Most recent public comments by Dariashly Central https://writingpartners.net/users/856 https://writingpartners.net/documents/2453?scroll_to=17349 https://writingpartners.net/documents/2453?scroll_to=17349 Thu, 31 Oct 2024 12:46:56 -0400 https://writingpartners.net/documents/1874?scroll_to=16868 https://writingpartners.net/documents/1874?scroll_to=16868 Great start! Now let's get your document ready to go public. Here's Step 1: <h4>Step 1: Get Ready to Go Public</h4> - We’re going to add your document to the Youth Voices Collection. This means your work becomes part of a public conversation: - Anyone on the Internet can see it. - Others can comment on it if they’re part of Writing Partners. - You can always edit your document and control comments on it. <h5>Going public is exciting, so let’s make sure your work shines by focusing on three things:</h5> - A catchy headline that’s full of energy and draws readers in. - An eye-catching image that grabs attention. - A two-sentence teaser that hooks readers and gives them a taste of what’s inside. Once you're ready with these elements, let me know and I'll give you Step 2! Wed, 30 Oct 2024 13:21:05 -0400 https://writingpartners.net/documents/1874?scroll_to=14715 https://writingpartners.net/documents/1874?scroll_to=14715 As a 10th grader, social justice is the fairness and equality in the world around me, especially in things I encounter daily, like school, relationships, news, or public transportation. It would likely mean making sure that everyone, no matter their background, is treated fairly and has the same opportunities, whether that's in education, with their rights, or how they’re seen by others. It could also be about standing up against bullying, racism, or any form of discrimination or violence that I might witness in school, online, or any other place. <h3>Words</h3> relationships - relationships news or - news, or opportunities whether - opportunities, whether discrimination, or - discrimination or online or - online, or <h3>Sentences</h3> 1. "As a 10th grader, social justice is the fairness and equality in the world around me, especially in things I encounter daily, like school,relationships,news or public transportation." - Added a comma after "relationships" and "news" to separate items in a list and improve readability. 2. "It would likely mean making sure that everyone, no matter their background, is treated fairly and has the same opportunities whether that's in education, with their rights, or how they’re seen by others." - Added a comma after "opportunities" to separate the conditional clause, improving sentence structure. 3. "It could also be about standing up against bullying, racism, or any form of discrimination, or violence that I might witness in school, online or any other place." - Removed the comma after "discrimination" to avoid an unnecessary pause and added a comma after "online" to separate items in a list. <h3>Paragraphs</h3> 1. The first paragraph introduces the concept of social justice from the perspective of a 10th grader, focusing on personal encounters. - This paragraph stands alone because it sets the context for the student's understanding of social justice. 2. The second paragraph explains the broader implications of social justice, emphasizing equal treatment and opportunities. - This paragraph is separate because it expands on the initial idea by discussing the broader societal implications. 3. The third paragraph addresses specific actions related to social justice, such as standing against discrimination and violence. - This paragraph is distinct because it shifts the focus to actionable aspects of social justice, providing a conclusion to the discussion. Wed, 30 Oct 2024 13:21:15 -0400