Comments by 2025 Ellie Wright Most recent public comments by 2025 Ellie Wright https://writingpartners.net/users/356 This is a good idea, but I beleive many school governments are very flawed, including the one here at judge. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5919?scroll_to=39875 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5919?scroll_to=39875 Fri, 07 Mar 2025 13:24:52 -0500 Community service in this sense is great. I also find it helpful to do community service with marginalized communities, because it has helped me to realize why it is so important to vote for candidates who care for the marginalized. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5919?scroll_to=39872 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5919?scroll_to=39872 Fri, 07 Mar 2025 13:23:30 -0500 Actives like this are what will make students understand what the legislative process is. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5919?scroll_to=39855 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5919?scroll_to=39855 Fri, 07 Mar 2025 12:58:27 -0500 I think that this style of learning is a great way to teach civics. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5919?scroll_to=39853 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5919?scroll_to=39853 Fri, 07 Mar 2025 12:57:32 -0500 The things claimed in this image will only work if the civics education is effective. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5919?scroll_to=39851 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5919?scroll_to=39851 Fri, 07 Mar 2025 12:56:59 -0500 Book learning may not be a good fit for this type of course. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5919?scroll_to=39848 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5919?scroll_to=39848 Fri, 07 Mar 2025 12:55:58 -0500 There is obviously inequality when it comes to education, but that also means black people may not be as active in the community. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5919?scroll_to=39846 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5919?scroll_to=39846 Fri, 07 Mar 2025 12:55:19 -0500 Perhaps the integration of Common Core has played a role in this. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5919?scroll_to=39845 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5919?scroll_to=39845 Fri, 07 Mar 2025 12:54:15 -0500 This is a great example of a good civics education that will appropriately prepare students for future civics engagement. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5919?scroll_to=39844 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5919?scroll_to=39844 Fri, 07 Mar 2025 12:53:42 -0500 I think it is an interesting thought that being an American is something that needs to be learned. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5919?scroll_to=39843 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5919?scroll_to=39843 Fri, 07 Mar 2025 12:52:30 -0500 Times of great enthusiasm among young people is the perfect opportunity to get them out and voting. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5691?scroll_to=38267 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5691?scroll_to=38267 Fri, 28 Feb 2025 12:26:47 -0500 Of course, there are other issues that contribute to voter turnout than just civics education. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5691?scroll_to=38264 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5691?scroll_to=38264 Fri, 28 Feb 2025 12:25:46 -0500 There must be more interactive lessons in the classroom that simulate the process, hopefully making more people want to vote. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5691?scroll_to=38259 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5691?scroll_to=38259 Fri, 28 Feb 2025 12:24:24 -0500 This is concerning because as more and more of Gen Z is able to vote, it is crucial that they are educated enough to know how to vote, and how to research the candidate that fits their personal views. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5691?scroll_to=38257 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5691?scroll_to=38257 Fri, 28 Feb 2025 12:22:49 -0500 This is the biggest problem. These are the bare minimum things that should be taught in schools as part of civics education. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5691?scroll_to=38256 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5691?scroll_to=38256 Fri, 28 Feb 2025 12:20:36 -0500 I find it interesting that voter turnout increases when there is "fear" of what could happen. I do find that to be true in our community. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5691?scroll_to=38255 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5691?scroll_to=38255 Fri, 28 Feb 2025 12:19:49 -0500 I think starting this from a young age can allow people more time to really understand how the government works since it can be quite confusing. I think that first students must understand the structure, which these states do very well. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5245?scroll_to=37373 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5245?scroll_to=37373 Fri, 21 Feb 2025 13:24:07 -0500 I think that interactive opportunities can also be an important avenue for students to learn about what civic engagement means, and to practice it before they are actually voting. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5245?scroll_to=37370 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5245?scroll_to=37370 Fri, 21 Feb 2025 13:22:40 -0500 Perhaps other states can implement similar structures to civics courses. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5245?scroll_to=37368 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5245?scroll_to=37368 Fri, 21 Feb 2025 13:21:31 -0500 It seems that civic engagement is somewhat dependent on how many credits are required in school. To have more voter turnout, more students should take civics courses. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5245?scroll_to=37364 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5245?scroll_to=37364 Fri, 21 Feb 2025 13:20:35 -0500 It is concerning how little people pass the AP gov exam. This could be a result of the exam itself, but other information suggests that it is at the fault of the education they are receiving on the topic. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5245?scroll_to=37360 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5245?scroll_to=37360 Fri, 21 Feb 2025 13:19:34 -0500 Speaking from personal experience, community service has changed the way I think about political problems which has made me a more informed voter. I think community service should be a graduation requirement everywhere. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5245?scroll_to=37353 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5245?scroll_to=37353 Fri, 21 Feb 2025 13:18:24 -0500 Students can know a lot without understanding how to apply that knowledge. Civics courses may need to be changed so they can teach more about civic engagement. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5245?scroll_to=37351 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5245?scroll_to=37351 Fri, 21 Feb 2025 13:17:26 -0500 While reading and math are both important, civics needs to be treated as equally important as these two. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5245?scroll_to=37346 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5245?scroll_to=37346 Fri, 21 Feb 2025 13:16:36 -0500 It is possible that states need to require one semester less of a history class and trade it for one more semester of civics as they are very different courses. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5245?scroll_to=37344 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5245?scroll_to=37344 Fri, 21 Feb 2025 13:15:53 -0500 It is important for schools to require civics classes because we must educate the youth on how our country operates so they can understand why they vote. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5245?scroll_to=37335 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5245?scroll_to=37335 Fri, 21 Feb 2025 13:14:47 -0500 It is concerning to me that such little people really understand the three branches of government. People must understand how the government is structured in order to know how it works. https://writingpartners.net/documents/5245?scroll_to=37330 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5245?scroll_to=37330 Fri, 21 Feb 2025 13:13:37 -0500 I find it very intersting that you can vote in Maryland elections at 16. I think this is something worth looking into for other states because it can get highschoolers excited to vote even if it is not in national elections. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4979?scroll_to=36657 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4979?scroll_to=36657 Tue, 11 Feb 2025 13:01:04 -0500 Community service and seeing what life is like for others in the community can be another way to encourage youth to vote. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4979?scroll_to=36647 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4979?scroll_to=36647 Tue, 11 Feb 2025 12:58:29 -0500 Reinforces the idea that it is important to get young people excited to vote so voter turnouts increase. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4979?scroll_to=36636 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4979?scroll_to=36636 Tue, 11 Feb 2025 12:57:09 -0500 I think that more civics credits should be required. I think 1 full credit is appropriate. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4979?scroll_to=36630 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4979?scroll_to=36630 Tue, 11 Feb 2025 12:56:25 -0500 It is important for there to be civic engagement among youth, but it seem that many don't participate if they are not old enough to vote. Making it known to students that civic engagement can start at any age, can be a good starting point. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4979?scroll_to=36624 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4979?scroll_to=36624 Tue, 11 Feb 2025 12:54:40 -0500 There is definitely a discrepancy in education in low income areas and high income areas. This issue also needs to be addressed. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4979?scroll_to=36620 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4979?scroll_to=36620 Tue, 11 Feb 2025 12:52:36 -0500 I find it upsetting that so many people my age are not proficient in civics. This is the root of my proposed problem. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4979?scroll_to=36618 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4979?scroll_to=36618 Tue, 11 Feb 2025 12:51:23 -0500 Orwell was wrong in this prediction because our constitution allows us to live as our true selves without government interference or punishment. https://www.archives.gov/founding-docs/declaration-transcript https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=36013 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=36013 Tue, 04 Feb 2025 12:29:28 -0500 This paragraph speaks to the party not wanting people to feel feelings and share with others because he is sharing this memory with Julia when they are hiding. It shows how people have to hide their experiences from the government. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=36006 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=36006 Tue, 04 Feb 2025 12:26:37 -0500 This secret, of his early childhood, is one that Big Brother has not discovered yet. This shows that the thought police really can't know anything about anyone for sure, saying that one's soul can never be touched by anyone. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=35756 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=35756 Fri, 31 Jan 2025 18:58:49 -0500 Winston's selfishness goes to show how not understanding a certain situation can have effects on everyone, not just the one who doesn't understand. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=35755 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=35755 Fri, 31 Jan 2025 18:56:20 -0500 Winston lived with his mom (and dad before he left) in a single room. I ind this interesting because it shows how he comes from a poor family. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=35754 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=35754 Fri, 31 Jan 2025 18:55:31 -0500 How well did I respond to the prompt with a thesis that analyzes the writer’s rhetorical choices? https://writingpartners.net/documents/4071?scroll_to=32882 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4071?scroll_to=32882 You've taken a solid first step by identifying pathos and ethos in your thesis. However, to strengthen your analysis, you should explicitly connect these rhetorical strategies to Dove's overarching message and purpose in her speech. Consider refining your thesis to describe how these choices help convey concepts such as perseverance, curiosity, and authenticity. For example, instead of merely noting that Dove uses pathos and ethos, explain how these elements empower the graduates or relate to Dove's personal journey and expertise. You could explore insights such as how Dove’s use of anecdotes and analogies helps make abstract ideas relatable. Or how her unique structure of offering “wishes” rather than traditional advice fosters an individual connection. Finally, consider how the establishment of ethos through personal experience adds depth. Where next? Delve deeper into analyzing personal anecdotes, explore the impact of humor, or perhaps discuss ideas of success and self-realization. Please Note: Everything in this comment is AI-generated. It is made up to sound like your helpful AP English Language teacher in room 126. Fri, 17 Jan 2025 13:53:14 -0500 How well did I respond to the prompt with a thesis that analyzes the writer’s rhetorical choices? https://writingpartners.net/documents/4071?scroll_to=32839 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4071?scroll_to=32839 Your thesis does a commendable job identifying key rhetorical choices, such as pathos and ethos, in Rita Dove's speech to support your argument. You've noted how she shuns traditional advice in favor of wishes, cleverly using pathos to stir emotions and engage her audience. Highlighting Dove's fairy godmother analogy is an excellent way to demonstrate how she captivates her listeners—a perfect attention-grabber! However, be sure that each rhetorical choice directly ties to the purpose you believe she has for her audience. Dive deeper into how these choices develop Dove’s core message: a wish for the students’ continued success and self-actualization. What do you want to understand more about? I can delve into creating clearer connections between rhetorical choices and purpose, enhancing thesis specificity, or incorporating further analysis on emotional impact. What sounds most helpful, or do you have other areas to explore? Let's make your essay shine!  Please Note: Everything in this comment is AI-generated. It is made up to sound like your helpful AP English Language teacher in room 126. Fri, 17 Jan 2025 13:46:54 -0500 I think this slogan is interesting because it is opposite of what we think society should be. I think this book is very influenced by WWII https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=31826 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=31826 Fri, 10 Jan 2025 13:43:39 -0500 He seems to have a hard time remebering his childhood. While this may be normal under some circumstances, I think that there may be some trauma that Winston may be unknowingly blocking out. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=31822 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=31822 Fri, 10 Jan 2025 13:41:35 -0500 This reminds me of other books I have read in this genre. The idea of being watches is very present, and I think this goes to show that this is one of societies greatest fears: not having any privacy. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=31819 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=31819 Fri, 10 Jan 2025 13:39:39 -0500 This also reminded me of WWII novels, particularly Hiroshima because of the horrible aftermath of the war. https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=31815 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=31815 Fri, 10 Jan 2025 13:43:29 -0500 The education system needs to be reworked in a way that allows for students to be well prepared for the world we live in today, not the one that existed 10-20 years ago. https://writingpartners.net/documents/3385?scroll_to=25597 https://writingpartners.net/documents/3385?scroll_to=25597 Tue, 03 Dec 2024 12:44:01 -0500 It is important that communities and school boards work to create equitable education for everyone regardless of race or where they live. This contributes to the poverty gap. https://writingpartners.net/documents/3385?scroll_to=25587 https://writingpartners.net/documents/3385?scroll_to=25587 Tue, 03 Dec 2024 12:41:42 -0500 Trump likes to brag a lot about the country, he makes it sound like it is perfect the way it is and provides no reason why he should be president in this particular part of his speech. https://writingpartners.net/documents/772?scroll_to=3382 https://writingpartners.net/documents/772?scroll_to=3382 Tue, 10 Sep 2024 12:56:20 -0400 Trump is vague in his speech and does not suggest many clear ways he plans to solve issues if he became president. He also uses euphemisms. I think his speech sounds insincere. https://writingpartners.net/documents/772?scroll_to=3374 https://writingpartners.net/documents/772?scroll_to=3374 Tue, 10 Sep 2024 12:54:25 -0400 She does a very good job about being specific and her language is sincere. She doesn't use euphemisms which is good. She also gives ways she plans to do things that sound attainable. https://writingpartners.net/documents/772?scroll_to=3367 https://writingpartners.net/documents/772?scroll_to=3367 Tue, 10 Sep 2024 12:50:50 -0400 She has specific examples that support why she has chosen to do what she does. https://writingpartners.net/documents/772?scroll_to=3366 https://writingpartners.net/documents/772?scroll_to=3366 Tue, 10 Sep 2024 12:48:31 -0400