4th Grade Opinion Writing Sample
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After reading “Scarlet Fever Summer” and “Tale of a Painting”, I started to think about whether or not we should save old things? In my opinion, I think we should. My reasons for this are, first, old things can tell an amazing story. Second, old things can also be valuable.
Old things can be valuable someday. For example, according to “Tale of a Painting”, “Jim Kline stood in front of an old painting from 1875 in the Fine Art Museum “Wow,” He said, “That’s beautiful.” Wow! That painting ended up in a Fine Art Museum! Now that painting is very valuable! Another reason from “Tale of a Painting” is “Lucy always loved it” So, not only can old things be valuable as in money, they can also have sentimental value. Old things can be valuable in two ways, but both are important.
Old things can also tell a story. For example, in “Scarlet Fever Summer” it says,” Father began painting a picture of where my brothers and I used to play.” This painting told a story of where Miles and his brothers played before he got Scarlet Fever. In “Tale of a painting”, it says that Lucy Right took out a box with a painting in it. That same painting told the same story to Lucy Right.
“Scarlet Fever Summer” and “Tale of a Painting” are two stories that tell a story of a painting that told a story and also became valuable. That is why I think we should save old things.
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I like the setting out of the 2 stars and a wish, with the heading summarising the main points.
The link to habits of mind is interesting as well. Gives more information for those who might value it presented in that way.
Two Stars and a Wish
I loved how you said “old things can tell an amazing story.”
That’s so cool! It made me think of hidden treasures! Can you think of a time when you found something that told a story? Maybe add a bit more about how they make you feel curious!
Great job mentioning the painting in the Fine Art Museum!
Wow, impressive! When you wrote, “That painting ended up in a Fine Art Museum!” it made me imagine being there. What did the museum smell like? What sounds did you hear? Think about what senses you could describe more!
✨ Wish: Tell me more about the story of the painting! ✨
- Make it magical! You wrote, “Father began painting a picture of where my brothers and I used to play.” Can you add more details here? What did the place look like, smell like, sound like? Give your readers all the juicy details!
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Your essay has some great points! One thing that might enhance it is adding a personal anecdote or a unique example from your own life. Have you ever had an experience with an old item that held sentimental value or turned out to be valuable? Sharing a personal story could make your argument even more compelling.
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