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American identity is a very hard subject to define clearly.
We are a country made up almost entirely by immigrants.
This can cause strife when one is trying to find their true identity.
Sonia Sotomayor, a supreme court justice, spoke to the students studying law at berkeley about this very topic.
Sonia teaches how to find your identity as an American or by your heritage by implementing several literary strategies such as personal connection and ethos.
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Sonia starts the speech by asking a question “who am I” yet she doesn't answer the question immediately, instead she shares some of her experiences that helped to lead her to the answer.
This strengthens her argument by showing her complex background, that forms a multifaceted view of sonias identity which makes this question more complex than it would otherwise seem.
At the end of going through several personal anecdotes, she states that “none of these experiences make her more or less latina” but it is the way it is “the way I love and live my life” she shows that the experiences of her life help her live with the identity of a latina but dont define who she is.
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Another way she shows the students at berkeley what identity is, is by defining why she is capable of lecturing on this subject.
She states that she has been “very well educated” which shows that she has the knowledge to speak extensively on the subject.
Also her position at the time “being a court of appeals judge” shows her credibility.
Lastly her background and upbringing give her the personal experience that many are looking for in people who teach on subjects.
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Your response to the prompt effectively establishes a thesis that explores Sonia Sotomayor’s rhetorical choices. You’ve identified how she uses personal connection and ethos to convey her complex identity, which is a solid foundation for your analysis. Your thesis could be strengthened by clearly articulating how these rhetorical strategies contribute to Sotomayor’s overall message about identity. Consider specifying how the personal anecdotes and ethos not only define her identity but also impact her audience’s understanding of identity complexity.
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Your response to the prompt effectively establishes a thesis that explores Sonia Sotomayor’s rhetorical choices. You’ve identified how she uses personal connection and ethos to convey her complex identity, which is a solid foundation for your analysis. Your thesis could be strengthened by clearly articulating how these rhetorical strategies contribute to Sotomayor’s overall message about identity. Consider specifying how the personal anecdotes and ethos not only define her identity but also impact her audience’s understanding of identity complexity.
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Your essay does a good job of identifying Sotomayor’s use of personal connection and ethos, but let’s delve deeper into how her anecdotes impact her audience’s understanding of identity complexity. When she shares her cultural experiences, such as eating traditional Puerto Rican foods or listening to merengue, she paints a vivid picture of her life that goes beyond simple definitions of identity. This approach invites the audience to consider identity as multifaceted, not just a label but a rich tapestry of experiences.
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To enhance your conclusion, consider tying together the main points of your analysis in a way that reinforces Sonia Sotomayor’s exploration of identity. Emphasize how she masterfully employs rhetorical strategies to address the complexities of identity, not just as a Latina but as an American navigating a multicultural landscape. You could highlight how her ability to intertwine personal anecdotes with her professional ethos creates a powerful narrative that resonates with diverse audiences.
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