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One of the best records of discrimination are against African Americans, as the Pew Research argues, “According to Pew Research Center data, approximately 8 out of 10 African-Americans say they have experienced personal discrimination because of their race or ethnicity, citing an increase in white supremacist hate groups”. As a young black male and 10th grader, social justice to me is the fight for the rights of the oppressed. African Americans, women, Hispanics, etc., are all people who fall under the fight for social justice. They are among the most oppressed groups of people around the world and have to fight for justice for their mistreatment, hence the name social justice.

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Gabryell C Gabryell C (Nov 05 2024 5:37PM) : I like how you introduce the topic very well, and allow room to further explain in different portions of the text
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Renzo C Renzo C (Oct 31 2024 8:07PM) : This statistic powerfully shows the widespread discrimination faced by African Americans. This shows the reader the crucial need to address systemic racism and support efforts for equality and justice.
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While I’ve never openly faced racism or oppression, though I have dealt with microaggression and stereotypes. One time, I walked into a corner store and as soon as I entered I could see the man at the counter following me. As I looked for what snack I wanted, the guy was still watching me. I wasn’t wearing any suspicious clothing like a hoodie or moving in a shady way. There was no other reason for him to follow me, except for the fact that I was black. This experience reminds me of a moment in Sandra Cisneros's House on Mango Street, "Those who don’t know any better come into our neighborhood scared. They think we’re dangerous. They think we will attack them with shiny knives," and "What does it matter? They never saw the kitchenettes."(Cisneros 28). This moment puts my experience in words. The man who followed me was viewed for the color of my skin and let his prejudice and fear affect his actions.

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JacobD C JacobD C (Oct 30 2024 6:24PM) : I agree. Racism still is a prevalent issue in society. Along with that, slavery and crime have also contributed to a negative outlook on blacks. This misrepresentation of blacks is a social injustice that calls for a rethinking of stereotypes.
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Ilyas C Ilyas C (Oct 31 2024 12:51PM) : references more

It really adds so much more depth using your own experience and using evidence from the book it makes the essay so much more meaningful Also the title of the essay justice through my eyes is so intriguing and makes me want to read more.

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Sean C Sean C (Oct 31 2024 1:03PM) : The introduction was very good, showing us the ideas, examples, and even personal things for the introduction, showing the discrimination and oppression of African Americans.
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Cason C Cason C (Oct 31 2024 1:13PM) : I like your use of statistics rather than a quote for your hook. It strengthens your essay with additional information while reeling in readers.
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Experiences like mine are common and that shouldn’t be possible. People should be viewed for other things beside skin color or gender. The fact that it's such a prevalent honestly has affected my ambitions. The looming danger of being denied or harassed out of a career has always stuck in the back of my mind. It has me rethink if my goals are truly achievable because of something that I couldn’t control. This fear reminds me of To Kill a Mockingbird, specifically Tom’s trial. Tom is falsely accused of a crime he didn't commit but no one takes his side due to his opponent being a white man. This part of the book has always resonated with me as I’ve always felt that people put more trust in whites than blacks and how that could bleed into my future goals. Will jobs prefer a white person over me even if I have a better resume or will I be denied a job due to simply being black?

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JacobC C JacobC C (Oct 31 2024 12:37PM) : This paragraph is effective in providing key evidence in the impact of injustice in literature with Tom Robinson's trial being a major example, highlighting the injustice Tom faces during his trial.
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JasonL91 C JasonL91 C (Oct 31 2024 3:03PM) : Comment more

The fear of not achieving your goals because of factors you can’t control is one that is sadly common, but it’s a great representation of the social injustice this is present.

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Renzo C Renzo C (Oct 31 2024 8:34PM) : The comparison to Tom’s trial in To Kill a Mockingbird displays the timeless struggle for justice and equality. It’s sad that potential is often overshadowed by prejudice.
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AlexanderD C AlexanderD C (Nov 01 2024 8:51AM) : This paragraph shows an injustice in To Kill A Mockingbird. I like this connection because Tom is mistreated in his trial for the color of his skin and that relates to real injustices that happen in real life.
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I’ve always thought about how and if discrimination could truly be stopped. While it's not possible to completely get rid of racism, I think that certain things could mitigate it. For example, learning about discrimination should be taught in school. People learning of the struggles of people will make them less likely to continue to do it. I also think that implementing laws that give harsh punishments for discriminatory acts would also help stop it. Implementing laws to stop discrimination is the first step. To help those who have already been impacted, I’d give them rehab facilities where they can speak to counselors and vent their frustrations. At these facilities, they’ll be able to find work and get the help they need which over all will help the morale of those who've been wronged.

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DMU Timestamp: October 30, 2024 20:08

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EricP C EricP C (Oct 31 2024 12:56PM) : I like how you have a unique definition of social justice being for the fight for the rights of the oppressed ones. I also love how you shared your experience of encountering prejudice and that you related to House on Mango Street and To kill a mockingbi
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Dylan C Dylan C (Oct 31 2024 1:11PM) : . more

I liked the personal connection to social justice you demonstrated. You included ur own as experiences and perspective as a young Black man in America. It is important to share these stories and I commend you for that.

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