[Student Example] Synthesis Essay
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There have been recent debates about whether Artificial Intelligence (AI) should be allowed in schools or not. It has been debated on since 2010 but its increasing use has made it a hot topic and some people say that it provides students with better advantages and greater resources while others believe that it brings challenges and limitations to education. If you just take a glance into the topic of AI it may seem like the easy choice would be to side on not allowing AI in school due to cheating and not learning curriculum. However, if you take a deeper dive into it; it is easy to see that AI should be allowed in schools due to the fact that it can benefit both students and teachers in the classroom, and implementing Generative AI into schools will allow students to work at their own pace.
The first reason why AI should be allowed in schools is because it will benefit both teachers and students. Some people may disagree and say that Generative AI is not fair to teachers because they spend all their time teaching just for kids to not listen and use AI at home to still get the correct answers. This can be partly true but as seen from the Southern Methodist Website there are also tools that benefit teachers greatly like Automated Grading and Feedback Systems. To further explain this benefit: “AI automates the grading process… Allowing them (students) to understand their performance swiftly and address areas of improvement more efficiently” (Source A). This means that by using AI teachers can grade way faster and more efficiently, while also benefiting students so they can understand what they need to improve on or what they are doing wrong easier. AI can benefit students and teachers in other ways like their future and in the workforce after they graduate. If teachers simply just teach how to use AI correctly in the classroom it can boost academic performance and as seen by the Cohen Article it can “... [help understand] its strengths, limitations, and biases- educators can prepare them to navigate the ethical challenges they will face in the workforce, equipping them with critical digital literacy…” (Source F). The meaning of this is that employees are being expected to do more and more as time goes on and they will need to be able to utilize tools like AI to benefit them in their future allowing them to become more successful. This would also benefit the teacher because imagine seeing how successful your entire class was just because of a simple thing like implementing AI. The reason teachers do their job is to help kids succeed in their future so why wouldn’t they implement AI correctly to help initiate future success by their students?
Secondly, AI should be used in schools so students can learn at their own pace and not fall behind so easily. School can be hard for a lot of students for many reasons, whether it being the teacher is teaching too fast, not having the attention span, or even if the teacher isn’t doing good enough. These problems could all be solved by AI and according to Source A, “Such technology can generate quizzes and learning materials that align with a student's unique learning style.” So allowing AI in schools would help every single student that wants to learn, be able to learn. If a kid faces academic challenges or can’t keep up with the rest of their peers, AI is the best solution to help every single student learn at their own pace. Every school's biggest goal is for the students in the school to become successful after they graduate. Source B identifies that
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- You’ve got a clear stance in your draft: you argue that AI should be allowed in schools, and you start giving reasons about benefits and pacing.
- Row A (Thesis): Your last sentence of the first paragraph does respond to the prompt with a position, so it fits the rubric’s idea of “a thesis that presents a defensible position” (Row A Thesis), and you could lock that in by tightening it into one focused claim with 2–3 clear “because” reasons.
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Row B (Evidence & Commentary): You already use at least two sources (A and F) and explain them, which lines up with “a mix of specific evidence and broad generalities” and “explains how some of the evidence relates” (Row B Evidence and Commentary), so you’re in the 2–3 range right now; to move toward 4, the rubric asks you to “organize and support an argument as a line of reasoning composed of multiple supporting claims, each with adequate evidence that is clearly explained,” which would mean:
- making each body paragraph hang on one clear sub-claim,
- using at least three sources total, and
- linking your points together (how benefits for teachers connect to pacing, ethics, etc.).
- Row C (Sophistication): You start hinting at bigger stakes (future workforce, ethics, student success), which is close to the rubric’s idea of “articulating the implications or limitations of an argument by situating it within a broader context” (Row C Sophistication); to earn that point, you’d want to carry that bigger-picture thinking through the whole essay instead of just a few sentences and maybe briefly acknowledge a real tension (for example: how to prevent cheating while still using AI).
Imagine you’re going to adjust just one piece next—would you rather tighten your thesis sentence in the intro, or work on making one body paragraph hang on a sharper sub-claim that clearly connects to your sources? Click “Continue with AI” and write which one you pick and why.
- Your teacher’s comment fits what the AP rubric calls Row A: a thesis has to be a clear answer to the prompt, not just a description of the debate.
- Right now your opening builds context and mentions both sides, but the actual “because…” part of your claim is mixed in with a lot of explanation, so it’s hard to spot fast.
- According to Row A Thesis, you earn the point when you “respond to the prompt rather than restate or rephrase the prompt, and the thesis clearly takes a position rather than just stating that there are pros/cons,” so the key move is to turn your main idea into one tight, arguable sentence.
- As the author, you get to decide: do you want your thesis to list your two main reasons (benefits for teachers/students + working at own pace), or do you want a shorter, more general claim that your body paragraphs then unpack?
- You’ve clearly taken a stand: you’re arguing that AI should be allowed in schools, and you’re already giving reasons about benefits for both students and teachers.
- For AP-style scoring, this already fits the rubric idea of a thesis that “responds to the prompt with a thesis that presents a defensible position” (Row A Thesis).
- One choice you might think about is whether you want your thesis to list out your main reasons (benefits for teachers, benefits for students, self‑paced learning) in a very compact way, or keep it more general and let the body paragraphs do that work.
- Another choice is whether you want to briefly nod to the counterargument (cheating, not learning the curriculum) inside the thesis itself, or leave that for a later paragraph.
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