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A Sad and Revealing Reunion

Author: Jaeden, Shahd, Eazon

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I'd expected to defend myself against a racist, but instead here I was teary eyed over these people's pain, my own relative's pain. Everybody had suffered, in both Indiana and Buffalo. I'd been so shortsighted about stirring this pot I hadn't imagined how it could burn those involved. Dorothy was as stunned now as Mama had been when I said I wanted to search for her family. So now I was responsible for Dorothy's feelings too, even as I told her one lie after another. Why hadn't I thought this through?

Say I'm Dead.

By E. Delores Johnson.

Chapter 9, Page 109, Copyright Date 2020

This short film A sad and revealing reunion takes place after Ella tells her daughter , Dolores to tell her family that she is dead , because she fears that they wont accept her for having a mixed baby.

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Paul A's Question Paul A and/or E. Dolores Johnson Simulator (Jan 27 2025 2:15PM) : What do you see in this image? Does it reflect anything from your story? more

E. Dolores Johnson Simulator with Paul A's edits:

The image shows a dignified older woman with gray hair, sitting in a cozy, warmly lit library. She’s dressed in a classic suit, suggesting a sense of wisdom and experience. The room is filled with books, a testament to knowledge and learning, and there’s a sense of calm and contemplation in her expression.

This setting resonates with themes from my story, reflecting the depth of exploration and introspection found in “Say I’m Dead.” The library mirrors the research and uncovering of hidden family histories, while her thoughtful demeanor echoes the introspective journey of identity and racial understanding.

What would you like to explore further? Perhaps the significance of libraries in personal discovery, the role of elders in family narratives, or the symbolism of light and warmth in storytelling?

Please Note: Everything in this comment is AI-generated. It is made up to sound like me.

I invite you to read and comment on five interviews where I talk more about my memoir and my writing process. You can see all of this at https://writingpartners.net/documents/1643

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Paul A's Question Paul A and/or E. Dolores Johnson Simulator (Jan 27 2025 2:17PM) : Tell me more about libraries and the balance between research and interviews in your story. more

E. Dolores Johnson Simulator with Paul A's edits:

I’m glad you brought this up. Libraries played a pivotal role in my journey of discovery while writing “Say I’m Dead.” They were sanctuaries where I sifted through historical documents and census records, piecing together the puzzle of my family’s past. The balance between research in libraries and conducting interviews was crucial. While libraries offered factual grounding and historical context, interviews provided emotional depth and personal perspectives. This combination allowed me to create a narrative that was both informative and intimate.

The presence of elders, as portrayed in the image, highlights their wisdom and the stories they carry. They serve as living archives, bridging the gap between past and present. The warmth and light in the setting symbolize comfort and revelation, mirroring the enlightening journey of uncovering family secrets and understanding racial identity. Would you like to delve into the role of elders, the symbolism in storytelling, or another aspect of my journey?

Please Note: Everything in this comment is AI-generated. It is made up to sound like me.

I invite you to read and comment on five interviews where I talk more about my memoir and my writing process. You can see all of this at https://writingpartners.net/documents/1643

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Paul A Paul A (Jan 27 2025 2:18PM) : The look on this woman's face... says a lot.

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Paul A's Question Paul A and/or E. Dolores Johnson Simulator (Jan 27 2025 2:19PM) : Does her face capture what you want us to think when reading your book? more

E. Dolores Johnson Simulator with Paul A's edits:

The woman’s expression conveys a sense of wisdom and introspection, much like the journey I embarked on in “Say I’m Dead.” Her thoughtful gaze could symbolize the deep reflection required to navigate complex family histories and racial identities. This look of contemplation might resonate with readers as they delve into themes of love, secrets, and resilience.

Her presence in a library setting also suggests a connection to knowledge and discovery, essential elements in my memoir. The serene and warm ambiance mirrors the delicate balance of uncovering truths and finding comfort in them. Would you like to explore how expressions convey narrative themes, the emotional journey of writing, or perhaps the impact of setting on storytelling?

Please Note: Everything in this comment is AI-generated. It is made up to sound like me.

I invite you to read and comment on five interviews where I talk more about my memoir and my writing process. You can see all of this at https://writingpartners.net/documents/1643

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Alana M Alana M (Jan 27 2025 2:01PM) : I liked the ai picture.

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Alana M Alana M (Jan 27 2025 2:03PM) : How did the ai picture and backgrounds connect to the theme?

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Malcolm G Malcolm G (Jan 27 2025 2:03PM) : My favorite part of the video was the music and the dramatic scene or sum like that

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Aissetou G Aissetou G (Jan 27 2025 2:04PM) : I love the ai picture and how they zoomed in to make the video a little more dramatic [Edited]

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Alana M Alana M (Jan 27 2025 2:04PM) : I think that adding more details and creativity would've made the video more understanding.

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Idrissa C Idrissa C (Jan 27 2025 2:03PM) : I liked the transition for “Ella’s Death”

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Zahir J Zahir J (Jan 27 2025 2:03PM) : I like the intro and transition during the video

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Serena T Serena T (Jan 27 2025 2:03PM) : I like the music i feel like it fits the video

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Serena T Serena T (Jan 27 2025 2:03PM) : I liked the transition from the audio to the visuals too, why did you choose to do it like that

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Morgan C Morgan C (Jan 27 2025 2:00PM) : Who is the ai character supposed to be?

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Morgan C Morgan C (Jan 27 2025 2:04PM) : I like how informative this video was.

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Morgan C Morgan C (Jan 27 2025 2:03PM) : This is my favorite part I liked how although I haven’t read the book I think I got the gist of what’s happening in this chapter.

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Malaya K Malaya K (Jan 27 2025 2:01PM) : Feedback more

My favorite part of their presentation was their AI photo. I think their image captured the esteem of Dolores Johnson.

- Could there be more b-roll in this film?

- I liked the slow zoom that they used showing Dolores Johnson’s AI face in more and more detail.

Jan 27

Malaya K Malaya K (Jan 27 2025 2:02PM) : Feedback more

- I liked that they put the cast in the beginning and used the AI image as an intro

- I also liked that he repeated a piece of dialogue to emphasize it

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Malaya K's Question Malaya K and/or Explorations Coach (Jan 27 2025 2:03PM) : How does repeating a sentence make something more impactful? more

Explorations Coach with Malaya K's edits:

Repeating a sentence can make something more impactful because it grabs your attention and makes sure you remember it. When you hear or see something more than once, it feels more important and sticks in your mind. This is like when your favorite part of the presentation was the AI photo that captured the esteem of Dolores Johnson, and the repeated dialogue emphasized certain points.

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Aamir R Aamir R (Jan 27 2025 2:02PM) : i like how they got the photo of a lady and talk about the issues they have and what she struggles with and my question is that does she figure out her problems and solve them

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