Most recent public comments by 2027 Elinor Bartel https://writingpartners.net/users/904 https://writingpartners.net/documents/1977?scroll_to=15306 https://writingpartners.net/documents/1977?scroll_to=15306 <h3>Outline 1: Traditional Structure</h3> 1. **Introduction** - "My name is Jackson Lewis. I'm running for Canyon school board district one..." 2. **Background and Motivation** - "I am a 19 year old, recent graduate of Phil crest High School..." - "I looked into this position. I was too young to run at the time..." - "Part of my identity is I am a gay man..." 3. **Key Issues and Priorities** - **Student Safety** - "Most important to me...is the safety of student pedestrians." - "My proposal...is because I want to create a crosswalk there." - **Educational Policies** - "Ending chronic student absenteeism through solving hunger, poverty..." - "More applied learning classes..." 4. **Experience in Politics** - "So overwhelmingly, very positive...from everyone but my opponent..." - "I volunteered...I made phone calls for that race." 5. **Advice for Young People** - "Talk to the local party. Choose no matter who you're talking to..." - "Get out in the political space, getting out it just in your community." 6. **Conclusion** - "Well, something that's been keeping me driving right is this dream that the Wasatch Front..." - "So what I would say to a young person who's considering running for office, do it." **Affordances**: This outline provides a clear and logical progression of Jackson's journey, motivations, and advice. It is easy for readers to follow and understand the structure of his arguments and experiences. <h3>Outline 2: African American English Rhetorical Patterns</h3> 1. **Implied Introduction through Background** - "Nothing seems to engage my mind more...I am a 19 year old, recent graduate of Phil crest High School..." 2. **Topic Association of Identity and Motivation** - "Part of my identity is I am a gay man...that's what motivated me to run." - Recursion: "Actually, actually, I chose to run when I was 17 years old." 3. **Parallelism in Issues and Solutions** - "Ending chronic student absenteeism...solving hunger, poverty..." - "More applied learning classes...feeding all students breakfast and lunch..." 4. **Anaphora in Political Experience** - "I volunteered...I made phone calls...I called into Boston, I called into all parts of Massachusetts..." 5. **Community Engagement and Advice** - "Talk to the local party...talk to the local elected officials..." - Anaphora: "I was terrified, right?...I mean, getting your name out there..." 6. **Vision and Conclusion** - "Well, something that's been keeping me driving...turn Utah into the best place humanity has ever lived." **Affordances**: This outline uses African American English rhetorical techniques, such as recursion and anaphora, to create a more dynamic and engaging narrative. It draws connections between Jackson's identity, experiences, and motivations, appealing to emotional and logical aspects of the audience. <h3>Outline 3: Thematic Focus</h3> 1. **Introduction to Jackson's Candidacy** - "My name is Jackson Lewis. I'm running for Canyon school board district one..." 2. **Theme 1: Identity and Personal Motivation** - Exploration of personal background and identity. - "Part of my identity is I am a gay man..." 3. **Theme 2: Key Issues in Education** - **Safety and Infrastructure** - "Most important to me...is the safety of student pedestrians." - **Educational Reform** - "Ending chronic student absenteeism..." 4. **Theme 3: Political Journey and Experience** - "So overwhelmingly, very positive...from everyone but my opponent..." - "I volunteered...I made phone calls for that race." 5. **Theme 4: Empowering Young People** - "Talk to the local party...talk to the local elected officials..." - "What you can do this cycle...you can drive you can wheels to the polls..." 6. **Conclusion: Vision for the Future** - "Well, something that's been keeping me driving...turn Utah into the best place humanity has ever lived." **Affordances**: This outline organizes the content thematically, allowing readers to focus on different aspects of Jackson's story. It provides a comprehensive view of his motivations, experiences, and goals, making it appealing to young voters interested in each specific theme. --- Now, with these outlines dancing in the air like notes in a symphony, it's time for you to step up to the conductor's podium. Which one sings to your soul? Or perhaps you're inspired to craft your own unique composition? Let the rhythm guide you to a plan for reorganizing your text. Share your step-by-step process, and let me know if there's anything else we should explore as you revise. Let's make this story a masterpiece! ✨ Mon, 21 Oct 2024 10:26:45 -0400