Comments by Cason Central Most recent public comments by Cason Central https://writingpartners.net/users/854 Your evidence for social justice being 3 different books makes for a stronger argument, and make the essay more interesting. https://writingpartners.net/documents/2420?scroll_to=19138 https://writingpartners.net/documents/2420?scroll_to=19138 Wed, 06 Nov 2024 17:43:17 -0500 Abortion https://writingpartners.net/documents/2373?scroll_to=17727 https://writingpartners.net/documents/2373?scroll_to=17727 I like how you chose to focus your essay on abortion. Abortion rights are a prominent issue in the world that need more attention. Personally, I believe that abortion should be legal and this essay supports it. I also like that you talked about being Catholic as a connection, while many others, including myself, talked more about the color of their skin and culture. Thu, 31 Oct 2024 22:12:25 -0400 I think you could've worded your intro to this paragraph better, but the content of it is good and should be pointed out. Race and culture are large parts of social justice. https://writingpartners.net/documents/2367?scroll_to=17723 https://writingpartners.net/documents/2367?scroll_to=17723 Thu, 31 Oct 2024 21:58:08 -0400 Your title is very intriguing and it reeled me in. Your focus on healthcare costs and how they should be lowered is important and something to learn from. I also appreciate the amount of statistics you use to strengthen your claims. https://writingpartners.net/documents/2371?scroll_to=17721 https://writingpartners.net/documents/2371?scroll_to=17721 Thu, 31 Oct 2024 21:56:41 -0400 You didn't use a hook, but I think the statistics you use through your introduction paragraph help strengthen the essay. Your essay follows mostly ideas surrounding money, which is a real component of social justice that I didn't consider. https://writingpartners.net/documents/2375?scroll_to=17507 https://writingpartners.net/documents/2375?scroll_to=17507 Thu, 31 Oct 2024 14:09:19 -0400 I like the large amount of color and culture being used. I used similar ideas in my essay and agree with the ideas. The issues you present are real, prominent issues in society, and it's good to bring more attention to social injustices. https://writingpartners.net/documents/2369?scroll_to=17506 https://writingpartners.net/documents/2369?scroll_to=17506 Thu, 31 Oct 2024 14:06:54 -0400 I like your use of statistics rather than a quote for your hook. It strengthens your essay with additional information while reeling in readers. https://writingpartners.net/documents/2377?scroll_to=17472 https://writingpartners.net/documents/2377?scroll_to=17472 Thu, 31 Oct 2024 13:13:05 -0400 Your title is good at grabbing attention and bring in readers.Your claim about social justice being more about the effort and work put into social justice, rather than the actual idea, is good as well. https://writingpartners.net/documents/2438?scroll_to=17420 https://writingpartners.net/documents/2438?scroll_to=17420 Thu, 31 Oct 2024 12:59:39 -0400 I appreciate your usage of evidence from "When I was Puerto Rican". It has very strong ideas of social justice, so it's a good idea to use this novel in this essay. I think the data you presented also strengthens your essay, like paragraph 4. https://writingpartners.net/documents/2338?scroll_to=17375 https://writingpartners.net/documents/2338?scroll_to=17375 Thu, 31 Oct 2024 12:51:07 -0400 I don't necessarily agree with the idea that karma is social justice, but I think it is an interesting concept. Your essay does contain interesting ideas, and it's easy to read. https://writingpartners.net/documents/2446?scroll_to=17336 https://writingpartners.net/documents/2446?scroll_to=17336 Thu, 31 Oct 2024 12:53:30 -0400 Your essay is very intriguing and interesting. 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