[Student Example] Fatima Robinson

Fatima Robinson is a choreographer and director. She has choreographed or atleast she got featured in some popular dancing choreography like the "remember the time" video from Micheal Jackson, beyonces dancing, black eyed peas, etc. Her mom inspired her to choreograph because of majorette.

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Feb 2

Paul Allison's Question Paul Allison and/or Thinking Partner (Feb 02 2026 4:17PM) : This is what I have on Fatima Robinson so far. Can you point me to more resources about her? more

Thinking Partner with Paul Allison's edits:

You’ve got a solid start on who she is and a couple of big credits; now you can fill in the rest of her story with some strong sources.

For a clear overall bio (where she’s from, major videos and films), try her page on Wikipedia, which lays out her career from “Remember the Time” through Dreamgirls and more (Fatima Robinson, Wikipedia, 2024).
For a short, polished professional bio listing a lot of her artist, TV, and film work, the Television Academy profile is useful (Television Academy, “Fatima Robinson,” 2024).
The AMCK Dance agency bio gives you extra detail on commercials, awards, and big live events like the Super Bowl and Grammys (AMCK Dance, “Fatima Robinson,” 2024).
If you want her voice and backstory (how she got started, clubs, Boyz N the Hood, etc.), the Television Academy Foundation interview excerpt is great background reading (Television Academy, “Foundation Interview: Fatima Robinson,” 2023).

If you skim one or two of these, what’s one new detail about Fatima Robinson you might want to plug into your paragraph next—maybe something about her early life, a specific award, or a big project that shows why she’s important—and do you want to click “Continue with AI” to talk through how to work that into the draft, or just edit your paragraph in the left pane yourself?

Feb 2

Paul Allison's Question Paul Allison and/or Thinking Partner (Feb 02 2026 4:24PM) : I'm not sure how to start. more

Thinking Partner with Paul Allison's edits:

You’ve already started: you named who she is and listed a few big things she’s done. That’s real content, not just fluff.

Since you’re feeling stuck, let’s keep it simple and focus on choices, not perfection:

As the author, you get to choose: do you want this to sound more like a school report, more like your own speaking voice, or somewhere in the middle?
Look back at your paragraph and notice what you’ve already done: you’ve said who she is, a couple of famous videos, and who inspired her—that’s basically an intro.
If you want to build it out, you might decide on 2–3 main things you want readers to know (for example: who she is, some of her biggest projects, and why she matters) and then just add 1 sentence for each.
You can also lean into some of the language patterns from the Black language notes in your packet—if you naturally say something like “she be…” or “she steady…”, you can choose to keep that flavor instead of forcing everything to sound textbook.

If you read your Fatima Robinson paragraph one more time, what’s one tiny change or add-on you feel like trying first—maybe a new detail from a source you read, or just making one sentence sound more like how you actually talk—and do you want to click “Continue with AI” to tell me which sentence you’re thinking about, or just start tweaking it yourself in the left pane as the author?

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