Comments by 2025 Niamh Wallis Most recent public comments by 2025 Niamh Wallis https://writingpartners.net/users/355 These proposed solutions may not be the most liked by the community as they limit the use of public lands like parks to create housing developments, however with the dire situation we find ourselves in this may be the only viable solution. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5866?scroll_to=39117 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5866?scroll_to=39117 Finding housing structures that work in the most economical and ergonomically way is key. Wed, 05 Mar 2025 13:05:24 -0700 The development of more effective design choices has to be made because this is the only way to ensure effective solutions that work with city development. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5866?scroll_to=39114 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5866?scroll_to=39114 Wed, 05 Mar 2025 12:56:10 -0700 This is another example of the Jurassic measures that have to be taken to advance our housing development as a result of the ignorance the issue has faced in the past. Our historical disregard of the issue has led to a deficiency that cannot be solved. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5866?scroll_to=39110 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5866?scroll_to=39110 Wed, 05 Mar 2025 12:53:40 -0700 The ever growing trend of moving out of cities has stopped the appeal of city housing which has left many inner city developments empty and driven up the costs of limited rural housing that has not grown with the trends. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5866?scroll_to=39108 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5866?scroll_to=39108 Wed, 05 Mar 2025 12:52:05 -0700 This is an example of how outdated the housing system is and how there have not been any policy changes to help with the changing circumstances and to provide assistance to families looking for housing. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5866?scroll_to=39107 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5866?scroll_to=39107 Wed, 05 Mar 2025 12:50:15 -0700 This data reflects the positive enforcement and affects that providing housing support and solutions can have on the homeless in Salt Lake. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5556?scroll_to=38051 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5556?scroll_to=38051 Thu, 27 Feb 2025 09:16:07 -0700 This is an example of how the number of homeless in Salt Lake has not only increased, but the severity of their situations have gotten worse. The increasing homeless population is not only detrimental to societal welfare but also city development. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5556?scroll_to=38050 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5556?scroll_to=38050 Thu, 27 Feb 2025 09:14:36 -0700 Other states have previously funded and supported open housing options, whilst Utah has been behind and largely avoided solutions to the housing crisis, extending the problem and deepening the issue. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5556?scroll_to=37882 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5556?scroll_to=37882 Wed, 26 Feb 2025 12:43:29 -0700 The Utah government has put together funds to initiate affordable housing solutions, though these government run systems often produce a poor and understructures solution. There have also been initiatives to provide rent support, which don't require https://writingpartners.net/documents/5556?scroll_to=37875 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5556?scroll_to=37875 further development and encourage occupation of empty housing units. Wed, 26 Feb 2025 12:01:09 -0700 The price of housing is increasing and affordable housing options are not being created at a rate to compete with the crisis. Rent and economic stalls have pressured many into homelessness. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5556?scroll_to=37869 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5556?scroll_to=37869 Wed, 26 Feb 2025 11:58:53 -0700 Homeless trends are increasing at a rate corresponding to the housing decline and insufficient production of affordable housing solutions. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5556?scroll_to=37865 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5556?scroll_to=37865 Wed, 26 Feb 2025 11:57:45 -0700 Homelessness is an increasing trend due to recent decline in economic states, however Utahs issue has been accelerated due to poor housing management, thus leading a smaller city into big city issues without sustainable infrastructure. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5556?scroll_to=37863 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5556?scroll_to=37863 Wed, 26 Feb 2025 11:56:29 -0700 Addresses the direct correlation between the Utah housing crisis and our ever growing homeless issue that has caused many problems for both city development and livelihood of communities. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5556?scroll_to=37859 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5556?scroll_to=37859 Wed, 26 Feb 2025 11:55:07 -0700 The lack of clarity of the reason behind the housing crisis and a lack of education to support the home buying industry has misled many people as to what a solution could be as compared to what is a solution that is needed. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5247?scroll_to=37367 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5247?scroll_to=37367 Fri, 21 Feb 2025 11:21:23 -0700 This shows how outside costs and external circumstances have impacted peoples ability to buy and sell homes, and the impacts that such housing stresses has on our communities. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5247?scroll_to=37357 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5247?scroll_to=37357 Fri, 21 Feb 2025 11:19:18 -0700 This represents the impact of the housing crisis and importance of developing a home-buyer market that can support new families and continue to develop the state of the city and economic industry. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5247?scroll_to=37354 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5247?scroll_to=37354 Fri, 21 Feb 2025 11:18:24 -0700 The crisis continues to become more and more obvious as the issue increases, with more families being forced out and becoming homeless during a declining economic state. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5247?scroll_to=37350 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5247?scroll_to=37350 Fri, 21 Feb 2025 11:17:09 -0700 These smaller homes may be used at first but will they continue to provide a solution, or will they become a dilapidated waste? https://writingpartners.net/documents/5247?scroll_to=37345 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5247?scroll_to=37345 Fri, 21 Feb 2025 11:15:59 -0700 Though Utah government seems to be taking initiative in creating more homes as a solution, I cannot help but think that these efforts are ineffective as they do are often built with the bare minimum in mind and as such maintain an unhealthy environment. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5247?scroll_to=37338 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5247?scroll_to=37338 Additionally with the mass production the houses lack the individuality that increases appeal in the city. Fri, 21 Feb 2025 11:15:16 -0700 The housing market also serves as a means of income and city development, without the movement of property management cities like Salt lake will come to a stand still in growth and innovation State-wide. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4991?scroll_to=36670 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4991?scroll_to=36670 Tue, 11 Feb 2025 11:05:05 -0700 The temporary boost in apartment complexes did not solve the issue as these housing developments could not safely or comfortably support a family, therefore the lack of housing becomes a bigger issue as the increase in apartment structures take up space, https://writingpartners.net/documents/4991?scroll_to=36664 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4991?scroll_to=36664 without creating a solution to family housing. Tue, 11 Feb 2025 11:03:38 -0700 The minimum wage in Utah is one of the lowest in the country, however housing costs are at a national high. This income disparity has created an eminent issue for lower class populations who cannot afford to maintain basic housing costs. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4991?scroll_to=36659 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4991?scroll_to=36659 Tue, 11 Feb 2025 11:01:15 -0700 This sentence shows the Jurassic change in income and pricing changes over the past few decades. Primary indicator of how the housing crisis began and why it persists throughout the state and the country. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4991?scroll_to=36648 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4991?scroll_to=36648 Tue, 11 Feb 2025 10:58:38 -0700 Trump's previous felony charges and all active cases against him involving the illegal case documents he privately kept have been dismissed. https://time.com/6998605/donald-trump-classified-documents-case-dismissed/ https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=36023 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=36023 This article shows how the criminal action of our current president Donald Trump have been dismissed and effectively wiped from the record to protect his administration and reputation as President. This reflects how all evidence of Big Brother's wrongdoings were erased from the public eye to maintain power. Showing how Orwells prediction of government falsification of the news and history has become a reality. Tue, 04 Feb 2025 10:33:59 -0700 Can you elaborate more about this? https://writingpartners.net/documents/4069?scroll_to=32867 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4069?scroll_to=32867 Your analysis effectively highlights Dove's rhetorical choices. However, to improve how you explain evidence to support your argument, provide a clearer connection between the choice and its impact. For instance, when discussing Dove’s references to Percy Shelley, delve deeper into how this enhances ethos—what does it achieve in the speech contextually? Similarly, unpack the repetition of "I wish you" beyond structural impact—consider its emotional resonance. When you describe anecdotes, articulate how these personal experiences engage the graduates, linking Dove’s credibility to empowerment. Your evidence is solid; now, aim to explore how these choices strategically guide Dove's wishes for her audience’s growth. Now, if you want to venture further, let's explore one of these: crafting more vivid examples, enhancing analytical depth, or strengthening connections to purpose. Dive into this rhetorical journey or steer another path—either way, seize the chance to deepen your persuasive prowess! Please Note: Everything in this comment is AI-generated. It is made up to sound like your helpful AP English Language teacher in room 126. Fri, 17 Jan 2025 11:50:09 -0700 How well does my essay demonstrate an understanding of the rhetorical situation? https://writingpartners.net/documents/4069?scroll_to=32850 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4069?scroll_to=32850 Your essay effectively demonstrates an understanding of the rhetorical situation in Rita Dove's speech! You clearly identify her unique approach by portraying words as "wishes" rather than advice, contrasting with typical commencement speeches. Highlighting Dove's use of parallel structures and personal rhetoric establishes her credibility and connects with the audience. Your analysis of her quotes, particularly the one from Percy Shelley, shows how Dove intertwines her literary background to instill trust. Notably, you emphasize the significance of parallel contradictory phrases that enhance the impact of her aspirations for graduates. To deepen your analysis, consider linking more explicitly how these rhetorical choices develop Dove's overarching purpose. You might also explore the emotional resonance her anecdotes create within the audience. What else would you like to know? Shall we dive into the contrast between traditional advice and Dove's wishes, explore her anecdotes more, or discuss her ethos-building strategy? Let's take this essay to the next level! Please Note: Everything in this comment is AI-generated. It is made up to sound like your helpful AP English Language teacher in room 126. Fri, 17 Jan 2025 11:47:33 -0700 How well did I respond to the prompt with a thesis that analyzes the writer’s rhetorical choices? https://writingpartners.net/documents/4069?scroll_to=32844 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4069?scroll_to=32844 You've crafted a solid thesis that captures Rita Dove's unique approach in her commencement address. Emphasizing her "wishes" over traditional advice is insightful. You cite parallel structures, personal anecdotes, and references to establish her rhetorical strength, indicating a solid grasp of the rhetorical situation. Moreover, your analysis of the Shelley quote connects Dove's poetic identity to her credibility, enriching your argument. To enhance your thesis, ensure specificity by clarifying how each rhetorical choice supports Dove's purpose. Consider highlighting the effect of these choices on the audience or tying her structural decisions more directly to the themes of empowerment. How might her narrative style galvanize the graduates? What did you wish upon the clarity of this address? What elements might add depth to your thesis? Let's dive deeper into crafting nuance, strengthening connective tissue, or expanding on effects! Please Note: Everything in this comment is AI-generated. It is made up to sound like your helpful AP English Language teacher in room 126. Fri, 17 Jan 2025 11:47:01 -0700 How well did I explain the evidence I used to support my line of reasoning? https://writingpartners.net/documents/4069?scroll_to=32833 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4069?scroll_to=32833 Your analysis effectively highlights Dove's rhetorical choices. However, to improve how you explain evidence to support your argument, provide a clearer connection between the choice and its impact. For instance, when discussing Dove’s references to Percy Shelley, delve deeper into how this enhances ethos—what does it achieve in the speech contextually? Similarly, unpack the repetition of "I wish you" beyond structural impact—consider its emotional resonance. When you describe anecdotes, articulate how these personal experiences engage the graduates, linking Dove’s credibility to empowerment. Your evidence is solid; now, aim to explore how these choices strategically guide Dove's wishes for her audience’s growth. Now, if you want to venture further, let's explore one of these: crafting more vivid examples, enhancing analytical depth, or strengthening connections to purpose. Dive into this rhetorical journey or steer another path—either way, seize the chance to deepen your persuasive prowess! Please Note: Everything in this comment is AI-generated. It is made up to sound like your helpful AP English Language teacher in room 126. Fri, 17 Jan 2025 11:50:09 -0700 Actively ignoring and dismissing the existence of people to cover up the immoral acts that occurred under Big Brothers direction. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32640 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32640 Thu, 16 Jan 2025 13:18:59 -0700 Again shows how there is no historical evidence to reflect the governments issues as all documents are altered to uphold such an influential reputation. No information is the truth. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32638 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32638 Thu, 16 Jan 2025 13:15:47 -0700 Demonstrates the passive action of dismissing issues in leadership, and the common practice of erasing any evidence, protecting Big Brothers reputation to keep power. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32637 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32637 Tue, 04 Feb 2025 10:33:59 -0700 Shows the misinformation and lack of organization that is the weakness of Big Brother, as they consistently lie to the people and are failing to adequately inform and maintain the people. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32633 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32633 Thu, 16 Jan 2025 13:12:58 -0700 The preceeding lines show mistakes in Big Brother including miscalculating the rations and leak of secret information, reflects the secrecy of Big Brother and the lies that are fed to the people. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32631 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32631 Thu, 16 Jan 2025 13:09:26 -0700 This shows how boys were manipulated from a young age into aggressive behavior and masculine expectations under the ruling of Big Brother. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32542 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32542 Wed, 15 Jan 2025 22:32:32 -0700 Shows the lack of political transparency and how Big Brother is manipulating the people by telling them what they want to hear instead of the truth. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32540 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32540 Wed, 15 Jan 2025 22:24:26 -0700 Much like Fahrenheit 451, as books were burned and knowledge was restricted from the people. Also similar to current discussion over book bans and content in classrooms. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32538 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32538 Wed, 15 Jan 2025 22:13:08 -0700 Reflects the false news and media that was spread during WWI and II and the Vietnam war to increase support, a lack of governmental transparency. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32537 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32537 Fri, 17 Jan 2025 09:46:18 -0700 In this society it is so clear that the people are being watching, and whilst they are not oblivious to it, they have no saying no permission to give. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=31828 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=31828 This idea is so prominent today as we think about algorithms that analyze our behavior on social media and other methods of monitoring activity. The concept is also a lot like The Handmaids Tale and how the all seeing eye poses as a symbol of fear, a reminder that the people are being watched. Fri, 10 Jan 2025 11:56:47 -0700 I appreciate how NBC news has taken a different approach to informing voters of the issues at hand. They have chosen to present polled data, showing the most prominent issues in swing states, which gives a clearer representation of what will be seen. https://writingpartners.net/documents/2862?scroll_to=18919 https://writingpartners.net/documents/2862?scroll_to=18919 The demographics provided describe how votes prioritize the state of democracy, the economy, and abortion rights over other previously dominating issues, like immigration. This shift in views has given the general population better insight into the results of swing states and who will eventually become president. Tue, 05 Nov 2024 19:31:18 -0700 This particular interview describes the deeper effects that Trumps claims of election fraud in 2020 have had on voters, specifically Trump supporters, and their trust in the system. https://writingpartners.net/documents/2862?scroll_to=18854 https://writingpartners.net/documents/2862?scroll_to=18854 As Trump claimed election Fraud and incited riots on the capital claiming the 2020 election was "stolen" from him, many voters and followers of the party have lost faith in the voting system and taken action against such methods of casting ballots. This has further complicated the voting process and caused a lack of representation from the people, based off false accusations and claims, given from an individual with power and influence, who couldn't accept a loss. Tue, 05 Nov 2024 19:08:01 -0700 I think it's interesting how demographics have changed, especially as people who supported Trump in previous years now look to see how his campaign has adapted over time. https://writingpartners.net/documents/2862?scroll_to=18828 https://writingpartners.net/documents/2862?scroll_to=18828 I think it’s interesting how demographics have changed, especially as people who supported Trump in previous years now look to see how his campaign has adapted over time. The strategy seems to be that he maintains policies, whilst Harris changes hers to fit with the voters she wants to appeal. This has swayed in favor of and against both parties as some voters appreciate consistency, while others wish for more adaptive measure. Tue, 05 Nov 2024 19:01:24 -0700 I find Trumps address of the "assassination attempt" to be very insincere as he noted it was a painful remark and yet told the story in great depth as if to use it as a way to gain more support from the people and insight anger onto them. https://writingpartners.net/documents/772?scroll_to=3392 https://writingpartners.net/documents/772?scroll_to=3392 Tue, 10 Sep 2024 10:58:57 -0600 As Kamala addresses Trumps seemingly strong lack of trust in women I found it interesting how she creates a euphemism alluding to her initiatives towards women rights and reproductive freedoms. https://writingpartners.net/documents/772?scroll_to=3371 https://writingpartners.net/documents/772?scroll_to=3371 Tue, 10 Sep 2024 10:52:50 -0600