THIS IS JUST AN EXAMPLE. A student's comments during the debate on 9/10

Absolutely! I’d love to help you craft an engaging and effective essay about the debate. Let’s start by breaking it down into parts.

First, think about What is this really about? This question helps you focus on the core theme of your essay. For example, is your essay about the broader political implications, the contrasting ideologies of the debaters, or the impact of their policies on the public?

Would you like to see more?

I’m here to help you see what themes you might write about. To guide you better, let me pose some questions related to your text. These questions aim to highlight spaces that may need further development and inspire you to expand and enrich your draft.

1. When you mention that “Kamala states that she has people to help people over the border,” what kind of assistance is she offering, and who are the people she plans to help? Can you provide more details about her approach or strategy in addressing border issues?

2. You state, “Trump says she is ruining America with the things she would do.” Can you specify what those things are? What are some concrete examples of actions or policies Kamala has proposed that Trump believes would ruin America?

3. In your summary, you mentioned, “Kamala wants to make a change for the people in a good way,” but what specific changes is she proposing? Can you elaborate on her plans and how they differ from what Trump suggests?

4. You refer to Trump’s claim that bringing people from the border would start World War III. How does Trump justify this extreme consequence? What are his main arguments, and is there any historical context or precedent he refers to?

5. You included that Trump “claims he burned places down.” What locations or events is he talking about, and how does he connect these actions to Kamala’s policies?

6. Kamala claims that Trump "attempts to use race to divide the American people.” Can you delve deeper into specific examples or incidents where Trump’s actions or statements have had this effect?

7. You briefly touch on the economic plans Kamala has, like “offering $15,000 for start-up businesses.” Can you provide more context or details about how she plans to implement these programs and their potential impact?

8. Why does Trump have a particular stance against people from the border? Can you explore his reasoning in greater depth and perhaps compare it with Kamala’s viewpoint on immigration?

9. You mentioned that Trump claims the war (presumably Ukraine-Russia) wouldn’t have happened. How does he argue this point, and what evidence or reasoning does he use to support his claim?

By addressing these questions, you can uncover more themes and provide a richer, more detailed narrative in your text.

Learn more about Diving Deeper and add your comments in this document: https://writingpartners.net/documents/626?scroll_to=2464 Prepared by Erica Kaufman. Bard College Institute of Writing and Thinking. 2015.

Howdy, I’m John, a proud Trump voter and a staunch supporter of the “Make America Great Again” movement. I believe in the values of strong borders, a robust economy, and putting America first. The idea of switching my vote to Kamala Harris is something I find entirely unthinkable given our vastly different worldviews.

For starters, I value the importance of national security and the need to control immigration strictly. Trump’s policies resonate with me because they focus on protecting American jobs and ensuring that our resources are used to benefit our citizens first. Harris’s approach to immigration, with her more lenient stance on border control, is something I fundamentally disagree with. You see the border as a humanitarian issue, but I view it as a matter of national security.

Economically, Trump’s focus on deregulation, tax cuts, and energy independence has been beneficial for my community and me. We’ve seen job growth and economic opportunities flourish under these policies. Harris’s plans for higher taxes and increased regulation would, in my opinion, stifle this growth and hurt small businesses like mine. I value economic policies that encourage entrepreneurship and self-reliance, while you seem to favor more government intervention and social welfare programs.

On foreign policy, I believe in strong, decisive action that puts America’s interests first. Trump’s approach to international relations, including his stance on NATO and his dealings with adversaries like China, makes me feel secure. Harris’s foreign policy positions seem too conciliatory and risk undermining our global standing. You might prioritize diplomacy and international cooperation, but I believe strength and self-interest should guide our interactions on the world stage.

When it comes to social issues, I appreciate Trump’s commitment to preserving traditional values and his stance on law and order. Harris supports policies that, in my eyes, promote division and undermine the rule of law. You might see her as a champion of social justice, but I view her policies as harmful to societal cohesion and public safety.

So, as you can see, our differences are profound. I’m committed to supporting policies that ensure America’s prosperity, security, and traditional values. Harris’s vision for the country doesn’t align with my beliefs, and thus, persuading me to change my vote would require a fundamental shift in my values and worldview.

Please Note: This Writing Partner was designed to show you how someone might react to your text, not to give you feedback on how it is written or to help you to fix anything. You can respond to this audience reaction or not. It’s up to you, now, to decide what you want to add to, subtract from, rearrange, or replace in your writing. Here are three questions that a writing coach might pose to help you to develop your writing:

- How can you address the specific concerns of a Trump voter regarding national security and economic policy in a way that feels genuine and respectful?
- What compromises or middle-ground solutions can you propose that might appeal to someone who strongly values traditional American principles?
- How can you use personal stories or testimonials to create an emotional connection with a voter who is deeply skeptical of Kamala Harris?

Now, let’s get you moving forward. What’s your step-by-step plan for revisiting your writing? Remember, you can make edits right here in Writing Partners by double-clicking on a sentence or paragraph and hitting the edit button. What’s your next move?

Of course! I’d be delighted to help you construct a compelling letter. Here are three different detailed outlines for your letter with quoted evidence from the debate. Each outline employs a unique approach that may resonate differently with your audience.

1. Outline 1: Emphasizing Shared Values and Practical Solutions

I. Introduction
- Greet the readers and acknowledge their support for Trump.
- Introduce the purpose: “convince them to vote for Harris using debate evidence.”

II. Positives about Kamala Harris’s Plans
- “Kamala states that she claims she has people to help people over the border.”
- “She claims she offers a new generation to our country and her plan is to give start-up business 15,000 for starting businesses and 6,000 to families with a child to start their life like babies.”
- “She claims that opening up auto plants and bringing back our energy to a higher level.”

III. Trump’s Shortcomings and Fear-Mongering
- “Trump claims ur country is being lost and bringing these people from the border would start a world war 3.”
- “Trump is basically saying the people on the border shouldn’t be here because he thinks they’re dangerous.”
- “He claims the war would’ve never happened because Biden couldn’t communicate so it started a war.”

IV. Realities vs Fear Tactics
- “Trump says the people from the border would hurt people and he wants to make sure they don’t go by to use our stuff like our energy.”
- “She says he let 5,000 terrorists go and sent them to Camp David I think that this wasn’t a good deal.”

V. Conclusion
- Reiterate Harris’s practical plans and ask for their vote.
- “Kamala wants to make a change for the people in a good way and wants to touch the people no matter what race or what their entity is.”

Affordances: This approach emphasizes common values and practical solutions while addressing fears directly. It appeals to voters interested in change and pragmatic results.

1. Outline 2: Analytical Comparison of Policy Impact

I. Introduction
- Acknowledge the readers’ perspectives and the importance of informed decision-making.
- State the intention to compare the impacts of Harris and Trump’s policies.

II. Border and Immigration Policy
- Harris’s approach: “Kamala states that she claims she has people to help people over the border.”
- Trump’s stance: “Trump is basically saying the people on the border shouldn’t be here because he thinks they’re dangerous.”
- Analysis: Potential benefits and drawbacks of both approaches.

III. Economic Plans and Energy
- Harris’s proposals: “She claims she offers a new generation to our country and her plan is to give start-up business 15,000 for starting businesses and 6,000 to families with a child to start their life like babies.”
- Trump’s perspective: “He claims she would ruin the country and there would be less energy and oil and it would take a toll and be back to solar panels.”
- Analysis: Economic implications of each policy.

IV. National Security and Global Politics
- Harris’s critique: “She says he let 5,000 terrorists go and sent them to Camp David I think that this wasn’t a good deal.”
- Trump’s claims: “He claims this could start a world war 3.”
- Analysis: Evaluating the risks of their respective national security strategies.

V. Social and Racial Issues
- Harris’s stance: “She says he attempts to use race to divide the American people and wouldn’t lend rent to black people and point at the Central Five.”
- Trump’s denial: “Trump claims that the Central Five is guilty even though they were forced to say something they didn’t do, a crime that they didn’t commit.”
- Analysis: Addressing race relations and social dynamics under each administration.

VI. Conclusion
- Encourage the reader to consider the analyzed impacts and vote for Harris for practical and inclusive policies.

Affordances: This method provides a structured comparison of policies, making it effective for analytical audiences who value thorough examination and implications.

1. Outline 3: Personal Appeal and Emotional Connection

I. Introduction
- Personal greeting and acknowledgment of their passion for the country.
- Introduce a heartfelt message to consider Harris based on the debate evidence.

II. Importance of Unity and Help
- Highlight the need for compassion: “Kamala states that she claims she has people to help people over the border.”
- Contrast with Trump’s divisive rhetoric: “Trump is basically saying the people on the border shouldn’t be here because he thinks they’re dangerous.”

III. Positive Vision for the Future
- Emphasize Harris’s positive impact on families and businesses: “She claims she offers a new generation to our country and her plan is to give start-up business 15,000 for starting businesses and 6,000 to families with a child to start their life like babies.”
- Describe her proactive energy plans: “She claims that opening up auto plants and bringing back our energy to a higher level.”

IV. Preventing Fear-Based Decisions
- Share concerns about fear-mongering: “Trump claims ur country is being lost and bringing these people from the border would start a world war 3.”
- Discuss the fallacies of his claims: “He claims this could start a world war 3.”

V. Moral and Ethical Considerations
- Address ethical concerns: “She says he attempts to use race to divide the American people and wouldn’t lend rent to black people and point at the Central Five.”
- Discuss Trump’s controversial actions: “She says he let 5,000 terrorists go and sent them to Camp David I think that this wasn’t a good deal.”

VI. Conclusion
- Encourage an emotionally resonant decision: “Kamala wants to make a change for the people in a good way and wants to touch the people no matter what race or what their entity is.”

Affordances: This approach creates an emotional and moral connection with the audience, appealing to their sense of compassion and ethical decision-making.

Now that you have these three nuanced and detailed outlines, each with a different organizational strategy and persuasive technique, which one strikes a chord with you? Or is there a fusion of these thoughts simmering in your mind, crafting its own unique pathway?

Fire up the engines of your creativity and map out your plan for restructuring your text! Step-by-step, what will you include? What emotional and logical grooves will you carve out for your readers?

And, is there perhaps another facet of your writing that you’d love to polish or delve deeper into as you revise? The stage is yours! ✨

Your notes are quite detailed and capture the essence of the debate. They highlight the main points made by both Kamala and Trump. It’s clear you paid close attention to their arguments and counterarguments.

Imagine if you could add a bit more structure to your notes, perhaps by categorizing the points under specific themes like immigration, economy, and foreign policy. This could make it easier to review and analyze later. What do you think about creating a mind map to visualize these themes and their connections?

Absolutely, I’d be happy to help you organize and structure your text. Here are three different outlines for your text, each taking a different approach to the content and how the audience might respond.

1. Outline 1: Traditional Argumentative Structure

1. Introduction
   - Introduce the main topic and provide a brief overview of the discussion between Kamala Harris and Donald Trump.
   – “Kamala states that she claims she has people to help people over the border…”

1. Body Paragraphs
   - Kamala Harris’s Claims
   – “Kamala states that she claims she has people to help people over the border…”
   – “She claims she offers a new generation to our country and her plan is to give start-up businesses $15,000 for starting businesses and $6,000 to families with a child to start their life like babies.”
   – “Kamala says they were happy that he is no longer president.”

- Donald Trump’s Claims
– “Trump claims your country is being lost and bringing these people from the border would start a World War 3.”
– “Trump is basically saying the people on the border shouldn’t be here because he thinks they’re dangerous.”
– “He claims he burned places down and he claims other things she did wouldn’t work because of the criminal he mentions and he claims she would ruin the country and there would be less energy and oil and it would take a toll and be back to solar panels.”
– “Trump claims that the central five is guilty even though they were forced to say something they didn’t do, a crime that they didn’t commit.”

1. Analysis
   - Evaluating Claims
   – “I think that Trump might be wrong on certain things, but Kamala is just going back and forth and not saying changes at first…”
   – “Question: Why does Trump have a thing against people from the border trying to come to the US?”

1. Conclusion
   - Summarize Main Points
   – “Summary: Kamala wants to make a change for the people in a good way and wants to touch the people no matter what race or what their entity is. But I think Trump wants to not have certain people in America and it would ruin America.”

Affordances:
This structure clearly divides Kamala’s and Trump’s claims, making it easy for the reader to follow and compare their arguments. It also provides a space for your analysis and questions, which encourages critical thinking.

1. Outline 2: African American English Rhetorical Patterns

1. Introduction
   - Implied Thesis and Topic Association
   – “Nothing seems to engage my mind more than the mysterious world of politics. Enough about the emotional toll this debate has had on my life though, there is some logos and ethos too…”

1. Body Paragraphs
   - Kamala Harris’s Claims with Recursion and Parallelism
   – “Kamala states that she claims she has people to help people over the border… Kamala says they were happy that he is no longer president.”
   – “She claims she offers a new generation to our country and her plan is to give start-up businesses $15,000 for starting businesses and $6,000 to families with a child to start their life like babies.”

- Donald Trump’s Claims with Repetition and Anaphora
– “Trump claims your country is being lost and bringing these people from the border would start a World War 3. Trump claims that the central five is guilty even though they were forced to say something they didn’t do…”
– “Trump is basically saying the people on the border shouldn’t be here because he thinks they’re dangerous. Trump says the people from the border would hurt people…”
– “He claims he burned places down and he claims other things she did wouldn’t work because of the criminal he mentions and he claims she would ruin the country…”

1. Analysis with Circumlocution
   - “If I hadn’t said enough in the pathos department, I thought I would touch on it again, because the emotion behind these claims seems so strong…”
   – “I think that Trump might be wrong on certain things, but Kamala is just going back and forth and not saying changes at first…”

1. Conclusion
   - Implied Summarization
   – “Kamala wants to make a change for the people in a good way and wants to touch the people no matter what race or what their entity is. But I think Trump wants to not have certain people in America and it would ruin America.”

Affordances:
This structure leverages African American English rhetorical patterns to create a more engaging and emotionally resonant narrative. The use of recursion and anaphora emphasizes key points and makes the text more memorable.

1. Outline 3: Problem-Solution Structure

1. Introduction
   - Introduce the Problem
   – “Kamala and Trump have differing views on immigration and other policies. This has led to a heated debate about the future of America.”

1. Body Paragraphs
   - Kamala Harris’s Solutions
   – “Kamala states that she claims she has people to help people over the border…”
   – “She claims she offers a new generation to our country and her plan is to give start-up businesses $15,000 for starting businesses and $6,000 to families with a child to start their life like babies.”
   – “Kamala says they were happy that he is no longer president.”

- Donald Trump’s Solutions
– “Trump claims your country is being lost and bringing these people from the border would start a World War 3.”
– “Trump says the people from the border would hurt people and he wants to make sure they don’t go by to use our stuff like our energy.”
– “Trump is basically saying the people on the border shouldn’t be here because he thinks they’re dangerous.”

1. Analysis
   - Comparing Solutions
   – “I think that Trump might be wrong on certain things, but Kamala is just going back and forth and not saying changes at first…”
   – “Question: Why does Trump have a thing against people from the border trying to come to the US?”

1. Conclusion
   - Recommend a Solution
   – “Summary: Kamala wants to make a change for the people in a good way and wants to touch the people no matter what race or what their entity is. But I think Trump wants to not have certain people in America and it would ruin America.”

Affordances:
This structure frames the discussion as a problem-solution analysis, making it easier for the reader to understand the stakes and evaluate the proposed solutions. It also sets up a clear comparison between Kamala’s and Trump’s approaches.

Now, I invite you to dive in! Each outline takes a different approach to the content and how the audience might respond. Choose which one you prefer or even make up your own based on these. Write a plan for reorganizing your text. What are you going to do step-by-step? Is there anything else you want to work on as you revise? Let’s get this text shining!

To write an engaging and inviting post on an online forum, start by thinking about what issues matter to you the most. You’ve mentioned various topics in your comments, such as immigration, energy policies, racial divisions, and the candidates’ stance on these issues. Reflect on why these issues resonate with you. When you write about why they matter to you, you create a personal connection with your readers, making your post more engaging.

Would you like to see more?

Based on your comments from the debate, it looks like you are interested in several key issues:

Firstly, you’re clearly engaged with immigration policy and the differing views on how to handle people coming over the border. This is evident from your multiple comments on Trump and Kamala’s statements regarding border security and the humanitarian aspects of immigration.

Would you like to see more?