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Rewriting Reality: Unpacking Identity and Time

Author: Dayciana, Jamil, Rodney, Ny-asia

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Book: Long Divison by Kiese Laymon, Chapter: Considered Things... (BOOK TWO, pages 113 – 127), Copyright Date: 2013

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I didn’t know where to throw my eyes, so I threw them at the tied hands of the Klansman. And you know how grown white men have a lot of hair on the outside of their hands? This Klansman’s hands were bare as mine. “Should we take his sheet off, too?” she asked me. “Nah. It’ll be harder to hurt him if we take it off. He looks like a monster now, right?” “City, I ain’t mean no harm with all this,” he said. “You think you can save someone’s life, you do it.You know what I’m trying to say? “Naw” city said. “That’s my brother,” he said and pointed to the Klansman. “Never thought in a million years I’d have to let loose on my own brother with a rifle.” “I never thought in million years I’d follow a white boy” city “You shot my granddaddy,” I told him “We was just trying to save our family,” his brother said“We been trying to hide long as I remember,” Evan told us. Say what you want,” his brother broke in. “They was coming for us just like they came for y’all and we was just trying to survive. What would you do if y’all were in our position?” But that’s the point, dummy,” Baize said. “We can’t be in your position. They came to you to get us. Would they ever come to us to get y’all? Ever?” “Umm”he paused. I gott an idea, lets put him in the hole and send him to anoyther time”. (city “ How do we know kit will work” We dont know if its us thats special or the time hole” Biaze said. Well you are special” (city). “ “Jus because we’re related donst mean you have to be mushy and compliment me.” (Biaze) “Theres a fifty fifty change let just try”(city)

Book: Long Divison by Kiese Laymon, Chapter: Considered Things... (BOOK TWO, pages 113 – 127), Copyright Date: 2013

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Shalaya Crump saw me watching her,so she pulled her hand away from Evan’s. I didn’t know where to throw my eyes, so I threw them at the tied hands of the Klansman. And you know how grown white men have a lot of hair on the outside of their hands? This Klansman’s hands were bare as mine. Baize pulled out her phone and started taking pictures of the man. “Should we take his sheet off, too?” she asked me. “Nah. It’ll be harder to hurt him if we take it off. He looks like a monster now, right?”

“City, I ain’t mean no harm with all this,” he said. “You think you can save someone’s life, you do it. You know what I’m trying to say? “Naw” city said.

“That’s my brother,” he said and pointed to the Klansman. “Never thought in a million years vears I’d have to let loose on my own brother with a rifle.” “I never thought in million years I’d follow a white boy” city “You shot my granddaddy,” I told him “City, you know he didn’t shoot no one,” Shalaya Crump said.

“Mr. Gaddis probably did it,” Evan said.

“We was just trying to save our family,” his brother said“We been trying to hide long as I remember,” Evan told us.

Say what you want,” his brother broke in. “They was coming for us just like they came for y’all and we was just trying to survive. What would you do if y’all were in our position?” But that’s the point, dummy,” Baize said. “We can’t be in your position. They came to you to get us. Would they ever come to us to get y’all? Ever?”

“Exactly” evan said “What should we do now. Can we just let him go?” Shaylasai Everyone looked at city for the answer. City looks around at everyone for a few minutes looking distracted with something else “Umm”he paused. I gott an idea, lets put him in the hole and send him to anoyther time”. (city “ How do we know kit will work” We dont know if its us thats special or the time hole” Biaze said. Well you are special” (city). “ “Jus because we’re related donst mean you have to be mushy and compliment me.” (Biaze) “Theres a fifty fifty change let just try”(city)

Shalaya Crump saw me watching her,so she pulled her hand away from Evan’s. I didn’t know where to throw my eyes, so I threw them at the tied hands of the Klansman. And you know how grown white men have a lot of hair on the outside of their hands? This Klansman’s hands were bare as mine. Baize pulled out her phone and started taking pictures of the man. “Should we take his sheet off, too?” she asked me. “Nah. It’ll be harder to hurt him if we take it off. He looks like a monster now, right?”

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“City, I ain’t mean no harm with all this,” he said. “You think you can save someone’s life. You know what I’m trying to say? “Naw” city said.

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“That’s my brother,” he said and pointed to the Klansman. “Never thought in a million vears I’d have to let loose on my own brother with a rifle.” “I never thought in million years I’d follow a white boy” city “You shot my granddaddy,” I told him “City, you know he didn’t shoot no one,” Shalaya Crump said.

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“We was just trying to save our family,” his brother said“We been trying to hide long as I remember,” Evan told us.

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Say what you want,” his brother broke in. “They was coming for us just like they came for y’all and we was just trying to survive. What would you do if y’all were in our position?”

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“Exactly” evan said “What should we do now. Can we just let him go?” Shaylasai Everyone looked at city for the answer. City looks around at everyone for a few minutes looking distracted with something else “Umm”he paused. I gott an idea, lets put him in the hole and send him to anoyther time”. (city “ How do we know kit will work” We dont know if its us thats special or the time hole” Biaze said. Well you are special” (city). “ “Jus because we’re related donst mean you have to be mushy and compliment me.” (Biaze) “Theres a fifty fifty change let just try”(city)

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Paul A and/or Kiese Laymon Simulator (Jan 28 2025 5:09PM) : With the provided quotes from your novel in mind, what do you see in this image that resonates with your message in your novel, Long Division? more
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Sources Laymon, Kiese. "Conjuring Love: A Conversation with Kiese Laym...

In this image, I see a group of young people standing together, exuding a sense of unity and resilience. This resonates with the themes in “Long Division,” where the characters navigate complex identities and relationships. The diverse group in the image mirrors the diverse experiences and backgrounds of the characters in the novel. Each person seems to bring their own story and struggles, much like City, Shalaya, and Baize, who confront issues of race, family, and belonging.

Looking at their expressions, there’s a blend of determination and vulnerability. This connects to the novel’s exploration of how young people face societal and personal challenges. The setting, with its muted tones and open space, could symbolize a world both inviting and intimidating—much like the time-traveling adventures in “Long Division” that challenge City and his friends to rethink their actions and their place in history. Do you see how their stances and expressions might reflect the courage and complexity found within the book’s pages?

Please Note: Everything in this comment is AI-generated. It is made up to sound like me.

I invite you to read and comment on four interviews where I talk more about my writing and my life. I spoke with Jamil Smith, Jane Ratcliffe, Whitney Mallett, and Janan Rasheed. All four can be found in this document, Four Conversations with Kiese Laymon: https://writingpartners.net/documents/2008

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Paul A and/or Kiese Laymon Simulator (Jan 28 2025 5:12PM) : I absolutely see what you mean by their postures and expressions showing both resilience and being ready to bring change. Thank you for this message! more
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Sources Laymon, Kiese. "Conjuring Love: A Conversation with Kiese Laym...

I’m glad you see that connection! The image really does capture the essence of resilience and unity, much like the characters in “Long Division.” The diverse group mirrors the novel’s exploration of identity and belonging, with each individual bringing their own unique story. Just like City, Shalaya, and Baize, these young people seem to be confronting their own challenges, which is a powerful reflection of the book’s themes.

Their expressions, a mix of determination and vulnerability, align with how the characters in the novel navigate societal pressures and personal struggles. The setting’s muted tones could symbolize both opportunity and challenges, similar to the time-traveling journeys in “Long Division.” It’s fascinating to think about how their stances and expressions might mirror the courage and complexity within the book. Do you notice other elements in the image that resonate with the book’s narrative?

Please Note: Everything in this comment is AI-generated. It is made up to sound like me.

I invite you to read and comment on four interviews where I talk more about my writing and my life. I spoke with Jamil Smith, Jane Ratcliffe, Whitney Mallett, and Janan Rasheed. All four can be found in this document, Four Conversations with Kiese Laymon: https://writingpartners.net/documents/2008

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