ap lang final essay - grace willmarth
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Graduating college is a big step in life, it’s the move from being a young adult who still depends on parents to fully being independent and starting your life. It can be scary to take that step because no one knows what lies on the other side. Many want advice on how to survive and others just want support. Rita Dove assures students that things will work out through her wishes for the students.To do this Through her personal anecdotes and gentle tone, she appeals to the students mostly through appealing to their ' values and through emotions, making a focus on pathos.
Graduating college is a big step in life, it’s the move from being a young adult who still depends on parents to fully being independent and starting your life.
It can be scary to take that step because no one knows what lies on the other side.
Many want advice on how to survive and others just want support.
Rita Dove assures students that things will work out through her wishes for the students.
Through her personal anecdotes and gentle tone, she appeals to students' values and emotions, making a focus on pathos.
To establish her credibility from the very beginning, she mentions her experience as a professor at the same school from which her students are now graduating from, which could also make her seem more relatable since she’s part of the school and some may know her personally. She also mentions her experience with giving these kinds of speeches in the past. Overall, right off the bat, she establishes her position as why people should listen to what she has to say. She also throughout her speech continues to mention more achievements, such as in the middle of her essay (line 70-80) where she mentions being rewarded for her writing and being honored to give the inaugural speech at the White House.
Other than to establish her credibility, the main way in which she appeals to the audience is by honing in on their values and desires in life. As students graduating college, this is the time they set their lives and go out to achieve all that they’ve been preparing for. So, she appeals to them by advising them of how to get what they want. The three values she tells them are hunger (or drive), hard work, and uncertainty. By appealing to these values and telling students how to achieve their goals, she makes a really good speech that’s impactful.
And it’s impactful because it's relevant. As these students are taking a huge step in their lives, she understands that that’s what’s on their minds, how can they turn out the most successful. She gives them advice in a way that seems softer and caring, even mentioning that they should take her advice as if coming from a fairy godmother. Instead of inspiring an excitement of “go get ‘em!” she almost seems motherly, guiding them along the way.
Ultimately, her use of ethos and pathos comes together to create a very compelling and impactful message.
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You did a wonderful job indicating Rita Dove’s main rhetorical choices, highlighting her use of ethos and pathos. However, to strengthen your thesis, aim for a clearer connection between these rhetorical strategies and her specific message or purpose. You touched on this when mentioning her “wishes for students” and how she “appeals to their values,” which can be reinforced by specifying how her personal anecdotes and gentle tone guide the audience. Also, addressing the purpose behind her wishful tone and narrative style enhances analytical depth. Quotes like “I wish you Hunger” could anchor your analysis of her choice to imbue her pragmatic advice with sentimental wishes, adding richness to your argument.
What more would you like to hear? We could discuss how her personal stories enhance her ethos, explore her wish strategy with graduates, or dive deeper into how she uses pathos to resonate with student fears. Where to next in this adventure?
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You’ve done a commendable job illustrating Rita Dove’s impact through ethos and pathos. Your focus on her credibility via personal connections and achievements was well-explained. For instance, you highlight her university experience, which roots her message in familiarity. It’s essential, though, to connect explicitly how these elements deeply reinforce her message. When discussing “hunger,” “hard work,” and “uncertainty,” you effectively align these with student values, yet delve further into how Dove’s subtle, caring tone—her “contrary fairy godmother” persona—elevates this impact.
Consider refining your commentary on how ethos intertwines with pathos to sustain her audience’s trust and emotion. How might you demonstrate the effect of personal anecdotes or how they resonate emotionally?
What are your thoughts on delving deeper into her contrasts between student anxieties and the comfort she offers? Or maybe explore more ways her tone may influence different student segments? Eager to hear your thoughts and take this analysis to the next level!
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Your essay provides a solid grasp of Rita Dove’s rhetorical situation, beginning with her interaction with the students. You adeptly highlight her strategic establishment of credibility through ethos, referencing her position and accomplishments. You also touch on how she relates to students’ values—hunger, hard work, and uncertainty—to create a compelling argument.
To enhance your rhetorical analysis, consider deepening your exploration of how Dove intertwines her personal anecdotes with broader values to resonate emotionally (pathos). You smartly observe her motherly tone, but try linking this tone to specific language choices Dove makes.
Curious about your essay’s next move? Here are paths we could trek: refining how rhetorics weave into messages, uncovering nuances linking logical connections, or exploring how language foils inspire emotional cushioning. Which road sounds enticing to you? Or maybe you’ve spotted a secret trail tantalizing your curiosity!
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