Most recent public comments by Mthobisi Cendese https://writingpartners.net/users/361 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5244?scroll_to=39883 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5244?scroll_to=39883 https://www.edweek.org/technology/opinion-why-school-cellphone-bans-are-a-bad-idea/2024/11 Fri, 07 Mar 2025 13:33:47 -0500 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4986?scroll_to=39881 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4986?scroll_to=39881 https://www.nytimes.com/2023/11/30/learning/what-students-are-saying-about-school-cellphone-bans.html Fri, 07 Mar 2025 13:32:13 -0500 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5244?scroll_to=37371 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5244?scroll_to=37371 To play the Devils advocate, what if the phone are causing all of these issues in below average performances in children. I feel like this might be a main argument with most parents and educators Fri, 21 Feb 2025 13:23:08 -0500 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5244?scroll_to=37369 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5244?scroll_to=37369 Another main point enforcing the importance of proper use Fri, 21 Feb 2025 13:21:39 -0500 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5244?scroll_to=37361 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5244?scroll_to=37361 Well cited proof of an actual improvement with technology being used correctly, uplifting my argument further Fri, 21 Feb 2025 13:19:55 -0500 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5244?scroll_to=37348 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5244?scroll_to=37348 I agree with this point as I see how phones can be used as a great outlet is used and proctored correctly Fri, 21 Feb 2025 13:16:50 -0500 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5244?scroll_to=37331 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5244?scroll_to=37331 Its good to know that this author has an experience as both an educator and as a parent that is obviously attempting to do the best for the students Fri, 21 Feb 2025 13:15:05 -0500 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5244?scroll_to=37327 https://writingpartners.net/documents/5244?scroll_to=37327 This paragraph cover some concerns and plausible reasons for why parents and educators alike might want a cellphone ban Fri, 21 Feb 2025 13:13:19 -0500 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4986?scroll_to=36669 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4986?scroll_to=36669 I find this immensely unrealistic, just ban the phones at that point Tue, 11 Feb 2025 13:04:55 -0500 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4986?scroll_to=36665 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4986?scroll_to=36665 I thought that the use of the phone pockets was very effective if actually enforced correctly; if a teacher didn't care about kids putting the phones in there, of course they're going to be on their phones during class. When enforced correctly, phones could still be accessed and handled at certain times, but allowed for a further focus when student had to be focused on school work. Tue, 11 Feb 2025 13:04:06 -0500 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4986?scroll_to=36661 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4986?scroll_to=36661 this is the opinion I would fit myself under Tue, 11 Feb 2025 13:01:38 -0500 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4986?scroll_to=36658 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4986?scroll_to=36658 Alex mentions the use of computer, which I think is the only way banning phones would be viable, the requirement of a computer for online work, which would only really be accessible by highly funded schools. Tue, 11 Feb 2025 13:01:07 -0500 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4986?scroll_to=36652 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4986?scroll_to=36652 This lack of socialization was another factor that Dean Douglas managed to mention a lot Tue, 11 Feb 2025 12:59:34 -0500 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4986?scroll_to=36650 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4986?scroll_to=36650 I believe this social media issue, and lack of privacy in school due to phones is a very good and realistic reason to actually ban them. Tue, 11 Feb 2025 12:58:52 -0500 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4986?scroll_to=36640 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4986?scroll_to=36640 a lot of the responses under this category is what Dean Douglas got when he personally interviewed individual students on their opinion on the ban Tue, 11 Feb 2025 12:57:53 -0500 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4986?scroll_to=36629 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4986?scroll_to=36629 I decided I should start with the point of view of the students as we are the ones getting mainly affected Tue, 11 Feb 2025 12:56:24 -0500 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4986?scroll_to=36627 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4986?scroll_to=36627 they haven't actually gotten their phones banned yet Tue, 11 Feb 2025 12:55:43 -0500 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=36027 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=36027 With this particular sentence, I believe Orwell is predicting a future where privacy is no longer a guarantee, and the state will have knowledge on everything in ones personal life. I think Orwell was partially right, as technology is advancing, allowing government to have an improved ability to identify someone. On top of this, some might argue surveillance is also much more restricting through things like smart phones, and cameras. This link could be a proving factor of his predictions: https://thepioneeronline.com/47465/uncategorized/mass-surveillance-in-the-digital-age-the-rise-of-co-appearance-tracking/#:~:text=Technology%20has%20made%20mass%20surveillance,%2C%20crime%20prevention%2C%20and%20investigation. Tue, 04 Feb 2025 12:36:35 -0500 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=35164 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4012?scroll_to=35164 As we dive deeper into Newspeak, it becomes more and more obvious how effective and almost innocently subtle this type of oppression is. By limiting our entire vocabulary to relatively positive variations of simple base words, in due time, it will be nearly impossible to become a traitor. Tue, 28 Jan 2025 12:22:36 -0500 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4077?scroll_to=32889 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4077?scroll_to=32889 In your analysis of Rita Dove's use of anecdotes, you’ve painted an expressive picture of her connection with the audience. Dove’s speech is laden with personal stories, which serve as illustrative examples of her journey and underscore her perseverance. One powerful anecdote involves her father's advice of being "150% prepared," which frames her message of hard work and lays out perseverance as vital for success. By sharing her personal experiences, Dove not only builds credibility but also inspires her audience to reflect on their own paths and aspirations, creating a compelling narrative that resonates personally. To enrich this theme, you might consider analyzing how Dove’s tone further instills motivation through her rhetorical expressions, or the strategic repetition of "I wish you" to emphasize these desires as achievable goals. Would you like to delve into any of these angles or explore something else within Dove's rhetoric? Please Note: Everything in this comment is AI-generated. It is made up to sound like your helpful AP English Language teacher in room 126. Fri, 17 Jan 2025 13:56:49 -0500 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4077?scroll_to=32859 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4077?scroll_to=32859 Your analysis presents a thoughtful exploration of Dove's approach, showcasing how she crafts a personal and impactful connection with her audience. You've identified key rhetorical choices like her decision to offer "wishes" rather than "advice," effectively making her speech unique. By highlighting statements like "this one is different—this is personal," you successfully show how Dove's intent is to relate on a deeper level. Remember that concrete examples strengthen your argument. You could expand your explanation by diving deeper into how Dove's personal anecdotes or references to figures like Percy Bysshe Shelley enhance her ethos. Want to explore more? Consider examining how Dove's use of anecdotes supports her theme of perseverance, how her tone creates a sense of motivation, or how repetition reinforces her message. Let me know which direction you want to take, or if there’s another aspect you’re curious about! Please Note: Everything in this comment is AI-generated. It is made up to sound like your helpful AP English Language teacher in room 126. Fri, 17 Jan 2025 13:56:49 -0500 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32332 https://writingpartners.net/documents/4009?scroll_to=32332 The entirety of this introducing chapter reminds me of a short story I read in my sophomore year. The story was also based in a dystopian world where a mega computer basically kept the world from crime by predicting when someone might commit on offense.Of course this eventually gets out of hand and the computer takes over, where we later figure out the computer gained a near human conscience and sentience. I relate this to 1984 because of the strange and corrupt control over humanity that an overpowering entity/entities has. Tue, 14 Jan 2025 12:51:27 -0500 https://writingpartners.net/documents/2862?scroll_to=28737 https://writingpartners.net/documents/2862?scroll_to=28737 Mon, 16 Dec 2024 10:19:02 -0500 https://writingpartners.net/documents/3377?scroll_to=25599 https://writingpartners.net/documents/3377?scroll_to=25599 I believe that the help of an actual instructor is the best thing one can do to quickly and correctly improve at piano. I've just recently started piano lessons again. Tue, 03 Dec 2024 12:44:28 -0500 https://writingpartners.net/documents/3377?scroll_to=25591 https://writingpartners.net/documents/3377?scroll_to=25591 I've found that practicing arpeggios and scales have helped me a lot with finger independence and speed, which overall will make me a better piano player. Tue, 03 Dec 2024 12:43:12 -0500 https://writingpartners.net/documents/772?scroll_to=3378 https://writingpartners.net/documents/772?scroll_to=3378 Tue, 10 Sep 2024 12:55:32 -0400 https://writingpartners.net/documents/772?scroll_to=3372 https://writingpartners.net/documents/772?scroll_to=3372 Tue, 10 Sep 2024 12:53:11 -0400