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Everyday in the United States hundreds of lives are lost to opioid overdoses–a preventable tragedy that continues to devastate families and communities. Behind these numbers though, are real people: mothers, fathers, brothers, sisters, and life-long friends. Addiction isn’t a moral failing, it’s a public health crisis. While billions are spent combating symptoms and putting drug users in jail, too little is invested in solutions that work. This isn’t just a crisis; it’s a call to compassion and a chance to do better. Scene (personal experience or memory) Many people never come into personal contact with addiction and the effects of drugs like heroin, oxycontin, and fentanyl. However, ever since I first dipped my toe into helping those affected it has consumed my life. A year and half ago I worked at a SAFE House in Alaska; a place for those suffering drug, domestic, and/or sexual abuses. I witnessed more horrors in the month and a half I worked there than I had in my whole life up to that point. I saw addicts who needed help trying to reach out but unable to break the physical hold the drugs had. I saw mothers and fathers ask us to take care of their babies because they couldn’t escape the grasp on their minds. I saw people overdose; seizing, throwing up, and scratching at themselves. The look in their eyes as the light begins to leave them. I delivered naloxone to some of these people and held them down as they thrashed at me, screaming about how I had ruined their high. Between all the horrors though, I saw people who needed help. Help getting back on their feet. Help finding a job and functioning in society. Help defeating their demons. I realized these aren’t nameless people, they’re human beings. Our brothers and sisters, our mothers and fathers. I became convinced we could not, no matter what abandon these people. Argument (Claim, Evidence and Reasoning) The United States needs to adopt a harm reduction policy to address the opioid epidemic effectively. Evidence from Switzerland demonstrates the potential success of such an approach: after implementing harm reduction strategies like supervised injection sites and medication-assisted treatment, overdose deaths dropped by 50%, and new heroin users declined by 80%, according to the Stanford Social Innovation Review. In the U.S., the need for similar measures is urgent, particularly in states like California, where the Department of Public Health reports nearly 7,000 opioid-related deaths annually, with approximately 6,000 linked to fentanyl. Furthermore, the National Institute on Drug Abuse highlights that decades of research support harm reduction strategies, showing they significantly reduce overdose deaths and curb the spread of infectious diseases. These strategies prioritize saving lives and reducing harm while addressing addiction as a public health issue rather than a criminal one, offering a proven path to combat the opioid crisis more effectively. Conclusion/Call to Action It is clear that the United States must shift to a harm reduction approach to combat the opioid epidemic effectively. The success in Switzerland, coupled with alarming statistics from California and decades of research supporting harm reduction strategies, makes this change seem obvious. Policymakers should prioritize implementing evidence-based measures like supervised injection sites, access to naloxone, and medication-assisted treatment nationwide. By focusing on saving lives and reducing harm, we can address the opioid crisis as the public health emergency it truly is and move toward a healthier, safer future for our communities.

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DMU Timestamp: January 21, 2025 22:02

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Christina C's Question Christina C and/or KQED - Revise to: Make easier to read out loud for audio recording (Jan 21 2025 8:08PM) : What suggestions do you have? more
KQED - Revise to: Make easier to read out loud for audio recording with Christina C's edits:
KQED - Revise to: Make easier to read out loud for audio recording
You are a supportive, patient script editor for a high school student w...

Thank you for sharing your script! It’s a powerful and important piece that highlights significant issues surrounding the opioid crisis. I can suggest a few ways to make it easier to read out loud and engage your audience effectively.

1. Break Down Complex Sentences:
Some sentences are quite long, which can make them harder to read smoothly. Breaking them into shorter sentences can improve clarity and pacing.

- Original: “Everyday in the United States hundreds of lives are lost to opioid overdoses–a preventable tragedy that continues to devastate families and communities.” - Revision Option 1: “Every day in the United States, hundreds of lives are lost to opioid overdoses. This is a preventable tragedy that devastates families and communities.” - Revision Option 2: “Opioid overdoses claim hundreds of lives daily in the United States. This preventable tragedy continues to devastate families and communities.”

2. Add Pauses for Emphasis:
Use punctuation, like periods or ellipses, to create natural pauses for emphasis, especially in emotionally charged sections.

- Original: “This isn’t just a crisis; it’s a call to compassion and a chance to do better.” - Revision Option 1: “This isn’t just a crisis. It’s a call to compassion… and a chance to do better.” - Revision Option 2: “This isn’t just a crisis; it’s a call to compassion… a chance to do better.”

3. Use Repetition for Effect:
Repeating certain phrases can add rhythm and drive a point home, helping listeners remember key messages.

- Original: “I realized these aren’t nameless people, they’re human beings. Our brothers and sisters, our mothers and fathers.” - Revision Option 1: “I realized these aren’t nameless people. They’re human beings. Our brothers and sisters. Our mothers and fathers.” - Revision Option 2: “These aren’t nameless people; they’re human beings. Our brothers and sisters, our mothers and fathers.”

These revisions can make your script more engaging and easier to read aloud. Does this feedback help? Would you like more suggestions or guidance on a specific section?

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Christina C Christina C (Jan 21 2025 8:30PM) : Where else could I add rhythm? more

I think the idea of adding rhythm is interesting. Thanks!

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Christina C's Question Christina C and/or Improv Teammate (Jan 21 2025 8:30PM) : Where else could I add rhythm? more
Improv Teammate with Christina C's edits:
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I read your writing or look at an image, and respond with YES, AND... L...

Your script is already compelling, but there are definitely places where rhythm can be enhanced to make it resonate even more deeply with your audience.

One spot to infuse more rhythm is by layering phrases that build anticipation or emphasize a point. You know how in spoken word, the repetition of sounds or structures creates a flow? Like using similar sentence beginnings or endings to create a pattern? Think about breaking some of those longer passages down into manageable, impactful beats.

For instance, around parts where you describe your own experiences at the SAFE House—each moment you’re recounting could be delivered with almost identical length phrases, which intensifies the narrative’s urgency and emotional pull. By aligning each phrase similarly, you’re giving each memory equal weight and allowing them to boom across your delivery.

Let me know if you want more ideas on tweaking specific sections!

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Christina C's Question Christina C and/or Improv Teammate (Jan 21 2025 8:31PM) : Can you write this again but for an eighth grader? more
Improv Teammate with Christina C's edits:
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I read your writing or look at an image, and respond with YES, AND... L...

I see how impactful your depiction of experiences can be, especially when you share stories from the SAFE House. That’s a place to really slow down and engage your listeners with more vivid imagery. Imagery is powerful in storytelling—it paints pictures and brings your audience right there with you.

Think about how you can enhance moments like when you’re witnessing people reaching for help or when you’re giving naloxone. Infuse those scenes with sensory details—what did it look, sound, feel like? This layers more emotion and reality into your accounts, making the narrative even more relatable for someone who might not have encountered these situations firsthand.

Want further tips on how to effectively weave imagery through other parts of your speech?

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