. Their bodies don't respond to nutrients in the stomach which allows them to eat more. https://writingpartners.net/documents/3387?scroll_to=25609 https://writingpartners.net/documents/3387?scroll_to=25609 Tue, 03 Dec 2024 12:46:59 -0500 His speech doesn't seem very cohesive, it seems like he is just rambling. He is also very vague, which proves Orwell's argument. Unlike Kamala, he doesn't outline what he plans to do as president. In general, his speech is very unclear and hard to follow. https://writingpartners.net/documents/772?scroll_to=3402 https://writingpartners.net/documents/772?scroll_to=3402 Tue, 10 Sep 2024 13:00:16 -0400 I think that George Orwell's argument is proven incorrect at this point becuase Kamala hasn't used any euphemisms and directly attacks Trump. Orwell argues that all political language is about beating around the bush, but so far she hasn't done that. https://writingpartners.net/documents/772?scroll_to=3381 https://writingpartners.net/documents/772?scroll_to=3381 Tue, 10 Sep 2024 12:56:13 -0400